Bus Stop Holiday
Two teens skip school.15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod,
Nice entry for "The Past" writing prompt. Looks like the new girl met her first friend in a new town. Seems like it was luck all the way around. Pete caught it from his father, no doubt. But I don't think he'll regret his decision at all. "Hi, Noreen!"
When I was young, I was as shy
as I could be. Girls passed me by."
You told a nice story here, Rod. I especially like the artwork you went with, too. Nice painting that fits the poem perfectly!
Good Luck!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Hi Rod,
Nice entry for "The Past" writing prompt. Looks like the new girl met her first friend in a new town. Seems like it was luck all the way around. Pete caught it from his father, no doubt. But I don't think he'll regret his decision at all. "Hi, Noreen!"
When I was young, I was as shy
as I could be. Girls passed me by."
You told a nice story here, Rod. I especially like the artwork you went with, too. Nice painting that fits the poem perfectly!
Good Luck!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 23-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, Kimbob, for sharing and praising BUS STOP HOLIDAY. I am delighted you enjoyed the story of Petey and Norene?s holiday. Rod
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I don't remember skipping when I was a kid, but during my long teaching career, I'd always get wind of "senior skip day"! (I taught seniors.) Your narrative poem is very well-written and descriptive of a day out of
school--when no misbehavior transpired but a friendship was born.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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I don't remember skipping when I was a kid, but during my long teaching career, I'd always get wind of "senior skip day"! (I taught seniors.) Your narrative poem is very well-written and descriptive of a day out of
school--when no misbehavior transpired but a friendship was born.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022
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I, too, remember those senior cut days in late May when I was teaching. Many thanks for sharing my poem, Janice.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
The picture is great. It goes with the poem. One of young crushes. Our minds only focus on the moment. We could get in much trouble. You never forget those first crushes. Thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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The picture is great. It goes with the poem. One of young crushes. Our minds only focus on the moment. We could get in much trouble. You never forget those first crushes. Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Carolyn, for sharing my poem.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
A sweet story of a day spent cutting school with Norene!
Nicely rhymed and in good meter.
Good luck in the voting booth! Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your poem.
A sweet story of a day spent cutting school with Norene!
Nicely rhymed and in good meter.
Good luck in the voting booth! Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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I am delighted you enjoyed my trip into the past, Debra. Thank you for your kind praise.
Comment from kahpot
How gorgeous, young love is so romantic, and it is those types of meetings that we remember the most, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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How gorgeous, young love is so romantic, and it is those types of meetings that we remember the most, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing and praising my poem, kahpot.
Comment from lyenochka
What a sweet story! And well done with the rhyming quatrains. I am hoping it was how you met your wife if autobiographical and true! Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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What a sweet story! And well done with the rhyming quatrains. I am hoping it was how you met your wife if autobiographical and true! Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for sharing my poem, lyenochka. No, the story is not autobiographical.
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very creative entry, fresh and different - good! It has smooth rhyme, flows well, and tells a true story. I enjoyed it and send you best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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This is a very creative entry, fresh and different - good! It has smooth rhyme, flows well, and tells a true story. I enjoyed it and send you best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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I am so pleased you found my narrative poem fresh and different, Wendy. Many thanks for sharing and praising it.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Bus Stop Holiday', is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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'Bus Stop Holiday', is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my narrative poem, duchess. Many thanks for sharing.
Dear Anon,
You're more than welcome.
Bless you and have a great week
the Duchess
I certainly did. Bless you and have a great week, the Duchess
Comment from jessizero
This was a great story told about the past. It is so sweet and you told it well. You used the prompt well. Thank you for sharing, and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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This was a great story told about the past. It is so sweet and you told it well. You used the prompt well. Thank you for sharing, and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for sharing and praising my poem, jessizero.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I really enjoyed reading your poem. You did a nice job with the prompt. The photo you chose works perfectly. I thought your rhymes worked well and the pace was just right.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. You did a nice job with the prompt. The photo you chose works perfectly. I thought your rhymes worked well and the pace was just right.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing and praising my poem. I am so pleased you enjoyed it, K.L.