The Wall Hanger
A traumatic fishing experience50 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Sounds like a whopper of a fishing tale. Many fishermen come up with them.
Maybe hunting grizzly bears would be safer.
Touch of humor thrown in for good measure.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Sounds like a whopper of a fishing tale. Many fishermen come up with them.
Maybe hunting grizzly bears would be safer.
Touch of humor thrown in for good measure.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Thanks for the review. I'm just getting healed up. I'll be ready for the grizzly this fall.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
It's a cute story in poetic form. Your imagination is very strong. Was this something you wrote long ago or over the past week specifically for this contest . Good luck.
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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It's a cute story in poetic form. Your imagination is very strong. Was this something you wrote long ago or over the past week specifically for this contest . Good luck.
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Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Tom. I wrote this awhile back - right after I caught that fish.
Comment from Michele Harber
Congratulations on your third-place finish, but how in the world did this not rank higher??!! You told your story in amazing detail, with drama worthy of Moby Dick, and a sense of humor. (I love that last verse!) Your rhymes are very well chosen, and your poem has a nice flow. I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Congratulations on your third-place finish, but how in the world did this not rank higher??!! You told your story in amazing detail, with drama worthy of Moby Dick, and a sense of humor. (I love that last verse!) Your rhymes are very well chosen, and your poem has a nice flow. I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2022
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Congratulations on your win. I think my topics are not serious enough for the judges sometimes.
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Thank you. I know what you mean about the topics. There are times I?ve felt that way too. Keep writing as well as you do - on any topic - and prove both of us wrong. You certainly have the talent to take the top spot.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' The Wall Hanger ', is an exceptionally well-written and entertaining piece.
Told with craft and skill this talented poet's work was a privilege to both read and review.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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' The Wall Hanger ', is an exceptionally well-written and entertaining piece.
Told with craft and skill this talented poet's work was a privilege to both read and review.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thanks, Duchess. It is a pleasure to entertain you.
You're welcome Paul. The compliment goes both ways.
Bless you,
the Duchess
Comment from MJK
I adore this piece -- the word choice, imagery, rhythm and the story itself all work together to create my new favorite fishing poem ever! And the closing line couldn't be better.
Since it's so well constructed, all I can offer is a couple of suggested edits: 1) Use "If I were too much shorter" ("were" as opposed to "was" is used when something is contrary to fact) 2) Include a hyphen in the phrase "square-tailed cuss" since "square-tailed" is a compound adjective (two words working together to form one adjective so far as meaning).
Thank you again for such grand entertainment. More please!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I adore this piece -- the word choice, imagery, rhythm and the story itself all work together to create my new favorite fishing poem ever! And the closing line couldn't be better.
Since it's so well constructed, all I can offer is a couple of suggested edits: 1) Use "If I were too much shorter" ("were" as opposed to "was" is used when something is contrary to fact) 2) Include a hyphen in the phrase "square-tailed cuss" since "square-tailed" is a compound adjective (two words working together to form one adjective so far as meaning).
Thank you again for such grand entertainment. More please!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Thanks for the great review, Melanie. I'll slip in the hyphen, but we Mainers hardly ever use the word "were".
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I love the story in your poem, the vivid descriptions, the humor, and the great last line. Your rhyme is mostly excellent, but in a number of places, the meter is off.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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I love the story in your poem, the vivid descriptions, the humor, and the great last line. Your rhyme is mostly excellent, but in a number of places, the meter is off.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thanks for the review, Verna. The poem is in iambic heptameter. I spread the seven feet over two lines. I don't like long lines. Sometimes this might seem like the meter is off. I'm pretty fussy about meter. If you look for the seven feet over two lines, I think you will find the meter to be okay.
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Thanks for the explanation, Paul. This is one I'm not used to.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Wall Hanger, is a fish story that really "catches" the imagination. Why Pecos Bill couldn't have done a better job landing that leviathan. Nicely told.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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This poem, The Wall Hanger, is a fish story that really "catches" the imagination. Why Pecos Bill couldn't have done a better job landing that leviathan. Nicely told.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thanks, Bill. If it hadn't been for that woodsman, I might not have lived to write the poem.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
We have all heard "big fish tales" and you captured it perfectly. You are incredibly detailed, which I love, for visualization. It's a great read and reads fluidly.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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We have all heard "big fish tales" and you captured it perfectly. You are incredibly detailed, which I love, for visualization. It's a great read and reads fluidly.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thanks, Heather. You mean you don't believe me?
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You are most welcome! I?m sure it happened some what like that lol
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is an excellent fish tale for this contest. I think the fishermen are going to vote for it, good luck. This story reminds me a bit of how Mark Twain might write this story. Really good work.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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This is an excellent fish tale for this contest. I think the fishermen are going to vote for it, good luck. This story reminds me a bit of how Mark Twain might write this story. Really good work.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Thanks, Terry. Mark Twain? Never thought of that comparison.
Comment from sue133
I really enjoyed your poem. The story was humerous (which we don't seem to get enough of these days!) and well crafted into an excellent poem. Did you go and hunt grizzly bears?
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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I really enjoyed your poem. The story was humerous (which we don't seem to get enough of these days!) and well crafted into an excellent poem. Did you go and hunt grizzly bears?
Comment Written 26-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2022
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Thanks, Sue. You are not the first person to ask that question. I haven't healed up from the battle with that trout yet.