Strange Power
Contest Entry2 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
This was a scary story indeed. You did a great job of scaring the reader. It was well-written, I think. Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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This was a scary story indeed. You did a great job of scaring the reader. It was well-written, I think. Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from lancellot
I think you have a good idea here. I think some rewrite and rewording is need to make it flow better as a story.
Broken {glasses} appear near his entire body, destroying all his flesh.
-glass
- if the glass is destroying his flesh, then you want the on him, not near him.
The power I have mentioned is the demons cast him on it.
- this sentence is confusing. Need a rewrite.
It is the spell where broken {mirrors} appear near him, constantly killing his soul.
- why didn't you call it mirrors at first?
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I think you have a good idea here. I think some rewrite and rewording is need to make it flow better as a story.
Broken {glasses} appear near his entire body, destroying all his flesh.
-glass
- if the glass is destroying his flesh, then you want the on him, not near him.
The power I have mentioned is the demons cast him on it.
- this sentence is confusing. Need a rewrite.
It is the spell where broken {mirrors} appear near him, constantly killing his soul.
- why didn't you call it mirrors at first?
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you! Okay, is it good enough for a five stars rating? Please check. Did I make the sentence clear?
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Yes. better.
Good luck
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Thank you!