Guided by Faith
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Faith Chapter 5 B"Can faith guide our path?
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I enjoyed this chapter as they get to know each other better. I suspect the sheriff isn't willing to find out the hard way that someone knows how to get into her cabin.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed this chapter as they get to know each other better. I suspect the sheriff isn't willing to find out the hard way that someone knows how to get into her cabin.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2023
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Oh my! Thank you so much.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Helmet and goggles on a dog in the sidecar of a Harley. That would be an awesome sight.
The blackmailer adds another level of suspense to the storyline.
Seems the Chief has designs on Emma.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Helmet and goggles on a dog in the sidecar of a Harley. That would be an awesome sight.
The blackmailer adds another level of suspense to the storyline.
Seems the Chief has designs on Emma.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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I think there is a romance brewing but will take a while with these two. I think a dog and helmet on a Harley would get them kicked out of the Harley riding bunch. LOL
Comment from Soledadpaz
Suggest: before he (could continue)
search her purse?
Reader may wonder why car door. Seth started out driving a pickup.
Suggest: walked from the left edge of the (concrete porch) . . . right side of (the porch).
Love that last line! So Emma is adopted and her parents want to keep it from her. I can see how that is going to be an exponential problem.
Sol
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Suggest: before he (could continue)
search her purse?
Reader may wonder why car door. Seth started out driving a pickup.
Suggest: walked from the left edge of the (concrete porch) . . . right side of (the porch).
Love that last line! So Emma is adopted and her parents want to keep it from her. I can see how that is going to be an exponential problem.
Sol
Comment Written 11-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2023
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Thank you. I made the changes. I struggled writing the description of the porch. This helped a lot.
Comment from Alaskastory
"Faith Chapter 5 B" moves the story right along. This is a nice moving chapter. Fun to read. Here are suggestions on points that made me reread a little:
Before "He put the pickup in reverse,"..might say something like," I'll get my copy of your keys."
"....he watched her search." (tell how she reached into purse and pockets or something that shows how she searched.)
Just to keep me from wondering if Emma is there you might add something like. ....Heading for the door, she called back, "I'll go in and help."
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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"Faith Chapter 5 B" moves the story right along. This is a nice moving chapter. Fun to read. Here are suggestions on points that made me reread a little:
Before "He put the pickup in reverse,"..might say something like," I'll get my copy of your keys."
"....he watched her search." (tell how she reached into purse and pockets or something that shows how she searched.)
Just to keep me from wondering if Emma is there you might add something like. ....Heading for the door, she called back, "I'll go in and help."
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the suggestions. I'll go back to those areas and check them out. I always appreciate help.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Looks like you're picking up new readers for this story and deservedly so. But not anymore than all the rest that I've read over the years. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Looks like you're picking up new readers for this story and deservedly so. But not anymore than all the rest that I've read over the years. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you for being so kind. I appreciate the support.
Comment from amahra
I enjoyed this chapter. I love the realistic dialogue with the one-on-one basketball shots and the humor referring to the dog.
"I'd rather deal with gossip than you [become] a victim." [I don't like to mess with dialogue, but since he's well educated, "your becoming a victim" or "you being a victim," I think would better suit a police chief.]
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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I enjoyed this chapter. I love the realistic dialogue with the one-on-one basketball shots and the humor referring to the dog.
"I'd rather deal with gossip than you [become] a victim." [I don't like to mess with dialogue, but since he's well educated, "your becoming a victim" or "you being a victim," I think would better suit a police chief.]
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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I made the change. Thank you for the suggestion.
Comment from lyenochka
Aww. Seth is so protective! And he already knows how to handle the situation. It's good that Emma is concerned about her reputation but she knows she can trust Seth. I liked that she remembered he likes beignets.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Aww. Seth is so protective! And he already knows how to handle the situation. It's good that Emma is concerned about her reputation but she knows she can trust Seth. I liked that she remembered he likes beignets.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate you dropping by and leaving it.
Comment from royowen
You build an excellent plot Barbara. I like the way you create drama by the fostering and nurturing of Emma's adoptive, why they haven't told her ist certain why, but I do know it can be a difficult subject. Your characters bounce off each other so well, and your male/female heroes are strong characters, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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You build an excellent plot Barbara. I like the way you create drama by the fostering and nurturing of Emma's adoptive, why they haven't told her ist certain why, but I do know it can be a difficult subject. Your characters bounce off each other so well, and your male/female heroes are strong characters, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Thank you. When Emma discovers she's adopted, she won't take it well. She feels her life is a lie. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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I can imagine
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Why on earth don't Emma's parents just sit down and tell her she's adopted? She will find out one day. It seems the biological mother's boyfriend is the one who is stalking her. It's not something they can keep quiet. At least she has Seth next door, he'll also be keeping an eye on her. Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Why on earth don't Emma's parents just sit down and tell her she's adopted? She will find out one day. It seems the biological mother's boyfriend is the one who is stalking her. It's not something they can keep quiet. At least she has Seth next door, he'll also be keeping an eye on her. Another excellent chapter, Barbara. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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When Emma discovers she's adopted it doesn't go over well. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Another great addition, Barbara.
"Since your parents are already in bed, my place." When Emma glared at him, Seth continued
I think glare here is too harsh. It threw me off. It seems angry and they are becoming friends. Just my two cents.
Again, I really like the characters. They are very realistic and likable.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Another great addition, Barbara.
"Since your parents are already in bed, my place." When Emma glared at him, Seth continued
I think glare here is too harsh. It threw me off. It seems angry and they are becoming friends. Just my two cents.
Again, I really like the characters. They are very realistic and likable.
D
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2023
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Emma's not happy about the idea, but I will rethink it. Thank you for the kind review.