Haunting Echoes
a 5-7-5 poetic form29 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa,
This artwork is beautiful and shows the misty atmosphere of the poem.
I could just imagine the sound of the loon calling through the mist and then appearing as it swims through it.
Congrats for placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Hi Melissa,
This artwork is beautiful and shows the misty atmosphere of the poem.
I could just imagine the sound of the loon calling through the mist and then appearing as it swims through it.
Congrats for placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Thank you Joan!
Melissa
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My pleasure, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from CD Richards
This is a lovely entry for the contest, Melissa. I had to look up the sound of a loon call, since they're not native to these parts, and I had no idea. They look quite like a duck in the body, but certainly don't sound like them. So that's the sound from all those horror movies!
Great photo to add to the "haunted" atmosphere.
Best of like with this fine entry.
Craig
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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This is a lovely entry for the contest, Melissa. I had to look up the sound of a loon call, since they're not native to these parts, and I had no idea. They look quite like a duck in the body, but certainly don't sound like them. So that's the sound from all those horror movies!
Great photo to add to the "haunted" atmosphere.
Best of like with this fine entry.
Craig
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Hello, dear Craig, thank you so much for your wonderful review. I am always mesmerized by the sound of a loon. Even though I am a southern gal here in the States, I do appreciate the Northern lakes and the Loon. Thank you!!
Melissa
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Hello, dear Craig, thank you so much for your wonderful review. I am always mesmerized by the sound of a loon. Even though I am a southern gal here in the States, I do appreciate the Northern lakes and the Loon. Thank you!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Great description of the loon's lonely cry. It is one of despair. Certainly haunting to those who hear it. The cries emanating from the dawn mist makes them even more haunting. Excellent alliteration with loon's lonely. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Great description of the loon's lonely cry. It is one of despair. Certainly haunting to those who hear it. The cries emanating from the dawn mist makes them even more haunting. Excellent alliteration with loon's lonely. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Judi! I always appreciate your point of view!!
Melissa
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You're very welcome. Great work! judi
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Thank you so much, Judi! I always appreciate your point of view!!
Melissa
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Thank you so much, Judi! I always appreciate your point of view!!
Melissa
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Gloria ....
Wonderful atmosphere to this poem. The loon's sound does come across as lonely, and you have captured most eloquently a place in time.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Wonderful atmosphere to this poem. The loon's sound does come across as lonely, and you have captured most eloquently a place in time.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Gloria. Every now and again I write about Loons. Their eerie call just resonates with me. Much appreciated.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yes, Melissa, the sound of loons on a lonely lake is haunting.
You paired a perfect illustration for your contest entry.
I easily can imagine that combo in my mind.
Mark
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Yes, Melissa, the sound of loons on a lonely lake is haunting.
You paired a perfect illustration for your contest entry.
I easily can imagine that combo in my mind.
Mark
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hey there Mark. Thanks so much. I really like the distinctive sound of the Loon and have a birding app that allows you to listen to calls that a lot of different birds make. When I want to write about Loons, I listen to the app. It really is a haunting sound. :).
Melissa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a fine poem. I love the Sartori of the last line where you write about Loon's lonely despair. It works well and delivers a punch.
Thank you for writing such a beautiful piece.
I wish you all the best and hope you win the contest!
Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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This is a fine poem. I love the Sartori of the last line where you write about Loon's lonely despair. It works well and delivers a punch.
Thank you for writing such a beautiful piece.
I wish you all the best and hope you win the contest!
Jesse
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hello Jesse... good morning. Thank you for your lovely review. It is such an an encouragement to me :). Hugs!!
Melissa
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I am glad I can encourage you.
Thanks for the hugs!
Jesse
Comment from JSD
An intriguing and interesting piece. You handle the syllables well and make stimulating suggestions. I'm guessing lion is linked to lunar and loonie so there is a play on the moon possibly?
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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An intriguing and interesting piece. You handle the syllables well and make stimulating suggestions. I'm guessing lion is linked to lunar and loonie so there is a play on the moon possibly?
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hello there... in the northern US states there is a diving bird that is called a loon. It has a very distinctive call that is eerie and you will never forget the sound once you hear it. It mates for life and when you hear it, it is usually calling for its spouse. Thank you so much for your review.
Melissa
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Oh I see! Sorry it auto corrected to lion! I bet it's still linked to madness tho? One internet source says it is connected to the way the bird behaves when escaping.
Comment from Eleri
This poem is certainly very haunting. I was a bit confused at first with the word 'loon' as to me that means a foolish person but I have since discovered that it can represent a water bird not native to the UK. Therefore, the poem now makes much more sense to me. I like your use of the colour blue to coincide with haunting and despair and the alliteration is the last line is good too.You have also included the correct number of syllables per line for the contest so good luck with it
Eleri
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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This poem is certainly very haunting. I was a bit confused at first with the word 'loon' as to me that means a foolish person but I have since discovered that it can represent a water bird not native to the UK. Therefore, the poem now makes much more sense to me. I like your use of the colour blue to coincide with haunting and despair and the alliteration is the last line is good too.You have also included the correct number of syllables per line for the contest so good luck with it
Eleri
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for your insightful review! I really appreciate it!!
Melissa
Comment from Faith Williams
That's a lovely poem for the contest. The 'haunting echoes' is an apt description of the 'loon's lonely despair.' And I love the imagery of the 'still, blue dawn mist.' Thank you for sharing, and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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That's a lovely poem for the contest. The 'haunting echoes' is an apt description of the 'loon's lonely despair.' And I love the imagery of the 'still, blue dawn mist.' Thank you for sharing, and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much Faith for your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
You've captured the call of the loon in this 5-7-5 poem for the contest. I like your use of haunting echoes and lonely despair. Perfect descriptions for the way the call sounds. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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You've captured the call of the loon in this 5-7-5 poem for the contest. I like your use of haunting echoes and lonely despair. Perfect descriptions for the way the call sounds. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hello Carol... good morning. Thanks for the great review.
Melissa
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You're welcome! I enjoyed your writing. Have a wonderful week.
