Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Was the pit undercooked? Waiting for the pie to cook makes us impatient, and can give you a belly ache if you eat it when it's not cooked properly ! Ha ha ha, la fun write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023

HI Dolly :)
Thank you for your feedback
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

I think this is a terrific poem. Sometimes we don't have the patience to wait until the "pie" is done to perfection and then of course all those that said oh don't worry about it, complain.

Thanks for sharing this pure delight. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Hi Gloria :)
Thank you so much for your insightful feedback.
I'm thrilled that you 'got' what I was trying to say and you saw through the pie analogy!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

So only the narrator ate the pie that was so belatedly baked ? Ah bit few have the gift of patience and I hope the poet enjoyed the satisfying pie! I liked the emotions conveyed through formatting.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Thanks so much for your feedback, Helen :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x

Comment from redlemurick

Exceptional

I never quite know how to rate/review free verse poems; but first, I love pie, 2nd, I've lived this - or at least how I interpreted it when people eat the pie before it's ready... :) The layout/spacing is great I love seeing it utilized in free-verse poems more. I think to me it's well thought out, and reads better for it. I have nothing critical; except that more pie should be made and next time maybe if they wait they will be satisfied as I was reading this poem! Good job! Now I must eat something like pie...

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Hi :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed my free verse poem and hope you enjoyed your pie snack! Do you favour sweet or savoury?!
Thank you also for your generous star rating - I'm very appreciative!
Best wishes, Debra :)

reply by redlemurick on 22-Apr-2023

I like both sorta vicious cycle sweet pies make me want savoury pies make me want sweet pies... :)

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. The sentences flow with clarity. It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Thank you for your kind feedback, best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Evelyn Hopkins

Excellent

I like the poem! very interesting topic and idea. I also like the picture chosen to go with this. I hope you have a good day :)

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2023

Thank you for your feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I guess the temptation was too much for them, I was wondering why waiting would have made a difference. But then I'm glad you are doing well in the April endeavour, beautifully written blessings Roy

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023

Hi Roy, thank you for your feedback :)
Waiting could have made all the difference to the pie if the crust needed a little extra time to crisp up, or if the filling needed to cool down a little, or if there was going to be an accompaniment to go with the pie.... custard maybe, or gravy!
The poem wasn?t really about pie though, it was more of a metaphor about being patience, or lack of :)
Best wishes as always, Debra

reply by royowen on 21-Apr-2023

Yes, I got the impatience, but I didn?t know about the crisping, thank you for explaining. Blessings Roy