Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Night Walk"Musings of an old man - 2022
26 total reviews
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I love the poem and the picture, both beautiful. Nothing can compare to the love of a couple who have lived and loved together for a number of years. I could feel your concern for your wife and was delighted to read she made a full recovery.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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I love the poem and the picture, both beautiful. Nothing can compare to the love of a couple who have lived and loved together for a number of years. I could feel your concern for your wife and was delighted to read she made a full recovery.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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Verna, thank you! I delight in the answer to prayers!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A stunning and beautiful poem of love and tenderness. The imagery presented lets your reader see the scene.
You can give have my last six as it is well-deserved.
I am glad your bride is now cancer-free after going through some rough times.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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A stunning and beautiful poem of love and tenderness. The imagery presented lets your reader see the scene.
You can give have my last six as it is well-deserved.
I am glad your bride is now cancer-free after going through some rough times.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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Mary, I am so grateful, thank you! I delight in the answer to prayers!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. First just let me say that the pic you chose is beautiful and your free verse was the perfect accompaniment. great job!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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Hello JLR a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. First just let me say that the pic you chose is beautiful and your free verse was the perfect accompaniment. great job!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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My friend, thank you. I hope that your week is filled with Joy and Peace.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Isn't it wonderful that people don't need to spend a pile of money on a cruise or some other big venture to create great memories?! As your lovely, moving poem conveys, a nighttime stroll with spouse and pet is enough.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Isn't it wonderful that people don't need to spend a pile of money on a cruise or some other big venture to create great memories?! As your lovely, moving poem conveys, a nighttime stroll with spouse and pet is enough.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Janice, yes, this is most true. The older I become , thankfully, the wiser I am.
Comment from jessizero
This was a beautiful piece written for the picture. I am so happy to hear that your wife is cancer free. Thank you for sharing this piece here. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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This was a beautiful piece written for the picture. I am so happy to hear that your wife is cancer free. Thank you for sharing this piece here. Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Jenifer Bellott
I'm quite selective with my six stars, and this poem most definitely earned it. First of all, it brought tears to my eyes, and any poem that evokes such strong emotion deserves that sixth star.
I began tearing up at the lines, "The still night does nothing to slow the rush of love/that is tugging itself outward from the depths of my soul" because of the sweetness and tenderness it expressed. The lines immediately following elicited a different sort of tear, because I can relate to the fear and stress cancer causes. I'm so happy to hear your wife has been five years cancer free! Amen, indeed!
Secondly, I gave this poem six stars because of your use of imagery and clever wordplay. Not only did your descriptions make me believe I could see the scene as it unfolded, I could feel it--specifically in the line, "taking in the last of summer's warmth rising from the smooth pavers." I appreciated your internal rhyme of " measure of pleasure".
Finally your last stanza expressed such a sweet sentiment and summed up the story and your love for her beautifully. I enjoyed your use of the word "sips" following your wish to "bottle" the moment-such a nice intertwining.
You did a fabulous job, and I look forward to reading more from you!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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I'm quite selective with my six stars, and this poem most definitely earned it. First of all, it brought tears to my eyes, and any poem that evokes such strong emotion deserves that sixth star.
I began tearing up at the lines, "The still night does nothing to slow the rush of love/that is tugging itself outward from the depths of my soul" because of the sweetness and tenderness it expressed. The lines immediately following elicited a different sort of tear, because I can relate to the fear and stress cancer causes. I'm so happy to hear your wife has been five years cancer free! Amen, indeed!
Secondly, I gave this poem six stars because of your use of imagery and clever wordplay. Not only did your descriptions make me believe I could see the scene as it unfolded, I could feel it--specifically in the line, "taking in the last of summer's warmth rising from the smooth pavers." I appreciated your internal rhyme of " measure of pleasure".
Finally your last stanza expressed such a sweet sentiment and summed up the story and your love for her beautifully. I enjoyed your use of the word "sips" following your wish to "bottle" the moment-such a nice intertwining.
You did a fabulous job, and I look forward to reading more from you!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Jenifer Bellott, thank you! This is among one of the best reviews I have I enjoyed on FS since I joined. I am honored by your reflections.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is a beautifully written free verse. I love that the artwork served as your muse.
The writing is descriptive and pulled me in straight away. The memory you shared is full of emotion and the sentiment is heartfelt.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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This is a beautifully written free verse. I love that the artwork served as your muse.
The writing is descriptive and pulled me in straight away. The memory you shared is full of emotion and the sentiment is heartfelt.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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K.L. Thank you for reading and commenting on my free verse.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello JLR, a heartfelt poem and a poem that makes you say Ah as the reader holds back a tear after reading the last verse which is my favorite. Your poem has brought the photo to life. Real writing. I can see it all.
As a five-year cancer survivor, I can relate to this poem and know the joy of being cancer-free. The two of you have climbed a mountain together.
Best wishes for continued well health. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Hello JLR, a heartfelt poem and a poem that makes you say Ah as the reader holds back a tear after reading the last verse which is my favorite. Your poem has brought the photo to life. Real writing. I can see it all.
As a five-year cancer survivor, I can relate to this poem and know the joy of being cancer-free. The two of you have climbed a mountain together.
Best wishes for continued well health. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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LateBloomer, first and foremost congratulations on your soaring above the fray of life yourself and thank you so much for your good wishes.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Simply beautiful my friend. Your words fill the photo with wonderment and a sense of despair. seemingly a last walk for some time to come. Perhaps for this loved one it was a chance to grow, to start over and to flourish.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Simply beautiful my friend. Your words fill the photo with wonderment and a sense of despair. seemingly a last walk for some time to come. Perhaps for this loved one it was a chance to grow, to start over and to flourish.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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🙏 thank you and yes rough patches to strengthen bonds meant to be everlasting, I am so very fortunate this is so.
Comment from Anne Johnston
This is such a beautiful picture and I love the words you have shared in your poem to describe it. Battling cancer is no fun, but I am glad that she had your support and that you have great memories to share.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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This is such a beautiful picture and I love the words you have shared in your poem to describe it. Battling cancer is no fun, but I am glad that she had your support and that you have great memories to share.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Thank you for the review and glad wishes!
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You are welcome