August Heat
A sonnet20 total reviews
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
I'm not that knowledgeable about the requirements of a sonnet, but I enjoyed your poem very much. The words are very evocative of the landscape in the Southwest desert regions in August. The sadness the heat brings is made understandable in this poem. I really like the line: "They swirl then settle where an old barn stood,
a grassless splotch of ground, maltreated, bare."
Thanks for this sensitive poem.
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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I'm not that knowledgeable about the requirements of a sonnet, but I enjoyed your poem very much. The words are very evocative of the landscape in the Southwest desert regions in August. The sadness the heat brings is made understandable in this poem. I really like the line: "They swirl then settle where an old barn stood,
a grassless splotch of ground, maltreated, bare."
Thanks for this sensitive poem.
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thank you so much, K. Lang, for taking the time to review my poem and pointing out the line you really like. It is already getting hot in Chicago and I dread what?s coming this summer. Rod
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rod,
You've written an excellent sonnet with exact rhymes and very good meter,
and a fine twist in quatrain three, as the theme shifts from nature to the death of a beloved grandfather. The reflective couplet also works well.
That's quite an alliterating sentence at the start of quatrain two.
Having been born in August, I have some fondness for the month,
but since this is a subverted sonnet, I concur with your antipathy for the month of heat.
Well done.
Best wishes for a great summer, including August.
Robert
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Hello Rod,
You've written an excellent sonnet with exact rhymes and very good meter,
and a fine twist in quatrain three, as the theme shifts from nature to the death of a beloved grandfather. The reflective couplet also works well.
That's quite an alliterating sentence at the start of quatrain two.
Having been born in August, I have some fondness for the month,
but since this is a subverted sonnet, I concur with your antipathy for the month of heat.
Well done.
Best wishes for a great summer, including August.
Robert
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Robert, for taking the time to write this comprehensive review of my poem. I truly appreciate your high praise. Rod
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'August Heat', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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'August Heat', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thank you so much, duchess, for your praise of my sonnet. Your review is much appreciated. Rod
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Rod you deserved both.
Take care and have a great week,
the Duchess
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! This is a perfectly crafted sonnet and you not only covered the physical effects of the oppressive August heat (liked the bleaching of the sky) but you also give us the emotional effect it has (powerful volta in your third stanza). Congratulations on the third place finish.
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Wow! This is a perfectly crafted sonnet and you not only covered the physical effects of the oppressive August heat (liked the bleaching of the sky) but you also give us the emotional effect it has (powerful volta in your third stanza). Congratulations on the third place finish.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thank you so much, lyenochka, for your marvelous review of my sonnet and the congrats. Rod
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
Sorry I missed your beautiful poem.
First off I love all the detail in describing the harshness of summer.
I m not a heat lover autumn is my queen.
Secondly , the father s death caught me of guard .. it delivered a punch seeing my father died suddenly too.
I can understand why the boy hated august , I don't like doctors seeing only an hour before my papa ' death , our local doctor told me he would be okay , he just needed meds ( for a bad flu) and rest.
He clearly underestimated my father's health conditions. ( sigh)
You penned a beautiful piece of poetry that drew me in immediately.
I also love your style ..( old English poetry does not appeal much to me)
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Ciao!
Sorry I missed your beautiful poem.
First off I love all the detail in describing the harshness of summer.
I m not a heat lover autumn is my queen.
Secondly , the father s death caught me of guard .. it delivered a punch seeing my father died suddenly too.
I can understand why the boy hated august , I don't like doctors seeing only an hour before my papa ' death , our local doctor told me he would be okay , he just needed meds ( for a bad flu) and rest.
He clearly underestimated my father's health conditions. ( sigh)
You penned a beautiful piece of poetry that drew me in immediately.
I also love your style ..( old English poetry does not appeal much to me)
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Wow! You really made my day, tempeste, with this high-praising review of my sonnet and that six-star bonus. I am truly flattered you love my style. I am saddened by your recounting of your father?s unexpected death. Doctors often misdiagnosed my mother who constantly suffered from illness or ailments. Again, many thanks! Rod
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I m sorry to hear about your mamma s sufferings .. and her passing( sigh)
a capable doctor is a treasure to cherish.
Due to the pandemic, the health system in my country has completely collapsed.
My mamma died in Dec2006 and pa in Sept. 2017.
I miss them but I am glad they are not here to endure Italy s ruin.
Ciao!
Comment from Boogienights
An incredibly descriptive poem that paints a picture in the mind of the reader. I can't stand the heat of high summer so this gives me a bit of anxiety. Thanks so much for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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An incredibly descriptive poem that paints a picture in the mind of the reader. I can't stand the heat of high summer so this gives me a bit of anxiety. Thanks so much for sharing. :)
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Boogienights, for your high praise of my sonnet.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Very nice, descriptive discussion on what August might really be. I especially liked "cycloning curled-up leaves" but you had so many unique, descriptive phrases in this little tale that it was difficult to point one out. I really liked it.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Very nice, descriptive discussion on what August might really be. I especially liked "cycloning curled-up leaves" but you had so many unique, descriptive phrases in this little tale that it was difficult to point one out. I really liked it.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I am so pleased you really liked my sonnet, Gary. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Whew! The requirements for this piece were restrictive, but you seem to have met the challenge. The poem took a dark twist with your grandpa's death added to the horrible heat of August. The last two lines bring the poem to a settled, make sense conclusion. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Whew! The requirements for this piece were restrictive, but you seem to have met the challenge. The poem took a dark twist with your grandpa's death added to the horrible heat of August. The last two lines bring the poem to a settled, make sense conclusion. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your insightful review of my sonnet.
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You are most welcome!
Comment from Gloria ....
What an interesting contest idea. I think you have written a fine sonnet here, and certainly considered outside the mainstream of the usual format.
Yes, summer certainly can hold different associations in our memories, depending of what we experienced.
Wishing you great luck in the voting booth. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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What an interesting contest idea. I think you have written a fine sonnet here, and certainly considered outside the mainstream of the usual format.
Yes, summer certainly can hold different associations in our memories, depending of what we experienced.
Wishing you great luck in the voting booth. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Many thanks for sharing and praising my sonnet, Gloria.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
This is an awesome account of your feelings of August and why it is such a month of despair for you. I never thought about relating it to death before, but it is also the month that I lost my mother. Regardless, it is a lovely poem and you so deserve this contest win my friend.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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This is an awesome account of your feelings of August and why it is such a month of despair for you. I never thought about relating it to death before, but it is also the month that I lost my mother. Regardless, it is a lovely poem and you so deserve this contest win my friend.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you for your very kind praise of my sonnet, Debi. I am saddened that it brings back memories of your own loss.