Comment from Heather Knight

Exceptional

There are many things I love about this poem:
- the very natural rhymes
- the hint of romance
- the underlying sadness.
It's different from the more jovial ones you often write, but it's also excellent.
The picture is also great, by the way.
Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Ah, thanks so much for this, Maria :)
I really appreciate that extra star and your comments are lovely.
Sending my best as always, Debra xx

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Really well done. The passage from the hopeful eyes to the need to just have a little time alone is stated oh so poetically and with all the love still singing between the lines despite domestic obligations.

Much enjoyed and I have every confidence you will achieve your goals. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Gloria :)
I appreciate your feedback and encouragement.
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm glad you wrote it even if unrelated to the original prompt. I think this speaks for many who had changed over time because of all that domesticity does to us!

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thanks for your understanding feedback, Helen :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem, Not the Way You Look at Me, sounds a lot like a "pack your bags, Biff; you are OUT of HERE." Someone should tell him he is out of time.................................

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thank you for your feedback, Bill :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Debra, I think we all feel like this on some days, missing those carefree days before the responsibilities of adulthood, marriage, and motherhood. The secret is not to stay there too long. A powerful poem in abstract. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the book.
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thanks for your kind and understanding feedback, Sal :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I suppose some folk would tire of the repetitions of life that bear down on us, and this could apply to anyone. I think that my dear wife and I have worked that out a long time ago, well done Debra. Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thank you for your feedback, Roy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

reply by royowen on 12-Apr-2023

Most welcome

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is what happens in long married life and sometimes it is good to behave like a couple of youngsters again to add that magical spark to an intimate marriage, I loved the sentiment here Debra, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

Oh, you're not alone in wanting some unencumbered me time. You do a good job of expressing the slow erosion of ourselves that can happen over time. Time for me time. Use it only as you imagine it. I like your poem.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Linda, for your kind feedback.
Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a lovely poem expressing the thoughts of so many. The selection of words: obligation, compromise, domesticity are particularly resonant and convey your message powerfully. Well metered with good imagery and image. Thanks for sharing, Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Debbie, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes, Debra :)