He Took a Wrong Path Home
A Glosa poem29 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is very well done. I like the four lines you chose from Coleridge, and you worked them in beautifully. Your poem is filled with emotion, and I can sense the fear of the person on the street. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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This is very well done. I like the four lines you chose from Coleridge, and you worked them in beautifully. Your poem is filled with emotion, and I can sense the fear of the person on the street. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
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Thank you!
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You're welcome. That was a close contest.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Yvonne,
I thoroughly enjoyed your Glosa poetic offering. It tells a complete story, and in rhyme no less!
What an incredible new presentation/interpretation/amplification of Coleridge's poem...
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes...
diane
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hello, Yvonne,
I thoroughly enjoyed your Glosa poetic offering. It tells a complete story, and in rhyme no less!
What an incredible new presentation/interpretation/amplification of Coleridge's poem...
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes...
diane
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much, Diane. I appreciate this great review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I missed this one and so many more. I'll get back into the swing of things soon.
Yvonne, you are a true poet. Reading this I was running beside that poor tormented man, trying to outrun the demon behind him. The fear he feels, the way he is sweaty, scared, running, stumbling, all words that put us into the picture. You should finish that story you asked me to look at, you have a natural talent. Don't let it go. Your poetry is just lovely, this one is scary. It's a winner in my book. Now to go and vote. Well done, my dear SATP Lots of love and hugs. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I missed this one and so many more. I'll get back into the swing of things soon.
Yvonne, you are a true poet. Reading this I was running beside that poor tormented man, trying to outrun the demon behind him. The fear he feels, the way he is sweaty, scared, running, stumbling, all words that put us into the picture. You should finish that story you asked me to look at, you have a natural talent. Don't let it go. Your poetry is just lovely, this one is scary. It's a winner in my book. Now to go and vote. Well done, my dear SATP Lots of love and hugs. Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Awww, bless your heart! You make me feel so good always. What would I do without you? Thanks, dear Satpy.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
An interesting style and clever manipulation of word and rhyme to tell a frightening tale.
The word choice and pace of the poem drew me into the tale until at it's end I felt the despair of the victim in every word.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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An interesting style and clever manipulation of word and rhyme to tell a frightening tale.
The word choice and pace of the poem drew me into the tale until at it's end I felt the despair of the victim in every word.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Oh, thank you, Shirley. That make me feel so good. I appreciate your lovely review and the stars very much.
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent. This is the second poem of this type I've read and I think I am going to enjoy this kind of poetry. It really expounds on the more familiar word of the well known poem. You have made the scene more dramatic and chilling.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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This is excellent. This is the second poem of this type I've read and I think I am going to enjoy this kind of poetry. It really expounds on the more familiar word of the well known poem. You have made the scene more dramatic and chilling.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent poem, very vivid, and so well written that every reader will identify with his fear and distress. The poem you chose was well suited to the expansion you have done so thoughtfully. Well done! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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An excellent poem, very vivid, and so well written that every reader will identify with his fear and distress. The poem you chose was well suited to the expansion you have done so thoughtfully. Well done! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I love that poem.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Yvonne,
Wow, that was a little bit scary, and I'm sitting here safe and sound at my desk! I could feel the fear creeping in with each footstep. It's like not wanting to take the covers off of your face when you're a kid for fear that the monster is right there. That reminds me of a Far Side comic. It showed a kid hidden under his blankets with a tube that went outside the blanket for breathing. I can't recall the exact caption, but it was some brand of fictitious breathing apparatus like THE MONSTER EVADER or some such thing. As always, Gary Larson ruled the funny pages. On a more serious note, well done gal! I enjoyed this. Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Hello Yvonne,
Wow, that was a little bit scary, and I'm sitting here safe and sound at my desk! I could feel the fear creeping in with each footstep. It's like not wanting to take the covers off of your face when you're a kid for fear that the monster is right there. That reminds me of a Far Side comic. It showed a kid hidden under his blankets with a tube that went outside the blanket for breathing. I can't recall the exact caption, but it was some brand of fictitious breathing apparatus like THE MONSTER EVADER or some such thing. As always, Gary Larson ruled the funny pages. On a more serious note, well done gal! I enjoyed this. Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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I love Far Side. I have most of his books. I've seen them many times and still as hard as the first time. Thanks for a great review. I'm glad you could feel the creeping fear.
Comment from judiverse
I love what you did with your Glosa poem. I've read others. One was lovely but too ephemeral for me. Those Coleridge lines were great ones to quote, though I would challenge his use of a comma after "he knows." You create a really spooky atmosphere with the man feeling something evil is afoot. What do people have to walk down dark alleys, anyway? The rain adds to the atmosphere, too. You describe the man's fear extremely well. It looks like there'll be no Mannix or Barnaby Jones to come to his rescue. It must be the zombie apocalypse I've been hearing about. judi
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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I love what you did with your Glosa poem. I've read others. One was lovely but too ephemeral for me. Those Coleridge lines were great ones to quote, though I would challenge his use of a comma after "he knows." You create a really spooky atmosphere with the man feeling something evil is afoot. What do people have to walk down dark alleys, anyway? The rain adds to the atmosphere, too. You describe the man's fear extremely well. It looks like there'll be no Mannix or Barnaby Jones to come to his rescue. It must be the zombie apocalypse I've been hearing about. judi
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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It might be. Thank you so much for this wonderful review and comments.
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You're welcome. Great work, and I'll be looking for this in the contest. judi
Comment from jake cosmos aller
powerful moving ghost glosa poem capturing the gothic mood of the quoted poem, and catching the overall mood of the late 19th century romantic masters.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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powerful moving ghost glosa poem capturing the gothic mood of the quoted poem, and catching the overall mood of the late 19th century romantic masters.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Boogienights
I admire all that decided to try this form of poetry. I particularly like yours because I love a good mystery/ horror story. This is very well done, best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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I admire all that decided to try this form of poetry. I particularly like yours because I love a good mystery/ horror story. This is very well done, best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thank you for reviewing and for the stars! Very much appreciated. I'm so glad you like this story.