Tucker: The Getaway (Part-5)
The threesome breaks free-temporarily.34 total reviews
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hey Ric!
Tucker gets away with some Houdini-like skill and saves T.D. and Tammy (good job!) from the acid bath. This part pulses forward like a well-oiled action flick.
---"Big Heavy sat slumped over, sound asleep in the driver's seat." --Criminals are so stupid. I know Heavy is probably tired, but sleeping? Maybe he's a diabetic and just ate a Subway sammich. All those carbs would certainly make one want a quick nap. In any case, guards who sleep on the job are not much good to criminal mastermind like Farnsworth.
---"eating Vienna sausages, Cheetos, and drinking Mountain Dew." --Haha! "The cornerstone of any nutritious breakfast!" Man, what a combination of tastes! Of course, after a hit off the bong you described a while back, this would probably fit the bill!
Just a couple of things:
---"they' s at Farnsworth farm near Dry Gulch Road."" --You got an extra space between the apostrophe and "s" in "they's.:
---"turning smiles into panicked surprise as the tower exploded instantaneously" --Just a suggestion. Would "instantly" work better here rather than "instantaneously?"
Out of the frying pan, into the fire. Man, you puttin' Tucker and Tammy through the ringer! Are they ever going to have time for a little intimacy? I guess we shall see!
Patrick
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Hey Ric!
Tucker gets away with some Houdini-like skill and saves T.D. and Tammy (good job!) from the acid bath. This part pulses forward like a well-oiled action flick.
---"Big Heavy sat slumped over, sound asleep in the driver's seat." --Criminals are so stupid. I know Heavy is probably tired, but sleeping? Maybe he's a diabetic and just ate a Subway sammich. All those carbs would certainly make one want a quick nap. In any case, guards who sleep on the job are not much good to criminal mastermind like Farnsworth.
---"eating Vienna sausages, Cheetos, and drinking Mountain Dew." --Haha! "The cornerstone of any nutritious breakfast!" Man, what a combination of tastes! Of course, after a hit off the bong you described a while back, this would probably fit the bill!
Just a couple of things:
---"they' s at Farnsworth farm near Dry Gulch Road."" --You got an extra space between the apostrophe and "s" in "they's.:
---"turning smiles into panicked surprise as the tower exploded instantaneously" --Just a suggestion. Would "instantly" work better here rather than "instantaneously?"
Out of the frying pan, into the fire. Man, you puttin' Tucker and Tammy through the ringer! Are they ever going to have time for a little intimacy? I guess we shall see!
Patrick
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Patrick, for taking time out to read my foolishness. And yes, "instantly" works much better than "instantaneously." I try to use the simplest words most of the time, just like picking up my feet going up steps. But sometimes, inevitably, I stump my toe and bust my ass. A little intimacy would be good, but you know how it goes, once you've had it, it's never quite as exciting as the first time. And I'm sure the female variety would agree.
I appreciate YOU!
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"A little intimacy would be good, but you know how it goes, once you've had it, it's never quite as exciting as the first time. And I'm sure the female variety would agree." --Fair. 🤣
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Got to say the ending of five was a surprise. How? Did the Motley Crew get out ahead and why did they know where they were heading. Next up. Chapter 6. It's not easy finding 150 words chapter after chapter. Mind if I copy and paste?
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Got to say the ending of five was a surprise. How? Did the Motley Crew get out ahead and why did they know where they were heading. Next up. Chapter 6. It's not easy finding 150 words chapter after chapter. Mind if I copy and paste?
Comment Written 20-May-2024
reply by the author on 20-May-2024
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Yes, it's a real chore to keep up the 150 count at any time, but one chapter right after the other, I'm sure it's nearly impossible. I can't believe you're still reading these. It must be torture by now. LOL. Much appreciated!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Still good still got the questions.************************************************************************************************************************************
Karen
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Still good still got the questions.************************************************************************************************************************************
Karen
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I'm glad you're still asking questions. In my world, people don't always want just answers, as they get tired of hearing them. If I can keep you asking questions, then you think you're figuring things out on your own. LOL. Thanks for hanging with me. :-)
Comment from irishauthorme
Another great twist! Yeah, things were going a little too smooth, with Tucker's miracle escape, and his luck commandeering the Escalade and handling of 'Heavy.'
Pretty accurate on the FBI field offices and the purpose and intent of the CIA and different acids, do you have a law-enforcement background?
And yeah, the Sinaloa, deadly.
Good story!
irish
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Another great twist! Yeah, things were going a little too smooth, with Tucker's miracle escape, and his luck commandeering the Escalade and handling of 'Heavy.'
Pretty accurate on the FBI field offices and the purpose and intent of the CIA and different acids, do you have a law-enforcement background?
And yeah, the Sinaloa, deadly.
Good story!
irish
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Irish, for taking time out to read these chapters that don't offer any reward. I sure didn't expect you to read any of them, but each chapter sort of builds on the one before. Like chapters, one, two, three, and four pretty much just introduce the characters and set the stage. From what I remember. LOL. I don't have a law enforcement background. I was the one avoiding the cops. I appreciate the time you've spent on my foolishness! Thanks again!
Comment from Susan Newell
Ric,
I continue to be enthralled with your narrative. This last twist at the end has left me in heightened suspense.
I have noticed that you have a tendency to occasionally leave verbs out of your sentences and I have made some editing comments below.
Sue
pick-up the pieces ==> pick up (hyphenated only for nouns like trucks and women)
Shifting his weight side-to-side, the chair rolled over. ==> he rolled the chair over (opening phrase refers to Tucker, not the chair)
just past the gate's bottom-rung of wood framing. -- don't need hyphen
Reaching the thugs' isle ==> aisle
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Ric,
I continue to be enthralled with your narrative. This last twist at the end has left me in heightened suspense.
I have noticed that you have a tendency to occasionally leave verbs out of your sentences and I have made some editing comments below.
Sue
pick-up the pieces ==> pick up (hyphenated only for nouns like trucks and women)
Shifting his weight side-to-side, the chair rolled over. ==> he rolled the chair over (opening phrase refers to Tucker, not the chair)
just past the gate's bottom-rung of wood framing. -- don't need hyphen
Reaching the thugs' isle ==> aisle
Comment Written 04-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Sue, for your kind words, comments and suggestions, and generous review. Yes, I always make more than my fair share of mistakes, but believe it not, there used to be more. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
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You are welcome, Ric. Your writing is well worth the time to read. After I wrote this review, I got to thinking about "pick-up" and realized that current style among many is to eliminate the hyphen altogether and create a compound word, pickup. Hyphenated words are difficult for me because so many have been turned into compound words. My eyes were tired last night, but I will read Part 6 today. Who knows, you may end up with a novel.
Sue
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Congratulations on your Story of the Month nomination. :) I love that they end up in Florida. Great ending to leave the reader in suspense for the next instalment.
Cheers,
Erika
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Congratulations on your Story of the Month nomination. :) I love that they end up in Florida. Great ending to leave the reader in suspense for the next instalment.
Cheers,
Erika
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Erika, for your kind words and generous review. And of course for reading the chapters in reverse. LOL. I doubt they will make much sense that way, but it billboards your kindness. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Ric
You definitely know how to place a clear picture of what you are saying in ones mind. As I was reading of what you said, yes placed a clear vision in my mind; here is one of many parts
that caught my full attention---
Equipped with a remote 1,400-pound ceiling lift, tracks covered the barn. Tucker hooked up and hoisted the bodies across to the acid filled barrels and removed the bolt locking rings and tops.
A sick look washed-over Tammy's face as she said, "Oh no, Tucker, please . . . you can't do that."
"Tammy, there's no choice. Soon as these bodies are found, authorities will link them to us." Tammy, head in her hands, rocked and sobbed.
The bubbling bodies submerged, Tucker sealed the drums and tightened the bolted lock rings just as T.D. pulled up outside.
Gert____
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Hello Ric
You definitely know how to place a clear picture of what you are saying in ones mind. As I was reading of what you said, yes placed a clear vision in my mind; here is one of many parts
that caught my full attention---
Equipped with a remote 1,400-pound ceiling lift, tracks covered the barn. Tucker hooked up and hoisted the bodies across to the acid filled barrels and removed the bolt locking rings and tops.
A sick look washed-over Tammy's face as she said, "Oh no, Tucker, please . . . you can't do that."
"Tammy, there's no choice. Soon as these bodies are found, authorities will link them to us." Tammy, head in her hands, rocked and sobbed.
The bubbling bodies submerged, Tucker sealed the drums and tightened the bolted lock rings just as T.D. pulled up outside.
Gert____
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Gert, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. And for staying with my story that has kept going long after I had intended. But most of all, I'm thankful, and guessing that you are out of the hospital and feeling better. I always appreciate you kind and encouraging reviews! Ric
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Ric
You are most welcome
Gert
Comment from Loren .
Okay, this was a quick ( as in what is going to happen next) read. I found elements of Lee Child and David Baldacci in your writing style. Because your wanting to end this book, I would let the characters and story line itself tell you when and how. Don't over think it.
Five stars because I'm out of sixes. Loren
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Okay, this was a quick ( as in what is going to happen next) read. I found elements of Lee Child and David Baldacci in your writing style. Because your wanting to end this book, I would let the characters and story line itself tell you when and how. Don't over think it.
Five stars because I'm out of sixes. Loren
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Loren, for your generous review and kind words. Yes, you sound like a man with experience. I don't like carrying stories out more than a couple short chapters, but this one just won't let it happen. I've been trying to end it since the third part. LOL. And like you've advised, over thinking it causes a mess. I enjoy reading your story this morning and look forward to reading more. Much appreciated! Ric
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Ditto your writing. I?ll fan you, but reading time is sometimes limited?
Take care, Loren
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Seems Tammy and Tucker may have a big problem on their hands, especially if the murders are pinned on them.
So much more could happen in this story especially since this explosion has occurred and several loose ends remain. Possibly even lends to a sequel.
The next chapter should be action packed.
Bring it on!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Seems Tammy and Tucker may have a big problem on their hands, especially if the murders are pinned on them.
So much more could happen in this story especially since this explosion has occurred and several loose ends remain. Possibly even lends to a sequel.
The next chapter should be action packed.
Bring it on!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Brett Matthew, for your extra special six-star review and kinds words. I always look forward to getting your reviews, as you are one of the main reasons I started paying more attention to particulars, like grammar and punctuation, which is still a work in progress. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Ric,
It's a nice piece of Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to end and beautifully depicting the role of main characters, particularly highlighting Tucker!
The story is moving onward in an interesting way. It's just like a live description.
Why are you in a hurry to end it? Anyways, it's your choice. BUT keep writing!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Hello Ric,
It's a nice piece of Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, CAPTIVATING flow throughout from the beginning to end and beautifully depicting the role of main characters, particularly highlighting Tucker!
The story is moving onward in an interesting way. It's just like a live description.
Why are you in a hurry to end it? Anyways, it's your choice. BUT keep writing!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, RP, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. With all the subjects and characters to choose from in a world of never ending stories, I don't like to spend too much time on any one. Plus, with drawn out stories, I have to post more often, so that readers don't forget what has happened. LOL. There is nothing more motivating than your encouraging reviews. I appreciate YOU!
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Hi Ric, Most Welcome!
ACTUALLY very sorry to be so late in acknowledging your LOVELY words.
With best wishes,
~ RP