Morning Alarm
Sweet dreams... (true story flash 100 words)26 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
hahhah, this was cute, well told in 100 words, it was the pet instead of a lover, caught me off guard, no errors noted in the work, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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hahhah, this was cute, well told in 100 words, it was the pet instead of a lover, caught me off guard, no errors noted in the work, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Morning Alarm, sets the scene where the reader begins imagining a couple of women waking from a restful sleep which may have followed a fun romp. Nope, just the cat.
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This story, Morning Alarm, sets the scene where the reader begins imagining a couple of women waking from a restful sleep which may have followed a fun romp. Nope, just the cat.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Lisa,
Funny! Yes, the rooster to the bird world is like the bag pipes to an orchestra. It's no wonder Lily flew out from underneath the covers. She's probably still hiding somewhere. It will take a lot of coaxing to get her out.
Nice entry for the True Story Flash... Good Luck with it!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Hi Lisa,
Funny! Yes, the rooster to the bird world is like the bag pipes to an orchestra. It's no wonder Lily flew out from underneath the covers. She's probably still hiding somewhere. It will take a lot of coaxing to get her out.
Nice entry for the True Story Flash... Good Luck with it!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thanks for your fun review. I like your analogy with bagpipes - so true.
It didn't take Lily long to get her bravery back... she walked back into the room full of bravado again soon after, pretending she'd been joking about fleeing in fear.
Comment from poetwatch
That is some kitty you got there, Jenny. :) I sleep with my Yorkie, Penny, who lies between my wife and me. She prays with me every night. I kiss my wife and then her or the other way around. I scratch her head so she can fall asleep and scratch my wife as well. Only then can I sleep. :) This entry you entered is a very good one for the True Story Flash. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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That is some kitty you got there, Jenny. :) I sleep with my Yorkie, Penny, who lies between my wife and me. She prays with me every night. I kiss my wife and then her or the other way around. I scratch her head so she can fall asleep and scratch my wife as well. Only then can I sleep. :) This entry you entered is a very good one for the True Story Flash. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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We each seem to have our evening routines. I hope you don't scratch because Penny (or your wife) has fleas!
Comment from Michele Harber
Very funny! I suspected immediately that your companion was Lily, as my cat often lays "relaxed against me as we [slumber]," and the alarm clock set to different bird calls was a dead giveaway. Never once, though, did I suspect that she'd be roused by the crowing of a rooster (definitely not the first sound I think of when I think of bird calls). I love the image painted by "she erupted from under the bedcovers."
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Very funny! I suspected immediately that your companion was Lily, as my cat often lays "relaxed against me as we [slumber]," and the alarm clock set to different bird calls was a dead giveaway. Never once, though, did I suspect that she'd be roused by the crowing of a rooster (definitely not the first sound I think of when I think of bird calls). I love the image painted by "she erupted from under the bedcovers."
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I knew all along (since this was a true story) that your "beautiful companion" was Lily. But I still laughed at the erupting out of bed at the sound of the rooster! I'd love an alarm like that.
Great descriptions of contented sleep and her "sensuous body."
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Lol. I knew all along (since this was a true story) that your "beautiful companion" was Lily. But I still laughed at the erupting out of bed at the sound of the rooster! I'd love an alarm like that.
Great descriptions of contented sleep and her "sensuous body."
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thanks Helen - you know me (and Lily) so well. Most of the morning radio birdcalls are native birds so it is a nice way to get to recognise their different songs. The sudden rooster call was very unexpected and definitely alarming for both of us.
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Lol. In Honolulu, someone rescued a rooster and fed him some years back and now there are so many roosters crowing in the middle of the concrete jungle. Chooks are hardy !
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In my city the council just passed a by-law forbidding ownership of roosters... up to 5 hens allowed.
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That makes sense - it can be very noisy! Lol. My friend grew some where they couldn't have roosters but they were city folk and could not successfully kill the rooster for a meal. I think they avoided eating chicken for a long time...
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I doubt I could kill anything. Hunger makes people do things though.
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We know healthy veggie alternatives! 😊
Comment from Debra White
Hello LisaMay,
I have to admit that I wouldn't enjoy being 'cock-a-doodle-doo'd' out of my dreams either!
I enjoyed reading your true story flash. It's a tad misleading, but that's always a positive - something quirky to remember!
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Hello LisaMay,
I have to admit that I wouldn't enjoy being 'cock-a-doodle-doo'd' out of my dreams either!
I enjoyed reading your true story flash. It's a tad misleading, but that's always a positive - something quirky to remember!
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing, Debra. That crowing rooster also alarmed me - other morning radio birdcalls have been musical songs of native birds.
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your story. It has a very good surprise ending which is what flash fiction is all about. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Take care. Jen.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed reading your story. It has a very good surprise ending which is what flash fiction is all about. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Take care. Jen.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing, Jen. That crowing rooster also alarmed me - other morning radio birdcalls have been musical songs of native birds.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I wondered what Lily was going to do when she heard a bird call. I never suspected it would be a rooster. This is a cute story that starts out sounding like Lily until I came to caressing her sensuous body. But in the end, I was glad it was Lily. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I wondered what Lily was going to do when she heard a bird call. I never suspected it would be a rooster. This is a cute story that starts out sounding like Lily until I came to caressing her sensuous body. But in the end, I was glad it was Lily. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. That crowing rooster alarmed me as well as Lily - other morning radio birdcalls have been musical songs of native birds.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I bet she was surprised. I have not heard a rooster call in person or radio. I have only heard one on TV in movies. I think it is interesting that there is a station to play different bird calls.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I bet she was surprised. I have not heard a rooster call in person or radio. I have only heard one on TV in movies. I think it is interesting that there is a station to play different bird calls.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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The bird calls on the radio are usually native bird song, much less alarming than a rooster's crowing.