Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Whilst I sleep"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Wendy G
Well done - a great Nocturna, and I like the journey you trace through night, paralleling it with your faith and peace, and looking forward to the gift of each new day.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Well done - a great Nocturna, and I like the journey you trace through night, paralleling it with your faith and peace, and looking forward to the gift of each new day.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you I loved the introduction to the Nocturna style of poetry.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This is a very good poem describing the night. It is well written and it flows well. I miss seeing the stars. Now there are so many security lights and such that you can't see anything. Best of luck in this and all endeavors.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This is a very good poem describing the night. It is well written and it flows well. I miss seeing the stars. Now there are so many security lights and such that you can't see anything. Best of luck in this and all endeavors.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Monica, Thank you! I loved the introduction to the Nocturna style of poetry.
Comment from Anne Johnston
I love your poem. I love how we can lay our heads on our pillows at night in confidence and trust because we are a child of God. He watches over us throughout the night and wakes us refreshed for another day.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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I love your poem. I love how we can lay our heads on our pillows at night in confidence and trust because we are a child of God. He watches over us throughout the night and wakes us refreshed for another day.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Anne,Johnson, you get this six-star review from you who I know is a Daughter of God is precious in every way! Thank you I send smiles of gratitude back!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes, while we sleep, the world keeps rotating. They say we are rotating faster. However, we have no way to fix things God created. We are in his hands. He knows what is best. Day after day, night after night, we must live and do what is right, if we intend to join him in Heaven.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Yes, while we sleep, the world keeps rotating. They say we are rotating faster. However, we have no way to fix things God created. We are in his hands. He knows what is best. Day after day, night after night, we must live and do what is right, if we intend to join him in Heaven.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Carolyn, Your comments are so spot on! I am unable to find the words that would give you the knowing of how very humbling your six star validation makes me feel.
So Thank you will have to do it ... THANK YOU!
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You are welcome.
Comment from MissMerri
If only I had six stars, this poem would have an EXCEPTIONAL rating, for sure. I loved everything about it, from the theme to the three-line stanzas, linked by the rhyme in the center line. Are you the creator of this form? It is most appealing but I don't remember seeing it before. Anyway, I love this poem and now I'd like to try one also. Thanks for the inspiration. MM
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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If only I had six stars, this poem would have an EXCEPTIONAL rating, for sure. I loved everything about it, from the theme to the three-line stanzas, linked by the rhyme in the center line. Are you the creator of this form? It is most appealing but I don't remember seeing it before. Anyway, I love this poem and now I'd like to try one also. Thanks for the inspiration. MM
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Miss Merri, this was a Potlatch club challenge ... below is more information on the poetic style, Jim
The following description is reposted with permission from The Poets Garret, with thanks to Terry Clitheroe.
Nocturna
The word was first used by Christians and was a form of night prayers Later appeared in the 18th century and was derived from the French nocturnal and was usually music inspired by the night and played at evening parties. During that time poetry was also recited.
The painter Whistler used that name in some of his paintings, they also had a night theme, which in turn inspired Chopin to write his well loved Nocturnes.
Comment from Janet Foor
I'm not familiar with this poetic form but is beautiful and you did a nice job with it and the peaceful message was a comfort to read and contemplate.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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I'm not familiar with this poetic form but is beautiful and you did a nice job with it and the peaceful message was a comfort to read and contemplate.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Janet thank you, here is more information about this poetic style:
The following description is reposted with permission from The Poets Garret, with thanks to Terry Clitheroe.
Nocturna
The word was first used by Christians and was a form of night prayers Later appeared in the 18th century and was derived from the French nocturnal and was usually music inspired by the night and played at evening parties. During that time poetry was also recited.
The painter Whistler used that name in some of his paintings, they also had a night theme, which in turn inspired Chopin to write his well loved Nocturnes.
Comment from Ulla
And what a beautiful and beautifully written poem this is. I will admit that I'm not familiar with the form, but that is not so strange as I don't write poems. I enjoyed reading it though. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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And what a beautiful and beautifully written poem this is. I will admit that I'm not familiar with the form, but that is not so strange as I don't write poems. I enjoyed reading it though. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Ulla, thank you so much! Here is a little more information on this poetic form:
The following description is reposted with permission from The Poets Garret, with thanks to Terry Clitheroe.
Nocturna
The word was first used by Christians and was a form of night prayers Later appeared in the 18th century and was derived from the French nocturnal and was usually music inspired by the night and played at evening parties. During that time poetry was also recited.
The painter Whistler used that name in some of his paintings, they also had a night theme, which in turn inspired Chopin to write his well loved Nocturnes.
Comment from karenina
Flawlessly composed! What is not to like about this wonderful poem? There is such sweet peace in knowing God is watching over us! How perfect to write a Nocturnal with this theme. Even your chosen image is phenomenal!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Flawlessly composed! What is not to like about this wonderful poem? There is such sweet peace in knowing God is watching over us! How perfect to write a Nocturnal with this theme. Even your chosen image is phenomenal!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Smiles all around abound!
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I like smiles. I wish this world had more of them!
Comment from Boogienights
Very beautifully written and soothing to read. Your words flow so nicely and I love the theme of the poem. I find a lot of peace in sleeping, its the only time I can escape the cares of the day. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Very beautifully written and soothing to read. Your words flow so nicely and I love the theme of the poem. I find a lot of peace in sleeping, its the only time I can escape the cares of the day. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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BoogieNights, smiling back with great appreciation for your kind words.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done, Jim. I have not seen that rhyme scheme too often. Doesn't look like you got much sleep that night. The eighth line is outstanding.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Nicely done, Jim. I have not seen that rhyme scheme too often. Doesn't look like you got much sleep that night. The eighth line is outstanding.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thanks for the kudos; Paul your comment means alot to me! 🙏🙏