Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Janet Foor
Very clever and creative acrostic poem. You gave recognition and an education in the sonnet form beautifully in your well crafted poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Very clever and creative acrostic poem. You gave recognition and an education in the sonnet form beautifully in your well crafted poem.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Janet thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from SimianSavant
Thi looks like it was a fun one to write. I am curious what font you used. It looks nice and clear.
Sonnets are known, <= **I don't think you need this comma**
as "the little song" with fourteen lines, <= or this one, as it looks like a run-on going into the next sentence. It could be a period, or because it is just a line (not full prose) you could leave it without punctuation, where a pause is generally implied anyway, although subject to the reader's interpretation.
Adding English, French, Italian, Russian to the name, <= same observation here
Nice work!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thi looks like it was a fun one to write. I am curious what font you used. It looks nice and clear.
Sonnets are known, <= **I don't think you need this comma**
as "the little song" with fourteen lines, <= or this one, as it looks like a run-on going into the next sentence. It could be a period, or because it is just a line (not full prose) you could leave it without punctuation, where a pause is generally implied anyway, although subject to the reader's interpretation.
Adding English, French, Italian, Russian to the name, <= same observation here
Nice work!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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thank you for your observation and comments,very much appreciated!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry. Your acrostic is in good form. I like the way you formatted the lines with the bold first letter of each. You gave readers some great info on sonnets and masters of writers of them. I'm curious why you added s to the word sonnet, maybe to make the poem 14 lines. I like traditional sonnets, none of this modern day stuff.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed your contest entry. Your acrostic is in good form. I like the way you formatted the lines with the bold first letter of each. You gave readers some great info on sonnets and masters of writers of them. I'm curious why you added s to the word sonnet, maybe to make the poem 14 lines. I like traditional sonnets, none of this modern day stuff.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Hi Jan, yes i added the s for the precise reason. I tend to agree with your relfection on the modern sonnet writers.
Comment from Laurie Holding
This one interested me right away because of its title. I'm a sonnet writer, so I gravitate toward all things sonnet. The deliberate irony here, of course, is that the piece itself is an acrostic about a sonnet, not a sonnet in itself at all, and while that frustrated me at first reading, the second reading, aloud, made me recognize its humor and sincere bow to the masters while following the acrostic's own rules. Great work.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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This one interested me right away because of its title. I'm a sonnet writer, so I gravitate toward all things sonnet. The deliberate irony here, of course, is that the piece itself is an acrostic about a sonnet, not a sonnet in itself at all, and while that frustrated me at first reading, the second reading, aloud, made me recognize its humor and sincere bow to the masters while following the acrostic's own rules. Great work.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Sorry to have disappointed thee, but alas, I am one of those who struggles with sonnets, which gives you, much respect from me, for your talent.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Jim.
-I like the topic of your acrostic
and enjoyed reading it.
-You have effective imagery and details, too.
-I particularly like the E line with "eerily elusive" and
"So well balanced ending with sweet rhymes."
-I also liked all of the information in the second verse.
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
-I am putting my acrostic in for Sun.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Jim.
-I like the topic of your acrostic
and enjoyed reading it.
-You have effective imagery and details, too.
-I particularly like the E line with "eerily elusive" and
"So well balanced ending with sweet rhymes."
-I also liked all of the information in the second verse.
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
-I am putting my acrostic in for Sun.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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I watch for it, have a great weekend!
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Thanks, and you do the same.
Comment from zanya
It's quite a feat to achieve in the Acrostic format for the contest - to convey the intricacies of the Sonnet format together with background information on its history
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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It's quite a feat to achieve in the Acrostic format for the contest - to convey the intricacies of the Sonnet format together with background information on its history
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Zanya, thank you for taking time to read and comment on my work.
Comment from karenina
This homage to the sonnet levitateS off the page... For each of us who have bent over our pens, reaching for the perfect word, the meter... This form enchants! I read Shakespeare's Sonnet 116 and sigh...
I hear Neil Diamond's classic hit and think:
"Iamb I Said!"
Smile...
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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This homage to the sonnet levitateS off the page... For each of us who have bent over our pens, reaching for the perfect word, the meter... This form enchants! I read Shakespeare's Sonnet 116 and sigh...
I hear Neil Diamond's classic hit and think:
"Iamb I Said!"
Smile...
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Oh yes! Thank you, friend!
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Smile.....
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your acrostic is excellent in every respect--skillfully written, paying tribute true sonnets, what makes them sonnets, and master sonneteers. They'd be mortified to see what passes for a sonnet in some circles nowadays.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Your acrostic is excellent in every respect--skillfully written, paying tribute true sonnets, what makes them sonnets, and master sonneteers. They'd be mortified to see what passes for a sonnet in some circles nowadays.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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Smiling and chuckling ...
Comment from sue133
A great contribution to the acrostic competition with the added bonus of a sonnet. It is very clever and your expose of all those brilliant minds reminded me how amazingly creative the human mind is. Thank you.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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A great contribution to the acrostic competition with the added bonus of a sonnet. It is very clever and your expose of all those brilliant minds reminded me how amazingly creative the human mind is. Thank you.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2022
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We are so fortunate to have these works of art cvaptured for the eons!
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very nice acrostic poem with a lesson to boot. Nice reference to some of the masters. A very good division between the two stanzas. Thanks for the Italy fact.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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A very nice acrostic poem with a lesson to boot. Nice reference to some of the masters. A very good division between the two stanzas. Thanks for the Italy fact.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2022
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You are welcome!