Guided by Faith
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I like longer writing than most. I should one of the first things I wrote, "I Really Don't Belong Here", is almost 9000 words. I did not know that folks only wanted flash, dribbles and poetry. Hardly anyone wants to read my tome. I did as suggested, and reviewed my heinie off and promoted it all the way to #1 but no one reviews it anymore. I was going to ask my fans to read it, but I was told I couldn't do that.
So, how do I get it read? Sorry, to yammer on I am frustrated. Any ideas? Good work, I am going to read some more.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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I like longer writing than most. I should one of the first things I wrote, "I Really Don't Belong Here", is almost 9000 words. I did not know that folks only wanted flash, dribbles and poetry. Hardly anyone wants to read my tome. I did as suggested, and reviewed my heinie off and promoted it all the way to #1 but no one reviews it anymore. I was going to ask my fans to read it, but I was told I couldn't do that.
So, how do I get it read? Sorry, to yammer on I am frustrated. Any ideas? Good work, I am going to read some more.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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In order to get things read one needs to post in smaller segments. Not good, but it's how it's done here. Thank you for reading.
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Comment from Soledadpaz
You do an excellent job of characterization right off the bat. Seth comes across as all business, with a let's-get-on-with-it attitude. And Emma is a kind and giving soul, smart and probably not aware or focused on her visual beauty, but a little too trusting.
Suggest delete: "I opened the door to let her out and stood inside waiting for her to return." Reader already has this information.
Suggest delete: "I didn't plan on leaving." Reader is aware.
Sol
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023
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You do an excellent job of characterization right off the bat. Seth comes across as all business, with a let's-get-on-with-it attitude. And Emma is a kind and giving soul, smart and probably not aware or focused on her visual beauty, but a little too trusting.
Suggest delete: "I opened the door to let her out and stood inside waiting for her to return." Reader already has this information.
Suggest delete: "I didn't plan on leaving." Reader is aware.
Sol
Comment Written 30-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2023
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Again, thank you for the suggestions. I've made the changes. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Jim Wile
What a beautiful little kitten. Those big eyes, and that cute little face! The girl's kinda cute too. :) Just fooling around. I've got a cat who looked just like that as a kitten.
If she's what Emma looks like, I can understand the instant attraction by Seth! This seems like a great start to another enjoyable love story. I don't care if others say you don't write love stories (probably because you don't fill yours with a lot of gratuitous sex scenes), but I think your last one was certainly a love story.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Jim
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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What a beautiful little kitten. Those big eyes, and that cute little face! The girl's kinda cute too. :) Just fooling around. I've got a cat who looked just like that as a kitten.
If she's what Emma looks like, I can understand the instant attraction by Seth! This seems like a great start to another enjoyable love story. I don't care if others say you don't write love stories (probably because you don't fill yours with a lot of gratuitous sex scenes), but I think your last one was certainly a love story.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Jim
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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I agree with you. I feel there's a lot more to love than lust. A relationship needs to be built. That's what I attempt to do in my stories. Thank you for the support. As for the kitten, my Monty looks like the one in the photo, his brother, A.J. has a white chin. LOL
Comment from Sanku
The character flaws are quite enduring .Where in the world you'd find a perfect person?
I liked it that the characters have a totally different background from your previous novels..I am sure I am going to enjoy it ..
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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The character flaws are quite enduring .Where in the world you'd find a perfect person?
I liked it that the characters have a totally different background from your previous novels..I am sure I am going to enjoy it ..
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Thesis
Barbara, I'm glad that I was able to begin one of your books from Day 1. You present a scene and characters that can be developed in many ways, and for many reasons. I'm looking forward to following your journey with this one.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Barbara, I'm glad that I was able to begin one of your books from Day 1. You present a scene and characters that can be developed in many ways, and for many reasons. I'm looking forward to following your journey with this one.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Julie G1
Interesting, and well written. This chapter intrigues, establishes a contact, builds a word picture in a very evocative manner. I liked the interplay of characters, your choice of language was apt. Keep on writing, would love to read more.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Interesting, and well written. This chapter intrigues, establishes a contact, builds a word picture in a very evocative manner. I liked the interplay of characters, your choice of language was apt. Keep on writing, would love to read more.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Great chapter! Character flaws are never a problem. If he shakes his head a lot, so be it, and if he is bossy, well, it's who he is. It makes him real and not robotic. I wouldn't change either of his traits. I would go with them and see where he takes you development-wise. It's just my outlook! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Great chapter! Character flaws are never a problem. If he shakes his head a lot, so be it, and if he is bossy, well, it's who he is. It makes him real and not robotic. I wouldn't change either of his traits. I would go with them and see where he takes you development-wise. It's just my outlook! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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I am going with it. Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from estory
I think you did a great job sketching out the characters in this opening chapter, defining the love interest here between Emma and Seth, and as always the dialogue is crisp and loaded with beneath the surface emotions. Seth seems chivalrous, Emma comes across as capable with a touch of vulnerability and also an old fashioned, moral background. I like how the small talk reveals the attraction between characters and how they define themselves in relationships. Lots of polish as always. Also some nice building suspense. estory
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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I think you did a great job sketching out the characters in this opening chapter, defining the love interest here between Emma and Seth, and as always the dialogue is crisp and loaded with beneath the surface emotions. Seth seems chivalrous, Emma comes across as capable with a touch of vulnerability and also an old fashioned, moral background. I like how the small talk reveals the attraction between characters and how they define themselves in relationships. Lots of polish as always. Also some nice building suspense. estory
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Yay!! I am finally able to start at the beginning of one of your novels. Now all I have to is remember to fan you at the end of this review and all is good. I like that this is going to be a faith based novel. We need more of those. I liked Seth. I like that he's somewhat interested but his intuition is sending him warnings. She seems sweet with just a touch of respectful sass. I could picture her. Still trying to get a picture of Seth but that will come. Great start. Gretchen
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Yay!! I am finally able to start at the beginning of one of your novels. Now all I have to is remember to fan you at the end of this review and all is good. I like that this is going to be a faith based novel. We need more of those. I liked Seth. I like that he's somewhat interested but his intuition is sending him warnings. She seems sweet with just a touch of respectful sass. I could picture her. Still trying to get a picture of Seth but that will come. Great start. Gretchen
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. FAN ME!!!!!! LOL More detail of Seth description comes up in the next chapter.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Just seeing this today, got behind as usual. I love this beginning to your story, sounds like it is going to be a good one. That is a beautiful young lady you have chosen for your heroine.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Just seeing this today, got behind as usual. I love this beginning to your story, sounds like it is going to be a good one. That is a beautiful young lady you have chosen for your heroine.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind revie.
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You are very welcome, Barbara