Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am caught up with my reviews with you for now. Lots more to do though. If guys weren't raised to beleive that they are entitled to sex any time they want it with whomwever they want it with there would not be so much rape, and coerced sex. Not to mention early pregnancy. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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I am caught up with my reviews with you for now. Lots more to do though. If guys weren't raised to beleive that they are entitled to sex any time they want it with whomwever they want it with there would not be so much rape, and coerced sex. Not to mention early pregnancy. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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AMEN!! As a mother of boys, it can be instilled in them. Thank you for sharing your wisdom.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture yo8u chose matches the chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture yo8u chose matches the chapter.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
As far as I can tell you have no errors in your writing, but then I was so engrossed I couldn't slow down reading. You set up Amy's situation brilliantly so that the reader could never doubt how the world has abused her, all because of Pat. Can hardly wait to see how Alex wins this one.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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As far as I can tell you have no errors in your writing, but then I was so engrossed I couldn't slow down reading. You set up Amy's situation brilliantly so that the reader could never doubt how the world has abused her, all because of Pat. Can hardly wait to see how Alex wins this one.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another well-written and a little disturbing chapter, Barbara. I like the fact Alexandra is trying to help all these women who were raped by Pat Rogers. I think she might be needed to stay in this town. :)
One suggestion is instead of stated "a nine-year old boy" put the information into some context, such as when his mother introduces him, or one of them ask him how old he is. In other words, show, don't tell.
One little typo:
"It appears to be heading (in) that direction."
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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This is another well-written and a little disturbing chapter, Barbara. I like the fact Alexandra is trying to help all these women who were raped by Pat Rogers. I think she might be needed to stay in this town. :)
One suggestion is instead of stated "a nine-year old boy" put the information into some context, such as when his mother introduces him, or one of them ask him how old he is. In other words, show, don't tell.
One little typo:
"It appears to be heading (in) that direction."
Comment Written 02-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2022
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I added that word yesterday. Hmm, now I'm wondering what happened to it LOL Thank you for the catch.
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You're most welcome, Barbara. Strange things often happen here. lol
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This is a very good chapter that you wrote. It has such empathy and comfort within. Cord does sound like quite a gentleman. He gets involved in Alexandra's concerns and watches out for her.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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This is a very good chapter that you wrote. It has such empathy and comfort within. Cord does sound like quite a gentleman. He gets involved in Alexandra's concerns and watches out for her.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
As always the dialogue is lively, and the theme comes across through it, and that puts us in the middle of the conflicts and the struggles, trying to sift through the morals. You lay out your case here through the quiet lawyer as she seeks to right the wrongs and the injustices of the world. estory
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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As always the dialogue is lively, and the theme comes across through it, and that puts us in the middle of the conflicts and the struggles, trying to sift through the morals. You lay out your case here through the quiet lawyer as she seeks to right the wrongs and the injustices of the world. estory
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
What a sad tale. Pat Rogers is a scum bag character. You are doing such a great job, and I'm always ready for more. My impatience is winning out right now. Enjoy your afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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What a sad tale. Pat Rogers is a scum bag character. You are doing such a great job, and I'm always ready for more. My impatience is winning out right now. Enjoy your afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm sure there are more situations of rape and serial rape than any of us could ever imagine, but hopefully, your story and others will give those who read about them the strength to stand up and speak out. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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I'm sure there are more situations of rape and serial rape than any of us could ever imagine, but hopefully, your story and others will give those who read about them the strength to stand up and speak out. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and support. I need a few males in my defense. LOL
Comment from Fleedleflump
Well, he clearly deserves to spend the rest of his life in jail, although if that happened, I'd worry about the financial restitution, as he wouldn't be able to make child support payments - a bit of a conundrum! I only saw one comma note in here, and it was a very well written chapter. I liked how naturally the two of them are getting closer.
Mike
Spag note:
'Just so you know he raped you.' - needs a comma after 'know'
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Well, he clearly deserves to spend the rest of his life in jail, although if that happened, I'd worry about the financial restitution, as he wouldn't be able to make child support payments - a bit of a conundrum! I only saw one comma note in here, and it was a very well written chapter. I liked how naturally the two of them are getting closer.
Mike
Spag note:
'Just so you know he raped you.' - needs a comma after 'know'
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and finding my missing comma.
Comment from amahra
Rape is such a horrible crime. It's sickening what people, particullay women, of this terrible crime have to face. The artwork you chose was interesting and quite appropriate.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Rape is such a horrible crime. It's sickening what people, particullay women, of this terrible crime have to face. The artwork you chose was interesting and quite appropriate.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.