Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Broken Hearted"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from pookietoo
A nice rhyming poem. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Best wishes and keep smiling. I hope you have a wonderful day. Enjoy the little things.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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A nice rhyming poem. Keep up the great work writing your poems. Best wishes and keep smiling. I hope you have a wonderful day. Enjoy the little things.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thank you you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written first try at a Terzanelle. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery that went well with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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This is a very well written first try at a Terzanelle. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery that went well with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Smiling back with gratitude, thank you!
Comment from Bill Schott
This terzanelle, Broken Hearted, has the proper formatting and uses the negatives of rain to bring the pain of relationships pouring into our minds.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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This terzanelle, Broken Hearted, has the proper formatting and uses the negatives of rain to bring the pain of relationships pouring into our minds.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks Bill
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have captured the feelings of the broken hearted girl so well in this poem, and wrote your first Terzanelle with panache! It's very well done, and I really enjoyed reading it. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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You have captured the feelings of the broken hearted girl so well in this poem, and wrote your first Terzanelle with panache! It's very well done, and I really enjoyed reading it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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HI Sandra, thanks for reading my work,
Comment from babykoala
This brilliantly written and portrays the despair of heartache so well! The language and the imagery of tears and rain and the internal havoc of despair through heartbreak is very clear in this piece and so we'll written.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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This brilliantly written and portrays the despair of heartache so well! The language and the imagery of tears and rain and the internal havoc of despair through heartbreak is very clear in this piece and so we'll written.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this poem.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Broken Hearted ', is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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' Broken Hearted ', is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Thank you, friend, be well and enjoy the weekend.
Hopefully well both have a great week end!!
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poetry form. Not easy to adhere to and make sense of the whole. This flows relative well. The repeated lines fall in fairly well. My one concern is that the quatrain does not follow the rhyme scheme described. You note an f A FA in instructions you have an fFfA. The problem may be both of the A lines in the first verse are the same and therefor are difficult to repeat twice in the last verse.
Thanks for sharing a revamp seems necessary to fit the form. A good read.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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An interesting poetry form. Not easy to adhere to and make sense of the whole. This flows relative well. The repeated lines fall in fairly well. My one concern is that the quatrain does not follow the rhyme scheme described. You note an f A FA in instructions you have an fFfA. The problem may be both of the A lines in the first verse are the same and therefor are difficult to repeat twice in the last verse.
Thanks for sharing a revamp seems necessary to fit the form. A good read.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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You are quite correct! I did fail to manage the last stanza correctly and I appreciate you pointing this corrective error out to me!
Comment from Boogienights
This is a sad poem about lost love, done in what looks like a difficult form of poetry. I really admire poets like you, who challenge themselves to learn new ways of writing.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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This is a sad poem about lost love, done in what looks like a difficult form of poetry. I really admire poets like you, who challenge themselves to learn new ways of writing.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Have yourself an most awesome weekend!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm not familiar with the form, so I have concentrated on the content. When our hearts are stirred and love could be a possibility we leave ourselves open to some pain when things don't work out. I enjoyed your sentiment here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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I'm not familiar with the form, so I have concentrated on the content. When our hearts are stirred and love could be a possibility we leave ourselves open to some pain when things don't work out. I enjoyed your sentiment here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thank you, possibly all have experienced such soundness in our youthful life lessons.
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for introducing me to this form, Jim! And you used the form to focus on an event and feeling, creating sympathy for the "young lass" who was jilted by her beau.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Thanks for introducing me to this form, Jim! And you used the form to focus on an event and feeling, creating sympathy for the "young lass" who was jilted by her beau.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Your welcome and enjoy the weekend forthcoming.