Love You More
With every sunrise30 total reviews
Comment from Debra White
Hello Jessica :)
I enjoyed reading your loop poem.
I have found that the form usually reads awkwardly with the repeated words together sounding forced or clumsy. Your poem, however, reads smoothly and you make the form beautiful.
I absolutely love the theme and you have presented it well.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Hello Jessica :)
I enjoyed reading your loop poem.
I have found that the form usually reads awkwardly with the repeated words together sounding forced or clumsy. Your poem, however, reads smoothly and you make the form beautiful.
I absolutely love the theme and you have presented it well.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 12-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Debra!!
Comment from shelley kaye
sweet loop poem about the love and bond between mom and baby
very nicely done with good rhyme and flow
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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sweet loop poem about the love and bond between mom and baby
very nicely done with good rhyme and flow
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you, Shelley!
Comment from Teri7
Jessica, This is a very lovely and well written Loop poem. You used lots of love and very good descriptive words with great imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Jessica, This is a very lovely and well written Loop poem. You used lots of love and very good descriptive words with great imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 11-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much! I appreciate that. :)
Xo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your loop contest entry, Jessica.
I enjoyed reading it. The rhyme scheme was followed
perfectly, it had smooth flow, and the art was appropriate.
Your loop words were great, Most of them used a different
meaning the second time they were presented. They weren't
just repeated to fit the rules. Your message was clearly stated.
A mother's love is always true as you described it.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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You did a great job with your loop contest entry, Jessica.
I enjoyed reading it. The rhyme scheme was followed
perfectly, it had smooth flow, and the art was appropriate.
Your loop words were great, Most of them used a different
meaning the second time they were presented. They weren't
just repeated to fit the rules. Your message was clearly stated.
A mother's love is always true as you described it.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 10-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Jan!!
Xo Jess
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
A terrific job on your loop poem - love what you've said and the overall presentation. We do love our children more with "every rising sun." I think you have to be a parent to understand that growing up and becoming an adult will not shut off our love.
Good luck in the contest.
Pam
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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A terrific job on your loop poem - love what you've said and the overall presentation. We do love our children more with "every rising sun." I think you have to be a parent to understand that growing up and becoming an adult will not shut off our love.
Good luck in the contest.
Pam
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Pam. I appreciate that. So true!
Xo
Jess
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This is a well done loop poem that tells us a true mother's love never ends, no matter how old the son/daughter gets. I like the metaphor of entwined tree roots,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Hi Jessica,
This is a well done loop poem that tells us a true mother's love never ends, no matter how old the son/daughter gets. I like the metaphor of entwined tree roots,
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 12-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Joan. I appreciate your review.
Xo
Jessica
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My pleasure, Jessica.
Joan
Comment from G0dd0ll
Bravo! What a wonderful poem! The repeats are excellent and the poem itself is NOT too sappy. When you deal with love you have to watch that and you did. I really enjoyed this reading. Thank you.
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Bravo! What a wonderful poem! The repeats are excellent and the poem itself is NOT too sappy. When you deal with love you have to watch that and you did. I really enjoyed this reading. Thank you.
Comment Written 09-May-2023
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Thank you so much!! I appreciate your review and stars!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Mintybee
This is a sweet poem with a lullaby feel to it. Some of the words might be a big advanced for a child, like intertwined, or validation. But the ideas are sweet and reassuring. I particularly liked this phrase, "Mind of wonder wanders still."
Mintybee
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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This is a sweet poem with a lullaby feel to it. Some of the words might be a big advanced for a child, like intertwined, or validation. But the ideas are sweet and reassuring. I particularly liked this phrase, "Mind of wonder wanders still."
Mintybee
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Your feedback is greatly appreciated! Although not my initial intention, as I was writing this piece it did start to develop into more of a lullaby! So I am particularly grateful - you make an excellent point, I will revisit. Thank you again for your valuable input!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful poem entry for the Loop Poetry Contest. It's one of the better ones I've seen.
I love the imagery and presentation.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Wonderful poem entry for the Loop Poetry Contest. It's one of the better ones I've seen.
I love the imagery and presentation.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 09-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 09-May-2023
reply by the author on 09-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica