Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Did not take Alan long to find Alexandra. Good thing Cord is with her.
Alan naked on top of a naked woman...bye-bye Alan! No wonder Alexandra wants nothing to do with him.
Alan's flimsy excuse holds no water.
Seems Cord and Alexandra are going to be hearing particular bells before this is over.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Did not take Alan long to find Alexandra. Good thing Cord is with her.
Alan naked on top of a naked woman...bye-bye Alan! No wonder Alexandra wants nothing to do with him.
Alan's flimsy excuse holds no water.
Seems Cord and Alexandra are going to be hearing particular bells before this is over.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Alan is a total jerk. We will discover more about him later.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter of your book. You handled the conflict very well. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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This is another excellent chapter of your book. You handled the conflict very well. You moved the story along nicely. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Shirley McLain
You did an excellent job with this chapter, as usual. I loved the intensity, and it made me keep reading and wanting more. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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You did an excellent job with this chapter, as usual. I loved the intensity, and it made me keep reading and wanting more. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the encouaragement.
Comment from amahra
Alan gave the worst explanation for cheating on a woman he professed to love. But I'm glad Cord was there to through the bum out. Great installment, Barbara. Now on to the next...:))
P.S. I love that all your male heroes are patient and strong for the women they pursue.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Alan gave the worst explanation for cheating on a woman he professed to love. But I'm glad Cord was there to through the bum out. Great installment, Barbara. Now on to the next...:))
P.S. I love that all your male heroes are patient and strong for the women they pursue.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
With guys like Allen, it's never over. They make up their own rules as they go along. But with guys like Cordero, my guess is, he'll give as good as he gets. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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With guys like Allen, it's never over. They make up their own rules as they go along. But with guys like Cordero, my guess is, he'll give as good as he gets. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2022
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You're correct. It's not over. Alan will not get what he wants. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The interesting part of this chapter was Alan's conviction he'd done no wrong. I think you could have upped the power of this, to better show what a really horrible peron Alan is (maybe some argy-bargying?).
Potential SPAGs for your consideration (but some might be the way you guys speak. If so, sorry).
"Why you here?" > "Why are you here?"
Why you dressed > Why are you dressed
what you actually saw?" > what you actually saw."
"You worried > "Are you worried
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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The interesting part of this chapter was Alan's conviction he'd done no wrong. I think you could have upped the power of this, to better show what a really horrible peron Alan is (maybe some argy-bargying?).
Potential SPAGs for your consideration (but some might be the way you guys speak. If so, sorry).
"Why you here?" > "Why are you here?"
Why you dressed > Why are you dressed
what you actually saw?" > what you actually saw."
"You worried > "Are you worried
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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They're in dialogue. Americans don't speak grammatically correct. We will see Alan again. It will get worse. Just a hint now. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The bad man sure must be a jerk to let this woman go ..... he likes to control. Will he give up and go home so he doesn't ruin Alexandra's life anymore?
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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The bad man sure must be a jerk to let this woman go ..... he likes to control. Will he give up and go home so he doesn't ruin Alexandra's life anymore?
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Alan doesn't give up. We will see him again. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I was happy to see Cordero having the upper hand with Alan. Making Alan, an unpredictable character was a good choice and increases the suspense for his next try at Ali and Cordero. Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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I was happy to see Cordero having the upper hand with Alan. Making Alan, an unpredictable character was a good choice and increases the suspense for his next try at Ali and Cordero. Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Alan doesn't give up. We will see him again. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation having captivating flow with ups and downs of feelings.
The story is moving ahead in an interesting way.
Worth waiting for what happens next!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation having captivating flow with ups and downs of feelings.
The story is moving ahead in an interesting way.
Worth waiting for what happens next!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a good chapter. I was interested in Alan's explanation of making love isn't the same as having sex. Cordero seems to have a similar idea but a more truthful way of expressing it. He's probably right to not trust Alan, who obviously needs something from Ali.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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This was a good chapter. I was interested in Alan's explanation of making love isn't the same as having sex. Cordero seems to have a similar idea but a more truthful way of expressing it. He's probably right to not trust Alan, who obviously needs something from Ali.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022
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Thank you for this kind review.