Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Debra,
I can only imagine you are writing about the line-ups to get a glimpse of King Charles III at his crowning. A stiff upper lip, yes, because he's got Queen Camilla smiling beside him. It should have been Diana if there were any justice in this mad world. Goodness, yes... have the teapot ready! With some jam-topped cookies, if you please. If I'm going to be a guest at the reception, I must be fed! I'll take King Cole any day!
I especially like the personification of the line (queue) limping ahead.
"queue limps forward"
Terrific imagery with so many Brits standing there ready to cry at the proceedings. So sad, but they must act in a noble fashion. The nation is on stage! Places everyone!
Keep at the NaPoWriMo! Yer doin' fine!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Hi Kimbob,
Thanks for your feedback :)
Yep, we're looking forward to the big occasion in a couple of weeks time (and appreciative of the national holiday we all get the following Monday!) I'll watch it on the telly though, not planning on travelling and queueing just for a tiny glimpse! And I agree with you about Diana...
Enjoy your tea and jam-topped cookies!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x

Comment from Kerry Foley

Excellent

I'll take a spot if you don't mind, it sounds delightful. Of course, we must maintain its upper lip as we sip. Lol

Love it!


- Kerry

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023

Hi Kerry,
Thank you for your feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

You depicted yourself very well. My British grandfather was a kind man but very unemotional and private. He had his hot tea and toast every day. A delightful read and brought back many memories of him. Sending you my best today as always and blessings abundant.
Sal xoxo

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023

Thanks so much, Sal, glad to wake up some happy memories for you!
Sending love, Debra x

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Orderly queues at my local Post office are a trial but no one complains and we all wait our turn and then go and put the kettle on! I enjoyed your sweet natured words here Debra, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023

Thanks so much, Dolly :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork and presentation, Debra.
-Notes are appreciated.
-A well written poem with effective imagery.
-You captured the essence of the three parts
of being British very well.
-A very good concluding line.
-Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023

Thanks so much for your lovely feedback, Pam :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

reply by Pam (respa) on 21-Apr-2023

You are welcome, Debra.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

In life I admire the fact that the British folks do tend to keep a stiff upper lip and the times of trials. I enjoyed this but I'm very much and I wish you the very best and all that you do. I myself have been through many trials and I've had to keep a stiff upper lip many times. Patricia

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023

Thank you for your kind feedback, Patricia :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, thank you for participating in the haiku club event. Great entry with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery. The satori is a good twist.

Good job,

Gypsy

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Hi Gypsy :)
Thank you so. Inch for your lovely feedback on my senryu. I?m glad you enjoyed it.
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Ha ha ha I hope that the last line's hilarious made me chuckle! Thank you so much for the smile!
It's a great Entry you're really good job I find no issues with your grammar or the subject matter. A good piece of work with a bit of levity on the end makes for a very fine package indeed. Perhaps one small suggestion turn up the font on your calm and reduce your picture of it. It's kind of overwhelming you are gorgeous home somewhat.
This however does not take away from your poem and it is a fine submission. I wish you best a lot have a great afternoon!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Hi Lea :)
Thank you so much for your great feedback.
I appreciate your comments and suggestions, best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Congratulations on being able to keep calm despite a line up that is moving forward at a snail's pace. I really have difficulty standing patiently in long queues but am getting better at it.

Excellent contribution the Haiku club. This is a fine senryu. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Gloria, I?m glad you enjoyed my senryu :)
I?m keeping a stiff upper lip right now from the 2 star review I just received.... I?m crying inside though!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

These words say so much more than meets the eye. It is about temperament and maybe tempers, about customs and culture. And there is a gentle undertone of humor. Nicely done!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Ginda, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)