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Naani Poem

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Comment from lyenochka
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Lovely thought about the Lord. Yes, He loves us and He is so patient with us despite all the things we fail to do or things we do that we shouldn't.

One spelling issue:
Love, consistant and true. (consistent) On

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 28-Sep-2022
    Thank you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Well, I am with God on this one. My worse enemy is the imp whispering go ahead and do it. Have fun and live while the spirit says if you do the consequence that follows is all on you. Choose the right, or reap the consequence.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
    Yes. Never fancied chasing after darkness.
Comment from RodG
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This spiritual Naani describes a loving God who is not always happy with what we do. He may be more forgiving than this critic, a former English teacher, who is not pleased with your punctuation or grammar usage. In line 3, HE should have been capitalized and both commas omitted.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
    Certainly, it SHOULD have been capitalized. It was, in the original. I should be more careful copying. Seems to me, commas are good for causing pauses in how print is read. That's why they are there. Anyone else ever use them for that? Well, back to school. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Janet Foor
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Excellent message in your naani form poem. It's true, he loves us and he always will but he definitely doesn't always like the things we do.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
    Thank you for your kind review.