Thirty (hopefully) Poems for April
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Bubbling"A loose attempt at NaPoWriMo 2023
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Comment from patcelaw
A lot of people enjoy and your bottle of soda and then handing it to somebody I'm watching them open it with him being unaware of that the bottle has been shaken. This reminds me of a keep that I made for giving my husband a haircut. The Cape on the front of it said haircuts at your own risk. Patricia
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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A lot of people enjoy and your bottle of soda and then handing it to somebody I'm watching them open it with him being unaware of that the bottle has been shaken. This reminds me of a keep that I made for giving my husband a haircut. The Cape on the front of it said haircuts at your own risk. Patricia
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you for your feedback, Patricia :) Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely! I enjoyed this and know it's no judgement on yourself! Clever in its simplicity and meaning. Loved the alliteration and imagery throughout. Well done! Take care, Debbie PS Are you nearly there?
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Lovely! I enjoyed this and know it's no judgement on yourself! Clever in its simplicity and meaning. Loved the alliteration and imagery throughout. Well done! Take care, Debbie PS Are you nearly there?
Comment Written 05-May-2023
reply by the author on 05-May-2023
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Hi Debbie, thanks for your feedback :) I am that bottle of fizzing resentment at times...guilty of biting my tongue instead of speaking up and then letting things bubble inside. My own worst enemy!
Nearly there now - just 3 left to complete the book :) x
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Must be something about our name :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write about people's pent up anger Debra and we see displays of bad temper when it is let loose, a great metaphor Debra, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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A poignant write about people's pent up anger Debra and we see displays of bad temper when it is let loose, a great metaphor Debra, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your 555 poem, Debra.
The picture was perfect as was the syllable count
per line. I liked the alliteration of 'f', and the
personification of the bottle. If I'm home, I always
open over a sink any bottle that's been tossed
around.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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You did a great job with your 555 poem, Debra.
The picture was perfect as was the syllable count
per line. I liked the alliteration of 'f', and the
personification of the bottle. If I'm home, I always
open over a sink any bottle that's been tossed
around.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a good poem about it.
-A good opening line about keeping
feelings inside.
-Effective imagery and alliteration in line two.
-A very good closing line.
-Well done!
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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-Good image and presentation, Debra.
-You wrote a good poem about it.
-A good opening line about keeping
feelings inside.
-Effective imagery and alliteration in line two.
-A very good closing line.
-Well done!
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Pam :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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You are welcome, Debra.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice 5/5/5 poem. I like the presentation too. Concrete images are easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Nice 5/5/5 poem. I like the presentation too. Concrete images are easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind feedback, Gypsy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from lyenochka
Well said! You're really good with this super brief poetic forms! I'm glad you're continuing to add to the book! Yes, let's watch out if we see any bottled resentments based on real or imagined events!
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Well said! You're really good with this super brief poetic forms! I'm glad you're continuing to add to the book! Yes, let's watch out if we see any bottled resentments based on real or imagined events!
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thanks so much for your kind feedback, Helen :)
Yes, I'll add to the book 'til I've 30 chapters - not planning on quitting any time soon - slow and steady LOL!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
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Good for you! Thank you for joining us this year! 💖
Comment from royowen
Yes you're right, if we choose to respond to them, they may muck up our whole lives. This has become a common theme in the posts I've read this morning, beautifully written Debra, blessings Roy
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Yes you're right, if we choose to respond to them, they may muck up our whole lives. This has become a common theme in the posts I've read this morning, beautifully written Debra, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 06-May-2023
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Thank you for your feedback, Roy :)
Best wishes, Debra
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A pleasure