Lucky 7th
When you know you will die8 total reviews
Comment from Elaine Westheimer
Congratulations Jim on your Fanstory contest win. The story's personalized yet matter-of-fact accounting of events to God is a plea both for mercy and hope that what happened is not forgotten. Well done.--Elaine
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Congratulations Jim on your Fanstory contest win. The story's personalized yet matter-of-fact accounting of events to God is a plea both for mercy and hope that what happened is not forgotten. Well done.--Elaine
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Thank you for being so kind!
Comment from L. Kalere
Wow, what a story. It's a good thing I don't have to talk, because I've got a lump in my throat. This was very difficult to read, but it was written so well I couldn't stop. A heart-pounding and heart-breaking tale, filled with details, making it all the more believable (I see what you meant about using period information!!). Getting the opportunity to put it in prayer form was incredible. I loved the line "That innocent death, did it remind you of The Cross?" I look forward to reading more.
Linda (â?¿â? â?¿â? )
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Wow, what a story. It's a good thing I don't have to talk, because I've got a lump in my throat. This was very difficult to read, but it was written so well I couldn't stop. A heart-pounding and heart-breaking tale, filled with details, making it all the more believable (I see what you meant about using period information!!). Getting the opportunity to put it in prayer form was incredible. I loved the line "That innocent death, did it remind you of The Cross?" I look forward to reading more.
Linda (â?¿â? â?¿â? )
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I apologize for the fact some of my responses have been a bit late! Please keep in touch!
Comment from strandregs
I'm sitting near a pond and the geese are shouting
Wank wank
These British geese have very bad manners.
Your story telling is live
Puts me in the gruesome scene.
We have a common disdain for war and cruelty.
Matthew future change to roses without the thorns. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I'm sitting near a pond and the geese are shouting
Wank wank
These British geese have very bad manners.
Your story telling is live
Puts me in the gruesome scene.
We have a common disdain for war and cruelty.
Matthew future change to roses without the thorns. :-))Z.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Thank you! I joke sometimes, but your words mean a lot to me!
Comment from Sanku
I feel terrible when I see that they were all very young boys. They could have had a worthwhile life if they had lived. Sacrifice!! Was it really for the country? I am not sure .I am antiwar. I strongly feel that wars are fought for economic reasons to grab control.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I feel terrible when I see that they were all very young boys. They could have had a worthwhile life if they had lived. Sacrifice!! Was it really for the country? I am not sure .I am antiwar. I strongly feel that wars are fought for economic reasons to grab control.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I wanted to write the story to honor those who died so we might live. War is terrible. I recently attended the funeral of a veteran who passed away at my assisted living building. In addition to many other medals, he earned 5 purple hearts. When I think of what I did with my life, I am shamed.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is extremely moving and poignant. beautifully written, not a word out of place. War is and was truly tragic. I don't think it has improved any in 80 years. The question is why? why do we have to keep going through this? why can't opponents just sit down to a good game of chess or some such?
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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This is extremely moving and poignant. beautifully written, not a word out of place. War is and was truly tragic. I don't think it has improved any in 80 years. The question is why? why do we have to keep going through this? why can't opponents just sit down to a good game of chess or some such?
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I think as long as people seek power, there will be war. I've seen it in my work situations, great and small. Someone gets a little power and authority and their personality and actions change for the worse. Imagine if God was drunk with authority and power! None of us would survive.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very powerful piece of writing here, Jim and it must have taken a lot out of you to write it. An utterly haunting story of capture and death which has been conveyed with maximum impact and minimum gratuitous detail. Worthy of a six (and more) but sadly I have none. Good luck in the contest! A strong contender! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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This is a very powerful piece of writing here, Jim and it must have taken a lot out of you to write it. An utterly haunting story of capture and death which has been conveyed with maximum impact and minimum gratuitous detail. Worthy of a six (and more) but sadly I have none. Good luck in the contest! A strong contender! Debbie
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words. Now with my wife gone and living in q small room, I find much time to write and I can usually write out a story or poem quickly.
Comment from BethShelby
This story is not about you. The story says fiction so I'm sure you are writing about what you imagine might have happened back then. It is a very real sounding story and a good entry for the Dear God contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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This story is not about you. The story says fiction so I'm sure you are writing about what you imagine might have happened back then. It is a very real sounding story and a good entry for the Dear God contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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I thought the rules would allow this. I ws projecting myself into the characters' words ,especially in reference to fear of death and trust in God.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Virtual Six Stars! This story is amazing! I truly enjoyed reading your work. It's an excellent presentation! You've used imagery and specific words that draw in a reader. I best enjoyed the use of nicknames to bring chara ters to life
Best wishes! Alexandra
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Virtual Six Stars! This story is amazing! I truly enjoyed reading your work. It's an excellent presentation! You've used imagery and specific words that draw in a reader. I best enjoyed the use of nicknames to bring chara ters to life
Best wishes! Alexandra
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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thank you, my Favorite reviewer!