Trust in Jesus Christ
Contest Entry6 total reviews
Comment from JLR
Technically spot on! Poet, constructing a Trinet to deliver a strong poetic feeling is not an easy feat. You have delivered a worthy entry to the contest, and I wish you the best in all future writings.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Technically spot on! Poet, constructing a Trinet to deliver a strong poetic feeling is not an easy feat. You have delivered a worthy entry to the contest, and I wish you the best in all future writings.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from amahra
I really liked this poem. I didn't check to see if it kept with the strict guidelines just knew I liked it. I also liked the artwork that you chose. I bid you best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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I really liked this poem. I didn't check to see if it kept with the strict guidelines just knew I liked it. I also liked the artwork that you chose. I bid you best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Sarah Tummey
This poem is confusing. The third line - surely if you're asking someone to trust in Jesus, He's not their Saviour yet? So why do you use the word 'Our'? What about "Let Him be your own Saviour"?
Also, the fourth and fifth lines: What do you mean? If you mean the person being filled with the Holy Spirit, "He'll pray for you to have Holy Spirit" might make more sense. If you mean increased holiness/sanctification for the person, perhaps "He'll help us pray for your Spirit's holiness".
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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This poem is confusing. The third line - surely if you're asking someone to trust in Jesus, He's not their Saviour yet? So why do you use the word 'Our'? What about "Let Him be your own Saviour"?
Also, the fourth and fifth lines: What do you mean? If you mean the person being filled with the Holy Spirit, "He'll pray for you to have Holy Spirit" might make more sense. If you mean increased holiness/sanctification for the person, perhaps "He'll help us pray for your Spirit's holiness".
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and very well written poem about our Lord, Jesus Christ. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery you chose from the art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is a very nice and very well written poem about our Lord, Jesus Christ. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery you chose from the art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from DragonSkulls
You did a fantastic job at the contest requirements. You chose a great picture as well. The only suggestion I could add is to reedit the piece and center it. That way it would look like the cross. That's what I think the creator of this contest was going for with the syllable count as it is. I think it being in the shape of a cross would make more of an impact. It's all up to you though. Best wishes in the contest, author.
DS
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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You did a fantastic job at the contest requirements. You chose a great picture as well. The only suggestion I could add is to reedit the piece and center it. That way it would look like the cross. That's what I think the creator of this contest was going for with the syllable count as it is. I think it being in the shape of a cross would make more of an impact. It's all up to you though. Best wishes in the contest, author.
DS
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you! I did what you suggested. Thank you for your help!
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Oh yeah, a whole lot better. Again, best of luck.
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Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet,
This is a lovely poem about surrendering our heats to Jesus our saviour.
HE died on the cross so that we could live in eternity in heaven.
But we must make the right choice , take the right path that leads to HIM.
The Bible tells us how to please Him.
PS:in this poem one must count the words not syllables. ( wink)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Ciao mystery poet,
This is a lovely poem about surrendering our heats to Jesus our saviour.
HE died on the cross so that we could live in eternity in heaven.
But we must make the right choice , take the right path that leads to HIM.
The Bible tells us how to please Him.
PS:in this poem one must count the words not syllables. ( wink)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you for your help! I have fixed the poem. Thank you!
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Looks great .. a small typo in last line
Dear not daer ( wink)
Keep safe!
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I did it. Thank you for your help!
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Smiles !