Dribbles And Drabbles
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Birthday Bash"A Collection Of Mini Stories
27 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Brett,
This is so sad. It almost made me cry. Sean died before he could go on the rides he was looking so forward to ride. This must be a bittersweet memory for the grieving mother.
Keep writing and stay health.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Hi Brett,
This is so sad. It almost made me cry. Sean died before he could go on the rides he was looking so forward to ride. This must be a bittersweet memory for the grieving mother.
Keep writing and stay health.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Appreciate the review.
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No problem, Brett.
Joan
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, Birthday Bash, has the required word count and leaves the readers with a sad scene of the boy's ashes being sent on their way. Certainly a reminder that days are so very precious.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, Birthday Bash, has the required word count and leaves the readers with a sad scene of the boy's ashes being sent on their way. Certainly a reminder that days are so very precious.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Much appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Way to tug on the heart-strings with the surprise ending. Now the mom can remember times past and only imagine how happy Sean would have been to ride the roller coaster, and how happy he would be on the Ferris wheel.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Way to tug on the heart-strings with the surprise ending. Now the mom can remember times past and only imagine how happy Sean would have been to ride the roller coaster, and how happy he would be on the Ferris wheel.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
What a sad story and yet she tried to fulfill his dream. It is so hard to lose a child. Very well done 70-word story with a complete story from the child to his end.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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What a sad story and yet she tried to fulfill his dream. It is so hard to lose a child. Very well done 70-word story with a complete story from the child to his end.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A somber story that was enlightening in the beginning but turned sorrowful at the end. I am thinking that you were saying that he had gone to heaven's eternal gates.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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A somber story that was enlightening in the beginning but turned sorrowful at the end. I am thinking that you were saying that he had gone to heaven's eternal gates.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from eliz100
This brings a sense of sadness to me. My sister's son was killed at age 8 in a motor vehicle accident. She struggled for many years before she was able to ground herself and function. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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This brings a sense of sadness to me. My sister's son was killed at age 8 in a motor vehicle accident. She struggled for many years before she was able to ground herself and function. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from royowen
Indeed, there can be some terrible accidents happen in fairgrounds, but the stringency of safety rules are quite strict. Beautifully written my Friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Indeed, there can be some terrible accidents happen in fairgrounds, but the stringency of safety rules are quite strict. Beautifully written my Friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the reviewl
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Most welcome
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, now that's a gut punch that I didn't see coming. But it's great writing as you always offer up. I just wish it had come earlier in the week when I could reward it properly. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Wow, now that's a gut punch that I didn't see coming. But it's great writing as you always offer up. I just wish it had come earlier in the week when I could reward it properly. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Always kind reviews and words. So appreciated.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
From the joy of mother and child, to the acute sadness a year later. That is the way of life, you just don't know what tomorrow will bring. I'm sure that little boy was enjoying the ride as his ashes were released. Very sad story, but very well written for just 80 words. Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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From the joy of mother and child, to the acute sadness a year later. That is the way of life, you just don't know what tomorrow will bring. I'm sure that little boy was enjoying the ride as his ashes were released. Very sad story, but very well written for just 80 words. Well done and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 25-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from karenina
In eighty words you transported me from the joy of mother and son celebrating his birthday to the soul numbing sadness of a mom releasing her boy's ashes, weeping for the eternity of lost moments that stretch out ahead of her.
I have a lump in my throat, thinking of all the parents who have had to endure this grief...
Wow. Powerful stuff, Brett!
Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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In eighty words you transported me from the joy of mother and son celebrating his birthday to the soul numbing sadness of a mom releasing her boy's ashes, weeping for the eternity of lost moments that stretch out ahead of her.
I have a lump in my throat, thinking of all the parents who have had to endure this grief...
Wow. Powerful stuff, Brett!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
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Thanks...