Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is a very good chapter. It's so sad that Lisa's parents have spent so many years blaming her instead of believing in her. Alex sounds as if she is really going to stick it to Pat Rogers.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023

I have known parents like this. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

A smooth read. Characters continue to flow. Always interested in the style of writing and the punctuation process especially the use of quotation marks. Is it necessary to block-in every utterance or can a single block around one person`s conversation be adequate or until the next person speaks?

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023

It depends on the sentence. My writing dialogue is the way it's supposed to be, at least nobody has stated I messed up. Can you be more specific? Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Kaiku on 29-Jan-2023

I am just asking as a means to improve my own writing. I find your structure to be very good and try to emulate the type of punctuation you have shown. I am told at times that I use quotation marks too much.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023

I understand what you're asking but I need an example to discuss it with you. I don't want to give you wrong information.

reply by Kaiku on 29-Jan-2023

In the first paragraph you have Alexandra being the only person engaging in conversation. Could you use one set of quotation marks to book-mark her conversation as opposed to using quotes for each of her remarks? Does that make sense.

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023

I sent you a PM. I hope it helps.

reply by Kaiku on 29-Jan-2023

Thanks

Comment from Frank Malley

Excellent

This chapter excellently develops a love story that emerges out of violence and rape. There's a lot of water already under the bridge re context, but this section hold its own as it describes a swiftly evolving love between two experienced adults.
I liked the inclusion of details such as the belt buckle that proves attendance at a rodeo on a critical date. My only criticism of this piece is that the dialogue, while effective, could've been heated up a bit.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023

Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Sorry! This is a chapter review for I've not read the preceding chapters.
However, the situation and intent or objective is clear.
Well written, concise and intriguing.
Good luck with your publishing.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2023

Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I love the name of your characters. Finding Matthew's father sounds like a good plot. Good details about the photos they found. Seems Cordero might have a good alibi.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This story is such fun to read. Ali is really going to nail this rapist for what he did. I hope there will be a point at which the Black reuinte with their daughter but they are pretty cold people to have kicked her out after a rape. The romance between Ali and Cord is progressing nicely.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

I have seen this happen before. I can't imagine a parent doing it, but I've seen it. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

After Alexandra and Rosa finished (with dinner clean up), Cordero asked, "Ali, would you like to sit on the bench and watch the stars?" (clearing the table and washing the plates...) I think this is better.

Another great chapter. Thank you for sharing and have a nice weekend.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review and suggestions. I made the change.

Comment from Karyn2

Excellent

Wonderful Barbara! I enjoyed the hunt through Amy's belongings, picking up clues and gathering evidence. I liked the way Amy's parents were at first resistant to let them enter which shows their sense of shame that would be common for families who have to negotiate their way through these difficult circumstances and grief.
I felt it showed authenticity.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Rogers' comment did sound like a threat.

Seems Alexandra is hot on the trail of probably a date raper and will nail him for anything she can get.

All apears a go for their "small wedding and private honeymoon.

Only 5 more chapter?

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2023

Yes, only five more posts left. I have another novel waiting to be posted. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Sorry to come riding in late, and with no sixes. I'm curious. Why are you not posting right after Saturday midnight? I only found one nit, and you've probably fixed it by now:

He found a yearbook and handed it her [... handed it TO (?) her.]

Can't wait for the trial!

Jay

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2023

I'm posting every five days so I can finish this story. I'm dying to start my new novel. I have 5 posts left in this novel. In the author's notes, I state when the next post will be posted. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Jay Squires on 26-Jan-2023

I'll try to hold onto a six for your posts. They are deserving, but it's always hard for me to hold onto my sixes late in the week.

Jay