Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 " A Writers Reprimand"Musings of an old man - 2022
31 total reviews
Comment from Terry wrote
What a lovely 'reprimand' ... and one I now to be warranted in my quarter. Thank you for adhering to the sonnet ... such a lovely, calming meter to deliver such a needed caution to artists of all manner.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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What a lovely 'reprimand' ... and one I now to be warranted in my quarter. Thank you for adhering to the sonnet ... such a lovely, calming meter to deliver such a needed caution to artists of all manner.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Smiles back! Thank you, Terry.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello JLR,
It's a nice piece of Self Improvement Poetry as Shakespearean Sonnet meeting the best possible desired norms, having impressive wording, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting what the writers should keep in mind while writing.
LAUDABLE Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Hello JLR,
It's a nice piece of Self Improvement Poetry as Shakespearean Sonnet meeting the best possible desired norms, having impressive wording, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting what the writers should keep in mind while writing.
LAUDABLE Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2022
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Smiles back! Thank you, RP.
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JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from June Sargent
I really enjoyed this Shakespearean sonnet - I think you excelled with the meter and rhyme! I myself struggle with sonnets - but you've inspired me with this one.
I just might give it a shot...and think!
Resume, your craft, proceed with quill and ink,
engage your heart, engage your soul and think!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I really enjoyed this Shakespearean sonnet - I think you excelled with the meter and rhyme! I myself struggle with sonnets - but you've inspired me with this one.
I just might give it a shot...and think!
Resume, your craft, proceed with quill and ink,
engage your heart, engage your soul and think!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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June, I delight that my sonnet may have ignited the spark for your sonnet, trust me when I say, "if I can do a real, honest-to-goodness sonnet, then you certainly can too!" You Go for it! 😊😊🙏🙏
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I think your first line is a good rule, and one I do abide by for myself. If I have to force the words, I know I need to wait a while. A good read in this
Shakespearean sonnet JLR and I wish you luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I think your first line is a good rule, and one I do abide by for myself. If I have to force the words, I know I need to wait a while. A good read in this
Shakespearean sonnet JLR and I wish you luck in the contest.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Valda ... thank you for this validation!
Comment from karenina
For once, a Friday's come and alas, I have a six!
I am eager and happy to bestow it here...
Your sonnet is elegant, in flawless meter, cerebral and inspiring!
If you don't win this contest, I'll eat my hat!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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For once, a Friday's come and alas, I have a six!
I am eager and happy to bestow it here...
Your sonnet is elegant, in flawless meter, cerebral and inspiring!
If you don't win this contest, I'll eat my hat!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Karenina, My gosh! Your kind words and validation brought a smile that already makes this, my first successful sonnet, a personal achievement!
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
JLR,
I reread your poem after reading your author's notes and have a better understanding. An excellent sonnet. Writers, like painters--Van Gogh, do evolve. Thank you for pointing this out. We all find our niche eventually. I'm still trying to find mine.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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JLR,
I reread your poem after reading your author's notes and have a better understanding. An excellent sonnet. Writers, like painters--Van Gogh, do evolve. Thank you for pointing this out. We all find our niche eventually. I'm still trying to find mine.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Cindy, thank you for your review and validating comments!
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You?re welcome, JLR.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, oh my goodness, words are finally escaping me - I absolutely LOVE this write - this 'perfect' sonnet, which I have yet to achieve, even marginally. This, to me, is masterful, and I must state how I feel - easily 10 Stars. Best wishes in the contest with this extraordinary sonnet...
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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In my opinion, oh my goodness, words are finally escaping me - I absolutely LOVE this write - this 'perfect' sonnet, which I have yet to achieve, even marginally. This, to me, is masterful, and I must state how I feel - easily 10 Stars. Best wishes in the contest with this extraordinary sonnet...
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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eve, my oh my! I am so humbled by your six-star review. This is my first truly completed sonnet that fully complies with the rigorous iambic pentameter. Wow 🤗
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Your first fully completed sonnet, JLR - congratulations!!! I'm thrilled for you! And, you are so very welcome - my great pleasure...Eve
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-You did a really good job with this sonnet,
including the meter, rhyme, and topic.
-You have a very good opening verse,
and I like the image "hide your quill and ink."
-You do a good job with the artists beginning
with Van Gogh and carrying it through in verse two.
-You have a good turn or volta by introducing
the idea of mistakes and "Missed steps."
-A very good closing couplet, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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-Great artwork and nice presentation.
-You did a really good job with this sonnet,
including the meter, rhyme, and topic.
-You have a very good opening verse,
and I like the image "hide your quill and ink."
-You do a good job with the artists beginning
with Van Gogh and carrying it through in verse two.
-You have a good turn or volta by introducing
the idea of mistakes and "Missed steps."
-A very good closing couplet, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Hi Pam, thank you so very much for your validation and good wishes. Jim
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You are very welcome, Jim. A good job with the sonnet!!!
Comment from Fleedleflump
Indeed, in all aspects of art, sometimes evolution is required, and to get there, we may need to break what came before. One artist's mistake is another's innovation. I very much enjoyed this piece.
Mike
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Indeed, in all aspects of art, sometimes evolution is required, and to get there, we may need to break what came before. One artist's mistake is another's innovation. I very much enjoyed this piece.
Mike
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thanks for your comments and validation/
Comment from Wendy G
The language used does give it a Shakespearean quality. To me it reads well (but I suffer from inability to use metre well), and expresses the need for inspiration to guide, elevate and uplift the expression of gift in all domains. Best wishes for the Sonnet contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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The language used does give it a Shakespearean quality. To me it reads well (but I suffer from inability to use metre well), and expresses the need for inspiration to guide, elevate and uplift the expression of gift in all domains. Best wishes for the Sonnet contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thank you WEndy.