Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your story is getting intriguing. I agree with you about writing; every time a person reads you see something that needs revising. Sounds like we want our writing perfect
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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Your story is getting intriguing. I agree with you about writing; every time a person reads you see something that needs revising. Sounds like we want our writing perfect
Comment Written 29-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2022
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I think we do want our writing perfect. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
And the mystery continues.
At Today's Post:
Para 12, 1st sentence: (fiance) should have an accent mark at the (e). My Microsoft Word does it automatically, but I can't figure out how to make FS do it, other than do it in word then copy and paste. know FS spell-checker highlights it as wrong. Tough one. OK, I jujst read your authr note about accents. So...never mind LOL
At GHARACTER LIST:
Alexandra Black: (in huge) should be (in a huge)
Jim: (foremen's) should be (foremen) Same as you did for Bob.
Amy Harding: Should separate Matthew and show as an individual character. ie Matthew: Amy Harding's son.
I'm surprised Alexandra has not made a move on Cord yet, or vice versa.
Gripping tale. Good job.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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And the mystery continues.
At Today's Post:
Para 12, 1st sentence: (fiance) should have an accent mark at the (e). My Microsoft Word does it automatically, but I can't figure out how to make FS do it, other than do it in word then copy and paste. know FS spell-checker highlights it as wrong. Tough one. OK, I jujst read your authr note about accents. So...never mind LOL
At GHARACTER LIST:
Alexandra Black: (in huge) should be (in a huge)
Jim: (foremen's) should be (foremen) Same as you did for Bob.
Amy Harding: Should separate Matthew and show as an individual character. ie Matthew: Amy Harding's son.
I'm surprised Alexandra has not made a move on Cord yet, or vice versa.
Gripping tale. Good job.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2022
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I can't put in the accent marks because FS won't accept them. I keep them off. They are in my original manuscript. Thank you for the kind review. I keep my romance novels clean. LOL I don't want to be embarrassed if my mom or granddaughters read them.
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LOL Good philosophy, keep it clean.
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Besides that, I am very strong Christian who believes one must build a relationship first. The relationship will last, lust won't.
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Absolutely, couldn't agree with you more. Lust comes and goes, mostly goes. But appreciation, respect, admiration, they all remain, if you have found the right relationship.
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Yes, the secret is finding the right relationship. I think it's helps if God is in the center.
Comment from nomi338
I am so happy that Cord is going to the event. I can just imagine the havoc an unfortunate encounter between Ali and her ex might cause. This way if he shows up, Ali won't be lone to have to face him and he would not dare act up with Cord there to keep him from hurting Ali.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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I am so happy that Cord is going to the event. I can just imagine the havoc an unfortunate encounter between Ali and her ex might cause. This way if he shows up, Ali won't be lone to have to face him and he would not dare act up with Cord there to keep him from hurting Ali.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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I was worried about you. Thank you for this kind and encouraging review.
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No worries, I took a short vacation away from the site. I am finally working on my life story.
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When I don't see my friends, I worry.
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Thank you for your concern and of even more importance, the designation of friend.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
There are many reasons I will not use Advanced Editor. However, some Notes:
-The Ending of Previous Past section portrays typical daily activities on a ranch, even waiting for the mare to foal.
-The conversation between Cordero and his mother seemed natural. So true, mothers "will use any way possible to get their adult son to talk." Most often, they would have better success pulling a hen's teeth instead.
-Seemed Cordero is still trying to take care of Alexandra by taking her to the airport.
Could Rosa and Tonia be scheming getting Cordero and Alexandra more permanently together than what this chapter has revealed so far?
-"shoulders blades" should be shoulder blades.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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There are many reasons I will not use Advanced Editor. However, some Notes:
-The Ending of Previous Past section portrays typical daily activities on a ranch, even waiting for the mare to foal.
-The conversation between Cordero and his mother seemed natural. So true, mothers "will use any way possible to get their adult son to talk." Most often, they would have better success pulling a hen's teeth instead.
-Seemed Cordero is still trying to take care of Alexandra by taking her to the airport.
Could Rosa and Tonia be scheming getting Cordero and Alexandra more permanently together than what this chapter has revealed so far?
-"shoulders blades" should be shoulder blades.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Most often, they would have better success pulling a hen's teeth instead. (LOL I'm a mother of four adult males. I do understand. I'm about ready to force 'fine' out of their vocabulary.)
I am under the impression Tonia and Rosa do have a motive, hmmm.
I have made the correction. I need to check and make sure I remembered to save it.
Thank you for the catch and the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. It kept my interest from beginning to end. When I finished, I really wanted to know what happens next. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture is great.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This is another excellent chapter. It kept my interest from beginning to end. When I finished, I really wanted to know what happens next. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture is great.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Exchange of views through words and actions between Cordero and Alexandra are particularly noteworthy.
The story is moving ahead in an interesting way.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Exchange of views through words and actions between Cordero and Alexandra are particularly noteworthy.
The story is moving ahead in an interesting way.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
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Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Fleedleflump
I had a great time reading this chapter. It was good to have the gentle humour of the measurements scenes to break the anxiety, and it was good to spent time with Cord and his family. I thought this was a strong chapter.
Mike
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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I had a great time reading this chapter. It was good to have the gentle humour of the measurements scenes to break the anxiety, and it was good to spent time with Cord and his family. I thought this was a strong chapter.
Mike
Comment Written 25-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another great chapter, Barbara. I'm glad Cordero is going after all. Mothers always get it figured out! lol The taking of measurements and photos was a funny added touch. Well done.
Just a couple of little things: "When he got in(into) the kitchen..."
"...across his shoulder(s) blades." - remove the 's'
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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This is another great chapter, Barbara. I'm glad Cordero is going after all. Mothers always get it figured out! lol The taking of measurements and photos was a funny added touch. Well done.
Just a couple of little things: "When he got in(into) the kitchen..."
"...across his shoulder(s) blades." - remove the 's'
Comment Written 24-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and I am off to make corrections.
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You are most welcome, Barbara. :)
Comment from John Ciarmello
An excellent chapter. This is exactly how I pictured Cordero. I'm happy he is going to meet Ali. I can't see his trip to the City going off without a hitch. We will see. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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An excellent chapter. This is exactly how I pictured Cordero. I'm happy he is going to meet Ali. I can't see his trip to the City going off without a hitch. We will see. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2022
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There will be a few hitches in NYC. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Barbara,
I really regret not reading your story earlier.
It is easy to follow, yet you have very complex characters.
I can't wait to see what happens down the road: if there will be a love story, and how it unfolds, if it does.
You capture the essence of the Mexican peoples of our country, especially Cordero, who is a pensive, proud (not in the haughty sense) man.
Your story is really great. I can't wait for the next installment.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Barbara,
I really regret not reading your story earlier.
It is easy to follow, yet you have very complex characters.
I can't wait to see what happens down the road: if there will be a love story, and how it unfolds, if it does.
You capture the essence of the Mexican peoples of our country, especially Cordero, who is a pensive, proud (not in the haughty sense) man.
Your story is really great. I can't wait for the next installment.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you for sharing kind review with us.