Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Good 5-7-5 poem about sleeping. I have problems sleeping too.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Not good, my friend. Yep, Time to drain the brain and get some sleep. I don't know how you are doing it? The month is almost over so maybe a reprieve. An honest write though and always appreciated. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal xoxo

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Sal, for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :) xx

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I have some of those nights as well. So I can well very late to the thing said you were going through with your sleeping. I wish you the very best in all of your writing. God bless and have a good day. Patricia

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Patricia, for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I have suffered from this the night before an important appointment or I have felt excited about a special day, then I just can't get to sleep! Ha ha ha, few words here and I understood your meaning easily Debra, a clever write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Dolly, for your kind and understanding feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :) xx

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I'm sorry to hear that, Debra. I wish you had got your inspiration from a good night's sleep.
I love the second line, especially the use of the word jostle.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Maria, for your kind feedback. Every night is the same at the moment, I'm exhausted...! Best wishes as always, Debra :) xx

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good image and presentation, Debra.
-I'm sorry you are having trouble sleeping.
-Have you tried having a routine before you
go to bed. I find reading very relaxing and
do that every night.
-You wrote a good poem about it with
effective imagery and alliteration.
-Hope things improve for you.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Pam, for your kind feedback and the advice. I try to keep to a routine, but it's not always possible (timing mostly!) with everyone else in the house! Best wishes as always, Debra :) x

reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Apr-2023

You are very welcome, Debra, and I know what you mean about keeping things together in the household.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I'm sorry that you are not getting a great night's sleep, dear Debra, I pray that you get a good night's sleep tonight. A good 5/7/5 post dear friend, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Roy, for your kind feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)

reply by royowen on 29-Apr-2023

Welcome

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Yes each and every day God gives us the gift of waking up to enjoy it.
But in this fast pace society how can we enjoy something when we can't slow down?
We can't rest or even take that afternoon nap that our bodies crave cuz we're doing the old 9:00 to 5:00.
Well written and thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much for your kind feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Hi, Debra.

I think we all suffer from this, especially when we are suffering from stress or there is some uncertainty about the future - I know these feelings infect my dreams as well as those half asleep moments.

I loved those first two lines as a description of this, especially 'jostle for acknowledgement' which so accurately reflects the process of the brain flitting from one stressor to the next.

Steve

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Steve, for your kind and understanding feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is really good, Debra. Me, I am a sleep hog, and nothing gets in the way of it. Even though I have the occasional nightmare, for the most part intrusions have left me alone.

This is very clever and I thank you for sharing.

Gloria

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 Comment Written 27-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023

Thank you so much, Gloria, for your kind feedback. I envy your ability to sleep soundly almost all of the time! Best wishes as always, Debra :) x