Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Barbara,
This is another excellent installment of your novel.
I like the way your story is moving, with good vibes between Lexi and Cordero.
Nice dialogue and pace.
I really enjoyed this one, Barbara.
Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Barbara,
This is another excellent installment of your novel.
I like the way your story is moving, with good vibes between Lexi and Cordero.
Nice dialogue and pace.
I really enjoyed this one, Barbara.
Cindy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
A great chapter again. Full of actions, emotions and the characters so true to themselves - I mean I reviewed a few prior chapters, and when I started this one, I could 'recognise' each of them by the way they speak or act. This is hard to maintain, and without a doubt, you nailed it here.
I understand this is already published, but I couldn't resist to humbly suggest two things: a) would it read better if you chose 'woman' instead of 'female' where Cordero asks his mom to go talk to Ali?
b) would it be better to use: 'because of my poor judgement of character' instead of 'judge'
Please forgive me, I only mean to be constructive.
Great read!!!
Mario
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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A great chapter again. Full of actions, emotions and the characters so true to themselves - I mean I reviewed a few prior chapters, and when I started this one, I could 'recognise' each of them by the way they speak or act. This is hard to maintain, and without a doubt, you nailed it here.
I understand this is already published, but I couldn't resist to humbly suggest two things: a) would it read better if you chose 'woman' instead of 'female' where Cordero asks his mom to go talk to Ali?
b) would it be better to use: 'because of my poor judgement of character' instead of 'judge'
Please forgive me, I only mean to be constructive.
Great read!!!
Mario
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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This novel is not published yet. I have made the changes and always appreciate the help.
Comment from Kaiku
After reading this I wondered if I had read it previously and did not place a review. It's a smooth running story. Characters are identified well and provide substance. Manner of positioning characters works. Good stuff.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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After reading this I wondered if I had read it previously and did not place a review. It's a smooth running story. Characters are identified well and provide substance. Manner of positioning characters works. Good stuff.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The relationship between Cord and Ali seems to be prospering and she is well liked on the ranch. Is this the lull before the storm? Conversation is used to develop character.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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The relationship between Cord and Ali seems to be prospering and she is well liked on the ranch. Is this the lull before the storm? Conversation is used to develop character.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Yes, this is the lull before the storm. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JT traveller
Dreamy, romantic, enticing. I read it to the very end. Thankyou for sharing. There is no more enlightenment than comes from love and romance. Thankyou for sharing your gift of prose.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Dreamy, romantic, enticing. I read it to the very end. Thankyou for sharing. There is no more enlightenment than comes from love and romance. Thankyou for sharing your gift of prose.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Not a proper review I'm afraid, I'm not up to that yet (and catching up with chapters missed), but a heartfelt thanks for your prayers and all my best wishes for a happy, healthy and wealthy (spiritually at least) 2023. Kate xx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Not a proper review I'm afraid, I'm not up to that yet (and catching up with chapters missed), but a heartfelt thanks for your prayers and all my best wishes for a happy, healthy and wealthy (spiritually at least) 2023. Kate xx
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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I will continue to pray for you. I'm happy you felt well enough to even read this.
Comment from Karyn2
Another great instalment Barbara! Interesting development with Cord definitely thinking they are in a relationship and Ali just beginning to wonder! I like the possible tension this creates as they work this through. A little observation, Cord does a lot of "cheek pecking" Lol which is endearing, gee, I wouldn't complain but I wondered if maybe sometimes his hand might brush hers or rest on her shoulder or simply smile at her for some variety - just a thought.
Small edit towards the end "Standing(,) Nancy...". Great writing Barabara!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Another great instalment Barbara! Interesting development with Cord definitely thinking they are in a relationship and Ali just beginning to wonder! I like the possible tension this creates as they work this through. A little observation, Cord does a lot of "cheek pecking" Lol which is endearing, gee, I wouldn't complain but I wondered if maybe sometimes his hand might brush hers or rest on her shoulder or simply smile at her for some variety - just a thought.
Small edit towards the end "Standing(,) Nancy...". Great writing Barabara!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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I will take that into consideration. For most of the novel they never kissed or cheek peeked at all. This is a new development. Thank you for the kind reveiw.
Comment from Ricky1024
This Chapter Entitled,
"Quiet Lawyer" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed day
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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This Chapter Entitled,
"Quiet Lawyer" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing and have a blessed day
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
Seems like Cord and Alexandra are starting to get closer romantically and according to the other three, Mr Dreamy has always been the catch.
A good, clean chapter leading us to the next. Wonder what that will be?
Happy new year. Be safe.
Cheers. John
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Seems like Cord and Alexandra are starting to get closer romantically and according to the other three, Mr Dreamy has always been the catch.
A good, clean chapter leading us to the next. Wonder what that will be?
Happy new year. Be safe.
Cheers. John
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is good although Ali seems to be suffering more guilt than necessary as her good works have brought out some bad guys. It's nice she is making female friends and becoming more a part of Cord's way of life. You have an excellent story here and the little snippet about the dog jumping into the tub with her is so amusing.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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This is good although Ali seems to be suffering more guilt than necessary as her good works have brought out some bad guys. It's nice she is making female friends and becoming more a part of Cord's way of life. You have an excellent story here and the little snippet about the dog jumping into the tub with her is so amusing.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.