Thirty (hopefully) Poems for April
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Come The Harvest"A loose attempt at NaPoWriMo 2023
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wonderful painting! And your verse is such a clever spin on it. Thoroughly enjoyable and an amusing twist at the end. It really flows, has good alliteration, is so imaginative and ticks all the apple boxes for me. Well done and best wishes, Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Wonderful painting! And your verse is such a clever spin on it. Thoroughly enjoyable and an amusing twist at the end. It really flows, has good alliteration, is so imaginative and ticks all the apple boxes for me. Well done and best wishes, Debbie
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie :) I'm happy that you enjoyed reading my poem.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a good poem with effective imagery.
-I like how you personalize the apples on the tree
and what happens to the rest that don't meet the grade.
-Good use of alliteration with "fall and ferment"
and a good conclusion.
-The poem can also be an analogy for people
and how different ones feel.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a good poem with effective imagery.
-I like how you personalize the apples on the tree
and what happens to the rest that don't meet the grade.
-Good use of alliteration with "fall and ferment"
and a good conclusion.
-The poem can also be an analogy for people
and how different ones feel.
-Well done!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful feedback. I appreciate it :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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You are very welcome, Debra.
Comment from Heather Knight
I'm laughing out loud now. I love this! You have an incredibly fertile imagination.
The picture is also priceless.
I wish I had a sixer for you.
BTW, how do you write those c's. Do you use the ampersand symbol?
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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I'm laughing out loud now. I love this! You have an incredibly fertile imagination.
The picture is also priceless.
I wish I had a sixer for you.
BTW, how do you write those c's. Do you use the ampersand symbol?
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Hi Maria :)
Thanks for the great feedback, glad you enjoyed the read! I couldn?t let that artwork pass me by without writing about it! I think it?s the k that has the flicky bit rather than the c. I use Corben font and that?s just how it appears! X
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I?ll try it one day. It looks cool.
Comment from Gloria ....
I really enjoyed your humour here. As an apple the inevitable ending doesn't sound all that great no matter which one it is.
Your use of alliteration was exceptional and I was particularly taken with the picked, plastic packed to be nibbled and peck. That is adroit and most pleasing.
You are almost caught up too.
Much enjoyed. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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I really enjoyed your humour here. As an apple the inevitable ending doesn't sound all that great no matter which one it is.
Your use of alliteration was exceptional and I was particularly taken with the picked, plastic packed to be nibbled and peck. That is adroit and most pleasing.
You are almost caught up too.
Much enjoyed. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Gloria :)
I?m glad you enjoyed my take on the artwork!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Val Crisson
You could be turned into a delicious apple pie? Love this whimsical take on the life and demise of the apple. The structure is perfect for free verse "in my humble opinion," and great use of alliteration with the letter "p" I hope you accomplish your goal.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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You could be turned into a delicious apple pie? Love this whimsical take on the life and demise of the apple. The structure is perfect for free verse "in my humble opinion," and great use of alliteration with the letter "p" I hope you accomplish your goal.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Hi Val :)
Thank you for your lovely and encouraging feedback.
I think if I was an apple and I could decide my fate, it definitely would be as an apple pie?s innards - as long as I could be enjoyed with some vanilla ice cream!
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We all wonder the same as the end comes for all of us, but it is best not to think of that when there is still vibrant life in us. Apples soon go rotten if they are fresh and not genetically modified, a fine post Debra, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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We all wonder the same as the end comes for all of us, but it is best not to think of that when there is still vibrant life in us. Apples soon go rotten if they are fresh and not genetically modified, a fine post Debra, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow! What a poem and from a take completely unique! I'm impressed!
I really like your color scheme and the picture you picked out it's very beautiful,
I enjoyed your last dance of the best which wrapped it all up for me and surprise me so that's pretty cool if you ask me!
I see no issues with your work chromatically speak Nor do I see any issues aesthetically speaking it's very tough to improve on something that's already so great! I hope you have a fabulous afternoon!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Wow! What a poem and from a take completely unique! I'm impressed!
I really like your color scheme and the picture you picked out it's very beautiful,
I enjoyed your last dance of the best which wrapped it all up for me and surprise me so that's pretty cool if you ask me!
I see no issues with your work chromatically speak Nor do I see any issues aesthetically speaking it's very tough to improve on something that's already so great! I hope you have a fabulous afternoon!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for this lovely feedback, Lea, I appreciate it :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from royowen
It's funny how poetry seems to collect similar themes, they have been difficult to interpret this morning, they all seemed to be obscure, I'm feeling rather stupid, these seem to streams of consciousness, well done though, blessings Debra, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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It's funny how poetry seems to collect similar themes, they have been difficult to interpret this morning, they all seemed to be obscure, I'm feeling rather stupid, these seem to streams of consciousness, well done though, blessings Debra, Roy
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your feedback, Roy :)
Best wishes, Debra
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Most welcome
Comment from shelley kaye
i like that it's all left aligned except "the rejects" - makes them stand out and get their 15 minutes lol
maybe have "the rejects" as the title?
eh just a afterthought lol
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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i like that it's all left aligned except "the rejects" - makes them stand out and get their 15 minutes lol
maybe have "the rejects" as the title?
eh just a afterthought lol
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much for reading and for your feedback, Shelley :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
That's some artwork - switching humans with the plight of apples. Lol. But I guess the better thing about those being left to the worms and birds is that the remainder will feed the earth and a new generation of trees.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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That's some artwork - switching humans with the plight of apples. Lol. But I guess the better thing about those being left to the worms and birds is that the remainder will feed the earth and a new generation of trees.
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2023
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That?s a very good point, Helen :)
Thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra x