To Have and To Hold Until Death
Young wife regrets marriage to ex con9 total reviews
Comment from Alaskastory
"To Have and To Hold Until Death" is surely a suspensible beginning chapter of a new book. The descriptions of Christie's effort to survive show her as a great character, I certainly hope she manages to live. Good luck with this one.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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"To Have and To Hold Until Death" is surely a suspensible beginning chapter of a new book. The descriptions of Christie's effort to survive show her as a great character, I certainly hope she manages to live. Good luck with this one.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thanks Marie! I really appreciate your vote of confidence. I was just wanting to come up with some kind of super gripping engaging plot and test the waters. I sure hope you are doing wonderful in Alaska.
Comment from royowen
What an excellent chapter, written in the first person, it plumbs the depths of one's own psyche and the thoughts that pervade the slightly paranoiac mind ofbthe victim, but I can still see a hope for a second chapter. Beautifully written, some useful biblical quotes, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Bury you under (a) boulder 2: (Ureka) I realise my phone can be a light, eureka?
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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What an excellent chapter, written in the first person, it plumbs the depths of one's own psyche and the thoughts that pervade the slightly paranoiac mind ofbthe victim, but I can still see a hope for a second chapter. Beautifully written, some useful biblical quotes, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : Bury you under (a) boulder 2: (Ureka) I realise my phone can be a light, eureka?
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from Lisasview
This is such a chilling tale...I still have goosebumps...
The constant action which pushes the reader to your next line made me hold my breath...
So scary...
BUT, I am not crazy about the quick ending... Of course all readers want her to live, so this is rather tragic... But, if she must die then there needs to be more to it...
Of course this is your story.... but I know what this type of fear is...and one usually does not give up...
Lisasview, new to this site
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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This is such a chilling tale...I still have goosebumps...
The constant action which pushes the reader to your next line made me hold my breath...
So scary...
BUT, I am not crazy about the quick ending... Of course all readers want her to live, so this is rather tragic... But, if she must die then there needs to be more to it...
Of course this is your story.... but I know what this type of fear is...and one usually does not give up...
Lisasview, new to this site
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Welcome to this site and thankyou. I've come and gone on this site over many years now. It is a great place to hone your craft and get feedback, also developing fan friendships.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This is a great first chapter, my friend, but I'm not sure you have 2,000 words. Just telling you because Sally warned me about it. Hopefully you can add some more in before the deadline.
It's really well written and realistic. It had me spellbound.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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This is a great first chapter, my friend, but I'm not sure you have 2,000 words. Just telling you because Sally warned me about it. Hopefully you can add some more in before the deadline.
It's really well written and realistic. It had me spellbound.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks again Rhonda.
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Always!
Comment from BethShelby
This is an intense chapter for the beginning of a book. You are a good writer who know how to create a sense of fear and dread. I'm sure this book will appeal to all who like action thrillers. I've known women who fell for men in prison and wanted to rescue them. It usually doesn't turn out well.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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This is an intense chapter for the beginning of a book. You are a good writer who know how to create a sense of fear and dread. I'm sure this book will appeal to all who like action thrillers. I've known women who fell for men in prison and wanted to rescue them. It usually doesn't turn out well.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks Beth!
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow! Reminds me of the old TV programs of the New Detective series. Only you put a little more ger in the ghoul. Good mystery. Leaves me wondering if the guy has done away with her parents.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Wow! Reminds me of the old TV programs of the New Detective series. Only you put a little more ger in the ghoul. Good mystery. Leaves me wondering if the guy has done away with her parents.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks Ben!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very intriguing first chapter to a book. I was mesmerized by your writing. You have written this very well, and it captures the attention of the reader. I wish you the very best in your writing a book. Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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This is a very intriguing first chapter to a book. I was mesmerized by your writing. You have written this very well, and it captures the attention of the reader. I wish you the very best in your writing a book. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks Pat!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a real horror story which engages the reader from the start with that ominous - sounding first paragraph. Your story is brought vividly to life with excellent descriptive detail about background to this evil husband intent on finding his wife for whatever purpose he has in mind. Her panic and fear are palpable and by the end of this first chapter she now finds herself incarcerated and completely at her husband's disposal. Great cliff-hanger of an ending. Faultless, as ever, prose and momentum. Thanks for sharing an good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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This is a real horror story which engages the reader from the start with that ominous - sounding first paragraph. Your story is brought vividly to life with excellent descriptive detail about background to this evil husband intent on finding his wife for whatever purpose he has in mind. Her panic and fear are palpable and by the end of this first chapter she now finds herself incarcerated and completely at her husband's disposal. Great cliff-hanger of an ending. Faultless, as ever, prose and momentum. Thanks for sharing an good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks Debbie!
Comment from JSD
Excellent evocation of the scene. We are with you in that closet. Some of your description is very good indeed. Grandfathered. String words like pearls. No apostrophe needed for 'tattoos' tho.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Excellent evocation of the scene. We are with you in that closet. Some of your description is very good indeed. Grandfathered. String words like pearls. No apostrophe needed for 'tattoos' tho.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023
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Thanks! Will fix.