Guided by Faith
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Comment from Ricky1024
Emma and Seth seem to both be not sure of a relationship.
I like how she was so helpful with his sunburn and he kept wanting to leave and she kept making him stay there and making up excuses.
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Well presented and I could find no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a pleasant evening.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Emma and Seth seem to both be not sure of a relationship.
I like how she was so helpful with his sunburn and he kept wanting to leave and she kept making him stay there and making up excuses.
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Well presented and I could find no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this and have a pleasant evening.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Great addition to the book. I see it sits at #1 for May. Well deserved, my friend.
I like the character development. Hard to point anything out with such a highly rated piece, but one thing did throw me:
Emma glanced at the backdoor. "Come inside and sit." Once he sat, she asked, "Can I push up your T-shirt so I can check the problem?" He answered, so she did. "You have a nasty sunburn. I'm guessing you missed an area."
(The 'He answered' part. A little confusion or flow stopping. Maybe 'he nodded' or another word? Or maybe my 50% idiot has come for a visit?)
Regardless. Great story line.
D
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Great addition to the book. I see it sits at #1 for May. Well deserved, my friend.
I like the character development. Hard to point anything out with such a highly rated piece, but one thing did throw me:
Emma glanced at the backdoor. "Come inside and sit." Once he sat, she asked, "Can I push up your T-shirt so I can check the problem?" He answered, so she did. "You have a nasty sunburn. I'm guessing you missed an area."
(The 'He answered' part. A little confusion or flow stopping. Maybe 'he nodded' or another word? Or maybe my 50% idiot has come for a visit?)
Regardless. Great story line.
D
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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I didn't want to use another dialogue, but wanted him to answer, so tried it that way. I changed it to nodded. It does read better. Thank you for the help. I always appreciate it.
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So another 10, 273 assists and I will be caught up? Ha! I appreciate you, Barbara. You are so kind.
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LOL You're sweet. Just finished one of your posts. Off to read the other.
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you are developing the characters in this little town. I like how even your minor characters like Miss Sadie is a part of the fun.
It feels like Seth is changing and relaxing, even letting Emma treat his sunburn. I sense something will happen soon!
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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I like how you are developing the characters in this little town. I like how even your minor characters like Miss Sadie is a part of the fun.
It feels like Seth is changing and relaxing, even letting Emma treat his sunburn. I sense something will happen soon!
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Seth is still worried about the age thing. He had to help raise his sister, the same age.
Comment from Pam (respa)
I'm glad to hear your husband is healing. Thanks for the notes and the Mother's Day wishes. Hope you had a good Mother's Day, too.
A very good chapter that moves the potential romance along a little more. Emma seems less shy, and Pastor Pat lets Emma know that Seth is coming out of his shell. I like the beginning when they are discussion the dogs and what a big help they were, providing comfort, etc. Emma did a great job taking care of Seth's sunburn and wasn't shy about it. Sounds like she would make a good nurse.
An intriguing ending about the possible identity of Emma's mother and how that might link to the Crown Victoria. Well done!!
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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I'm glad to hear your husband is healing. Thanks for the notes and the Mother's Day wishes. Hope you had a good Mother's Day, too.
A very good chapter that moves the potential romance along a little more. Emma seems less shy, and Pastor Pat lets Emma know that Seth is coming out of his shell. I like the beginning when they are discussion the dogs and what a big help they were, providing comfort, etc. Emma did a great job taking care of Seth's sunburn and wasn't shy about it. Sounds like she would make a good nurse.
An intriguing ending about the possible identity of Emma's mother and how that might link to the Crown Victoria. Well done!!
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
It looks like Emma has been a good influence on Seth and their relationship is blossoming. It's very romantic. It's fun to watch them get closer emotionally and physically.
I like the old fashion plot. I never had that kind of relationship and I would have enjoyed it. I want to be independent but also taken care of, you know?
Another wonderful chapter, we'll done.
Emma treating Seth's sunburn shirtless is very sensual but respectful, I like it.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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It looks like Emma has been a good influence on Seth and their relationship is blossoming. It's very romantic. It's fun to watch them get closer emotionally and physically.
I like the old fashion plot. I never had that kind of relationship and I would have enjoyed it. I want to be independent but also taken care of, you know?
Another wonderful chapter, we'll done.
Emma treating Seth's sunburn shirtless is very sensual but respectful, I like it.
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement. I take a few hits for being old fashioned, but I've found there's a real market for it.
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I love your book. It's very romantic
Comment from Teri7
Barbara, This is a very well written chapter with a lot of great descriptive words and very good dialogue. It gave me hope as I read it and then read your notes. I did not see any errors or spam in this. I look forward to your next one. love and prayers for you and your husband! Teri
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Barbara, This is a very well written chapter with a lot of great descriptive words and very good dialogue. It gave me hope as I read it and then read your notes. I did not see any errors or spam in this. I look forward to your next one. love and prayers for you and your husband! Teri
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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you are so welcome! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"I need treat it" should be I need to treat it.
"I'll use a cold towel and the shirt would get wet" probably should be I'll use a cold towel or the shirt would get wet.
That Crown Victoria has aroused Seth's curiosity in more ways than one. Good lead-in to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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"I need treat it" should be I need to treat it.
"I'll use a cold towel and the shirt would get wet" probably should be I'll use a cold towel or the shirt would get wet.
That Crown Victoria has aroused Seth's curiosity in more ways than one. Good lead-in to the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you, again, for the help. I always miss those small, but important words. When I edit, I read as if they're there. Again, thank you.
Comment from estory
This chapter was really well orchestrated and came off with a lot of polish. I loved that dialogue between Seth and Emma, and it the scene was also very visual, with her dabbing that cold water and aloe on his bare back. We feel the attraction between them, but there is also that hanging back, and we get a little explanation from the pastor at church. You are painting a picture of two people drawn to each other by physical attraction and something of common values, down home views, faith and family, that sort of thing. What's great about your writing is that it all comes through naturally in the dialogue. Then there is that unsettling bit at the end where we are reminded of the danger faced by Emma. Seth is there to protect her and you have set the stage for more tension. estory
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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This chapter was really well orchestrated and came off with a lot of polish. I loved that dialogue between Seth and Emma, and it the scene was also very visual, with her dabbing that cold water and aloe on his bare back. We feel the attraction between them, but there is also that hanging back, and we get a little explanation from the pastor at church. You are painting a picture of two people drawn to each other by physical attraction and something of common values, down home views, faith and family, that sort of thing. What's great about your writing is that it all comes through naturally in the dialogue. Then there is that unsettling bit at the end where we are reminded of the danger faced by Emma. Seth is there to protect her and you have set the stage for more tension. estory
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from BethShelby
This was fun to read. I understand Emma innocense. I was pretty over protected as well. I sure younger people are so much any more. Seth seems a little uptight himself and overly anxious he doesn't overstay his welcome. I guessing the car stalking Emma does have something to do with her birth parents. I need treat it. ( I need to treat it.)
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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This was fun to read. I understand Emma innocense. I was pretty over protected as well. I sure younger people are so much any more. Seth seems a little uptight himself and overly anxious he doesn't overstay his welcome. I guessing the car stalking Emma does have something to do with her birth parents. I need treat it. ( I need to treat it.)
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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I think Seth is afraid of a relationship with Emma. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jan Hope
This is a great story of two people; whom I hope will end up together. Then there is the intriguing mystery of the Crown Vic, and the natural birth parents of Emma. I see this is chapter 9 and I have not read the other chapters being a newbie on Fanstory, but this is a great read.
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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This is a great story of two people; whom I hope will end up together. Then there is the intriguing mystery of the Crown Vic, and the natural birth parents of Emma. I see this is chapter 9 and I have not read the other chapters being a newbie on Fanstory, but this is a great read.
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 16-May-2023
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I hope you drop by again.