The Pond Awakens
3-6-9 syllables in 3 stanzas.29 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
You have a delicious use of words that takes the reader out into nature. I can see and hear the mallard ducks as they fly and quack. I admire your smooth flow of rhyming words. Congrats on winning the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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You have a delicious use of words that takes the reader out into nature. I can see and hear the mallard ducks as they fly and quack. I admire your smooth flow of rhyming words. Congrats on winning the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for this lovely review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is very nice. I can see why it won first place. Very appropriate art/illustration as well. Great 'g' alliteration, rhyme, rhythm, imagery. Hope you have a super weekend.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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This is very nice. I can see why it won first place. Very appropriate art/illustration as well. Great 'g' alliteration, rhyme, rhythm, imagery. Hope you have a super weekend.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful review, and congratulations to you on your own placing in the contest.
Comment from Contests
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Lisasview
Lovely poem with a perfect image....
love the colors...........
The best of luck in the 3-6-9 contest...
Lisasview, new to this site.............................
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Lovely poem with a perfect image....
love the colors...........
The best of luck in the 3-6-9 contest...
Lisasview, new to this site.............................
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Hi Lisa,
thanks for your kind review. I'm an outdoors person and love noticing the changes and details in nature.
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I love the outdoor and living now in Spain the outdoors is amazing...
You are welcome
Lisa
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-6-9, The Pond Awakens, has the proper formatting and takes the readers to the first stirring out on this body of water where water fowl flock and frolic. Nice.
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This 3-6-9, The Pond Awakens, has the proper formatting and takes the readers to the first stirring out on this body of water where water fowl flock and frolic. Nice.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
Comment from rama devi
Eloquent and delightful! I love all the phrasing phonics. This is my favorite stanza to read aloud with the medley of S, W and R sounds:
Rushes sway
as the breeze-driven mist
rises from water the sun has kissed.
The poem has a great musical flow, nice rhymes, slant rhymes, alliteration, consonance, etc. Good imagery. Paints a scene.
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Eloquent and delightful! I love all the phrasing phonics. This is my favorite stanza to read aloud with the medley of S, W and R sounds:
Rushes sway
as the breeze-driven mist
rises from water the sun has kissed.
The poem has a great musical flow, nice rhymes, slant rhymes, alliteration, consonance, etc. Good imagery. Paints a scene.
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your enthusiasm about this writing. I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews as it is helpful to hear what works best in the poem.
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Thank you! I enjoy poetry that is musical! :)
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Beautifully penned. I discovered a pond near my house and walk it each day. Each day is a new discovery with a momma duck and 8 of her babies, four geese escorting 9 goslings and two swans in the pond with one little one sitting on his mommas back.
Your words go so well with the enjoyment I have going to the pond in the AM.
Good luck in the contest.
Both your words and presentation should be a contender.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Beautifully penned. I discovered a pond near my house and walk it each day. Each day is a new discovery with a momma duck and 8 of her babies, four geese escorting 9 goslings and two swans in the pond with one little one sitting on his mommas back.
Your words go so well with the enjoyment I have going to the pond in the AM.
Good luck in the contest.
Both your words and presentation should be a contender.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thanks for your comments, Mary, and I loved reading about 'your' pond - how delightful with all those birds!
Comment from Paul Manton
Well done, LisaMay. This is, I think, the best example of the 3-6-9 format that I've reviewed so far. The abb rhyme really works well, and you have beautifully described three tiny vignettes of morning at the pond, with a really well-chosen picture. sorry that I am out of 6 star awards.
Good luck with all your future writing.
Paul
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Well done, LisaMay. This is, I think, the best example of the 3-6-9 format that I've reviewed so far. The abb rhyme really works well, and you have beautifully described three tiny vignettes of morning at the pond, with a really well-chosen picture. sorry that I am out of 6 star awards.
Good luck with all your future writing.
Paul
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your praise of my poem! I truly appreciate your encouraging review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
You set a mood with this. You took a worded snapshot of a morning burst on the lake. The imagery was spectacular. I could feel the colors. That might not make sense to you but it's a compliment in my book. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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You set a mood with this. You took a worded snapshot of a morning burst on the lake. The imagery was spectacular. I could feel the colors. That might not make sense to you but it's a compliment in my book. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the lovely compliment! I am an artist, so I know about the 'feel' of colours - I'm pleased you could feel them.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lisa,
This is a good ekphrastic poem about the photo. It shows the movement of the sun as dawn goes by.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on winning the contest.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Hi Lisa,
This is a good ekphrastic poem about the photo. It shows the movement of the sun as dawn goes by.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on winning the contest.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thanks for your review. I wrote the poem then spent ages trying to find a suitable photo.
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You're welcome. You're search paid off.
Joan
