Seventy nine
Searching for cattle36 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Willie,
I enjoyed your poem/story about Bob. It's so realistic that i thought it was real.
Good story plot and character development. Well done.
Gypsy
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Hello, Willie,
I enjoyed your poem/story about Bob. It's so realistic that i thought it was real.
Good story plot and character development. Well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion a story well narrated in cowboy talk by this talented writer - in easy rhyme and an enjoyable read - definitely contest worthy in several different venues...
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In my opinion a story well narrated in cowboy talk by this talented writer - in easy rhyme and an enjoyable read - definitely contest worthy in several different venues...
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from Frank Malley
"Seventy Nine" by Willie P. Smith, is an exceptional poem. Its narrator uses an educated rancher's vernacular authentically and uses the direct, functional language that people with limited social contact develop: no frills or bloviation.
This poem stimulates a series of visualizations and tells a complete story in less than a hundred lines of what I think is heptameter. The meter makes the flow work, and isn't intrusive.
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"Seventy Nine" by Willie P. Smith, is an exceptional poem. Its narrator uses an educated rancher's vernacular authentically and uses the direct, functional language that people with limited social contact develop: no frills or bloviation.
This poem stimulates a series of visualizations and tells a complete story in less than a hundred lines of what I think is heptameter. The meter makes the flow work, and isn't intrusive.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from rspoet
Hello Willie,
You've written a marvelous cowboy story in a poem
with excellent description of that cold, cold winter of '79.
I guess Bob'll live forever beneath and part of the roots of that tree.
Great font choice gives it a personal feeling to match the theme.
One small typo:
I looked fer [bob] so we could find shelter Bob
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Hello Willie,
You've written a marvelous cowboy story in a poem
with excellent description of that cold, cold winter of '79.
I guess Bob'll live forever beneath and part of the roots of that tree.
Great font choice gives it a personal feeling to match the theme.
One small typo:
I looked fer [bob] so we could find shelter Bob
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Willie, I do love this. Great imagery created of a significant moment in time. So expressive, I felt as if I was there. The cowboy lingo was icing on the cake. Beautifully thought-out overall presentation.
The contrast of these lines:
'He'd be o.k., I had no doubt' and 'His horse had throwed him, he had froze to death, sittin' there waitin' fer me,' made my heart weep.
I really like the emphasis of Bob talking about dying all the time and wanting to be buried high on the mountain under a pine, followed by Bob's cowboy friend finding him dead, sitting with his back against a pine (smiling).
An awesome creation.
Gale
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Willie, I do love this. Great imagery created of a significant moment in time. So expressive, I felt as if I was there. The cowboy lingo was icing on the cake. Beautifully thought-out overall presentation.
The contrast of these lines:
'He'd be o.k., I had no doubt' and 'His horse had throwed him, he had froze to death, sittin' there waitin' fer me,' made my heart weep.
I really like the emphasis of Bob talking about dying all the time and wanting to be buried high on the mountain under a pine, followed by Bob's cowboy friend finding him dead, sitting with his back against a pine (smiling).
An awesome creation.
Gale
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent cowboy poem Willie. I loved the vivid imagery that made it easy to see and feel the snowstorm as you searched for cattle in the high country.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
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Excellent cowboy poem Willie. I loved the vivid imagery that made it easy to see and feel the snowstorm as you searched for cattle in the high country.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from RodG
I thoroughly enjoyed this cowboy narrative about an old cowhand lost in a snow storm.
Good characterization of Bob.
You made it easy to visualize each scene.
I especially like your use of cowboy lingo.
Rod
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I thoroughly enjoyed this cowboy narrative about an old cowhand lost in a snow storm.
Good characterization of Bob.
You made it easy to visualize each scene.
I especially like your use of cowboy lingo.
Rod
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and poem to go with it, Willie.
-You tell a good story with effective imagery
describing the setting and what happened in this snow storm.
-You did a good job with the western dialect, too.
-I can feel the cold as you describe "that bitter cold winter."
-You also give us a good idea of what Bob was like, and
how he always said he wanted to be buried by that tree.
-Very good closing lines, too.
-You show your appreciation of Bob during his life
and honoring him in death.
-Very well done!!!
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-Very nice artwork and poem to go with it, Willie.
-You tell a good story with effective imagery
describing the setting and what happened in this snow storm.
-You did a good job with the western dialect, too.
-I can feel the cold as you describe "that bitter cold winter."
-You also give us a good idea of what Bob was like, and
how he always said he wanted to be buried by that tree.
-Very good closing lines, too.
-You show your appreciation of Bob during his life
and honoring him in death.
-Very well done!!!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent natural-sounding cowboy language, well-suited to the theme. There were occasional unnecessary capitals (Lines 7 and 12), and once Bob's name needed a capital letter (Line 13), but otherwise I found it excellent, a great story in verse. Well done!
Wendy
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Excellent natural-sounding cowboy language, well-suited to the theme. There were occasional unnecessary capitals (Lines 7 and 12), and once Bob's name needed a capital letter (Line 13), but otherwise I found it excellent, a great story in verse. Well done!
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022
Comment from Patricia Tiffany Morris
I discovered cowboy poetry on a YouTube video last week. I never knew this existed. My grandfather liked Louis L'Amour books and would have loved cowboy poetry. Love it. Thanks.
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I discovered cowboy poetry on a YouTube video last week. I never knew this existed. My grandfather liked Louis L'Amour books and would have loved cowboy poetry. Love it. Thanks.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2022