Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 103 "My jewel has no price"Musings of an old man - 2022
38 total reviews
Comment from RodG
You have no idea how much I envy your having THIS SCENE in your backyard. I can almost feel the rain dappling the plants and trees. I think these two lines alone capture the essence of your photo:
Unspoiled, the scene so tranquil amongst the deep
shadows cast deep into the hollow.
Rod
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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You have no idea how much I envy your having THIS SCENE in your backyard. I can almost feel the rain dappling the plants and trees. I think these two lines alone capture the essence of your photo:
Unspoiled, the scene so tranquil amongst the deep
shadows cast deep into the hollow.
Rod
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Rod, thank you for your supportive comments,we are so very fortunate to live in this transformative space.
Comment from Write Right Writer
JLR...
Excellent work. Your theme is strong, clear, and well-developed. The flow is laser focused. The nourishing rhapsody of rain, the resplendent animal sanctuary, and the tranquil babbling brook to your title-worthy metaphor of pricelessness. Well done.
Better yet, your word choices are outstanding. You employ them to paint powerful and evocative pictures and use vivid images to extract the incomparable value that a thoughtful observation of the Eden just beyond your back door reveals. I marveled at the beauty and felt the sense of wonder and understood the value of your priceless jewel.
My favorite line is, "Were dreams of precious fine-cut emeralds brought to my doorstep..." This is the fulcrum on which your entire poem balances. This single transition is the tipping point that masterfully ties your premise of observation to a conclusion of commitment to valuing what you have.
Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep up the great work.
Blessings...
Curt
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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JLR...
Excellent work. Your theme is strong, clear, and well-developed. The flow is laser focused. The nourishing rhapsody of rain, the resplendent animal sanctuary, and the tranquil babbling brook to your title-worthy metaphor of pricelessness. Well done.
Better yet, your word choices are outstanding. You employ them to paint powerful and evocative pictures and use vivid images to extract the incomparable value that a thoughtful observation of the Eden just beyond your back door reveals. I marveled at the beauty and felt the sense of wonder and understood the value of your priceless jewel.
My favorite line is, "Were dreams of precious fine-cut emeralds brought to my doorstep..." This is the fulcrum on which your entire poem balances. This single transition is the tipping point that masterfully ties your premise of observation to a conclusion of commitment to valuing what you have.
Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep up the great work.
Blessings...
Curt
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Curt, thank you for your supportive comments, we are so very fortunate to live in this transformative space.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is so beautifully worded, and the photo from your back door is spectacular. I enjoyed looking at this photo as I read. I wouldn't trade any of it. It is genuinely paradisaical. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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This is so beautifully worded, and the photo from your back door is spectacular. I enjoyed looking at this photo as I read. I wouldn't trade any of it. It is genuinely paradisaical. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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JohnC thank you!
Comment from estory
I thought this was really nice, classic romanticism. Lots of great posts on the site today. This was reminiscent of Coleridge in many ways, in the ode format, in the relaxed, easy conversational language, in the imagery, very sublime, very pastoral. To see a world in a grain of sand, kind of stuff. I liked the specifics of the observations of the animals and flora and fauna, the color and the philosophical shadings that added texture and perspective to the piece. Nice work. estory
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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I thought this was really nice, classic romanticism. Lots of great posts on the site today. This was reminiscent of Coleridge in many ways, in the ode format, in the relaxed, easy conversational language, in the imagery, very sublime, very pastoral. To see a world in a grain of sand, kind of stuff. I liked the specifics of the observations of the animals and flora and fauna, the color and the philosophical shadings that added texture and perspective to the piece. Nice work. estory
Comment Written 30-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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estory, I am so very honored thank you!
Comment from Boogienights
This looks like a little piece of heaven truly. There is something so soothing about being next to nature. I especially like the trees and the birds that inhabit them. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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This looks like a little piece of heaven truly. There is something so soothing about being next to nature. I especially like the trees and the birds that inhabit them. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Smiling back with thanks!
Comment from Heather Knight
I've used up all my six stars this week, but you deserve them.
There are many things I like about the way you describe this beautiful space:
- the alliterations: sparkling, splashing among others
- the way you use words and some of those words themselves: the first sentence is a good example
- the personification when you write about humidity
- your obvious love of nature
All in all, the finished product is outstanding.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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I've used up all my six stars this week, but you deserve them.
There are many things I like about the way you describe this beautiful space:
- the alliterations: sparkling, splashing among others
- the way you use words and some of those words themselves: the first sentence is a good example
- the personification when you write about humidity
- your obvious love of nature
All in all, the finished product is outstanding.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 30-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Heather, I will humbly take your virtual six with your very kind compliment.
Comment from Bridge
A lovely poem. Very well written and very well expressed. You are lucky to have such a treasure near you. The poem flows very well. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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A lovely poem. Very well written and very well expressed. You are lucky to have such a treasure near you. The poem flows very well. All the best to you in the contest.
With regards
Comment Written 30-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Bridge, thank you!
Comment from Michaela Moore
You had me at "Oh, the rain,
rhapsodizing with the whisper of a breeze." I was compelled to read on! I connect wholly to your poem. I live in a national rainforest (Juneau, Alaska), and I feel that way about every tree I see. We have so many beautiful various varieties. I love walking trails and smelling and drinking in the beauty of the trees. The melodious sound of the trees as they clap their leaves. There is no price for nature. And I am rich indeed.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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You had me at "Oh, the rain,
rhapsodizing with the whisper of a breeze." I was compelled to read on! I connect wholly to your poem. I live in a national rainforest (Juneau, Alaska), and I feel that way about every tree I see. We have so many beautiful various varieties. I love walking trails and smelling and drinking in the beauty of the trees. The melodious sound of the trees as they clap their leaves. There is no price for nature. And I am rich indeed.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Michaela, thank you! I have been privileged years ago to travel twice a year throughout various cities, towns and villages of my work when I lived in Seattle. You do live at the crossroads of heaven and earth.
Comment from nomi338
The words to this fine poem are as refreshing as a nice cool shower on a hot and muggy day. As I suffer through another unbearably hot day in the Southern California near desert. I am much in need of relief. My AC is on the fritz and repair is not in the foreseeable future. To say your poem was refreshing is not in any way hyperbolic, it really was.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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The words to this fine poem are as refreshing as a nice cool shower on a hot and muggy day. As I suffer through another unbearably hot day in the Southern California near desert. I am much in need of relief. My AC is on the fritz and repair is not in the foreseeable future. To say your poem was refreshing is not in any way hyperbolic, it really was.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Nomi., first my thank you and second;y,my sincere regrets about your AC as I know the southern California sun can make finding a cool place most challenging.
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Thank you. The early mornings and the late evenings are great, as they offer some relief. As for the remedy to my problems, I am working on it.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned for the Take a Photo contest entry. I love the picture you used. What a lovely and tranquil place to be. You used great descriptive words also. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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This is a very nice and very well written poem you have penned for the Take a Photo contest entry. I love the picture you used. What a lovely and tranquil place to be. You used great descriptive words also. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2022
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Teri, thank you for the good wishes.