Thirty (hopefully) Poems for April
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Morning"A loose attempt at NaPoWriMo 2023
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Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Debra how nice to hear the bird singing up so high. I liked your haiku it is contemporaneously written and
Makes sense a good image too
Well done to finish this challenge
Cheers Chrisx
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Hi Debra how nice to hear the bird singing up so high. I liked your haiku it is contemporaneously written and
Makes sense a good image too
Well done to finish this challenge
Cheers Chrisx
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you, Christine :) Best wishes always, Debra x
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
what a lovely start to your day. I have found an accelerated dawn chorus programme on BBC4 - they show bits at real speed, zooming on to the next bit, to cover the whole thing in 15 mins, with no voice over. It's wonderful. kay
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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what a lovely start to your day. I have found an accelerated dawn chorus programme on BBC4 - they show bits at real speed, zooming on to the next bit, to cover the whole thing in 15 mins, with no voice over. It's wonderful. kay
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Kay, for your kind feedback. The programme sounds lovely - I will have to look for it.
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
Comment from patcelaw
When I go out for an early morning walk I find that the birds or sitting at the top of the trees and their serenading me with your beautiful songs. I really enjoyed this poem very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Treasure
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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When I go out for an early morning walk I find that the birds or sitting at the top of the trees and their serenading me with your beautiful songs. I really enjoyed this poem very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Treasure
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Patricia, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your photo is so beautiful and I can see how it inspired this lovely Haiku. There is nothing like sweet birdsong to welcome the new day. A concert we are daily invited to, if we are still enough to listen.
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Your photo is so beautiful and I can see how it inspired this lovely Haiku. There is nothing like sweet birdsong to welcome the new day. A concert we are daily invited to, if we are still enough to listen.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Wendy, for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes, Debra :)
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I'm sorry, Ginda, I'd just replied to Wendy and for some reason typed her name again. Please accept my apology... I truly appreciate your feedback of my poem. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Heather Knight
I love both the picture (the greys are beautiful) and the poem. Alliteration is my favourite literary device, so I like your second line very much.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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I love both the picture (the greys are beautiful) and the poem. Alliteration is my favourite literary device, so I like your second line very much.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Maria, for your kind feedback and encouragement. Glad you enjoyed the alliteration!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice photo and presentation, Debra.
-It's always nice to hear the birds; that
one was pretty high up in the tree.
-A well written haiku with effective imagery
about the branch and bird.
-A good satori line, too.
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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-Very nice photo and presentation, Debra.
-It's always nice to hear the birds; that
one was pretty high up in the tree.
-A well written haiku with effective imagery
about the branch and bird.
-A good satori line, too.
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your kind and encouraging feedback. I appreciate it as always.
Best wishes, Debra :) x
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You are welcome, Debra.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Maybe a blackbird. They sing so beautifully. This is a lovely little haiku with that all-important (for me) alliteration which binds the whole verse together so smoothly and sweetly, like a song itself. Enjoyed the awakening theme and the bird's lofty position up high. Syllable count perfect. Verse ticks all the boxes for me. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Maybe a blackbird. They sing so beautifully. This is a lovely little haiku with that all-important (for me) alliteration which binds the whole verse together so smoothly and sweetly, like a song itself. Enjoyed the awakening theme and the bird's lofty position up high. Syllable count perfect. Verse ticks all the boxes for me. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie, for your kind and thoughtful review of my haiku. It's lovely to know what works :) I enjoy alliteration too (as long as it's not delivered with a sledgehammer!)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
lovely photograph and I hear these wonderful sounds all the time and birds are so entertaining. That looks like a big bird in that tree, although it does look like a blackbirds to me, your few words here and hopeful and promising Debra, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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lovely photograph and I hear these wonderful sounds all the time and birds are so entertaining. That looks like a big bird in that tree, although it does look like a blackbirds to me, your few words here and hopeful and promising Debra, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely feedback. Glad you enjoyed the read :) Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Sally Law
Aw, such a lovely and succinct haiku, beautifully written and illustrated with the photo. I can't really see it, but I know it must be there. I'm glad you were blessed with morning inspiration. Sending you my very best and good wishes for the book.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Aw, such a lovely and succinct haiku, beautifully written and illustrated with the photo. I can't really see it, but I know it must be there. I'm glad you were blessed with morning inspiration. Sending you my very best and good wishes for the book.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, dear Sal :) I appreciate your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Mintybee
Your haiku was sweet and the syllables were right on track. The bird serenading the morning was a nice image. The alliteration in the middle line was songlike, which worked nicely with the poem about a songbird.
Mintybee
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reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Your haiku was sweet and the syllables were right on track. The bird serenading the morning was a nice image. The alliteration in the middle line was songlike, which worked nicely with the poem about a songbird.
Mintybee
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Comment Written 01-May-2023
reply by the author on 02-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Mintybee, for your kind feedback and encouragement.
Best wishes, Debra :)