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Part One - Blind Awareness

Beep beep beep beep

19 total reviews 
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Well written. Interesting concept. I can "see" finding the ball, maybe even catching it. But not hitting it with a bat, or throwing it in from the outfield. Or pitching, for that matter. Still, though. it makes for a good story.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
    All your questions will (should) be answered in part 2?s continuation.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Wonderful piece. I love suspenseful thrillers. The plot is very engaging and the character development is excellent. I look the next one.
 
Gypsy
"Having no destination I'm never lost" - Ikkyu

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you, gypsy for the great review!
    John
Comment from JSD
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Fascinating. Love the way this builds in suspense and excitement. An entertaining and engaging piece. The dialogue between the kids is so authentic sounding too. Well done! I look forward to the next part.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you for the fine review! I?m glad you enjoyed my post.
    John
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Beep ball sounds interesting and I can't wait for the next part of this story. You've got a good and very creative story on your hands. Thank you for sharing it with us.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
    Thankyou, Barbara. I've been wanting to write a story on "Beep Baseball" (not this particular one) so I may use it as a stepping stone for a larger story for middle school aged boys and girls.

    Thank you for your support.

    John
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Hi John,
I found your post intriguing.
As a mother of six girls, I know little of male sports or camaraderie.
Therefore it's interesting to read about this.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
    Thank you Shirley, much appreciated.
    John
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Ha, ha, ha blind baseball, just keep out of the bat fellas and you will won the game. Thanks for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next part.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
    Holy Moly, Iza! Thank you for the 6 stars. Awesome and I do appreciate it very much! More so,I'm glad you enjoyed my story and waiting for part 2.

    John
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is a great subject for an educational and inspiring story. I've heard of beep baseball. I once had a coworker who taught blind golf, and talked about blind baseball. I love the realistic dialogue as the story builds, and look forward to Part two.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
    LJ... thank you very much. I always appreciate your solid support of my writing.

    Cheers...
    John
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol! I love it! I actually learned about baseball for the blind from the news and I love you wrote this. This helps us see this situation through the eyes of young characters who learn about this and I'm sure they will gain new "insight" - no pun intended to being blind athletes! Great job!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    About 12 years ago, I went to see a local team play the game. It was amazing.

    Thanks for reading, Helen.
    Now I have to work on part 2.

    John
reply by lyenochka on 04-Sep-2023
    Hope you post when we get our sixes next weekend!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    I?ll make it a point! Thank you.
Comment from w.j.debi
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This is an intriguing hook for part two. Love the build up with the boys thinking they were going to find aliens. Just what is this beep baseball? How can one play blindfolded? I am eager to see.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    I?m glad I peaked your interest. Stay tuned.

    John
Comment from aryr
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What a great part one, beep baseball, John. Frankie, Monzo, Jose and Tate were walking when they heard a strange sound. That's when they learned of beep baseball, baseball for the blind. I was blind for four and a half years, it would have been wonderful. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Peace!!!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    You were blind? No longer? I?m not trying to be nosey.

    Thank you so much for reading and sharing.

    John
reply by aryr on 04-Sep-2023
    It was a stupid accident, I was on a bus trip and a silly accident. One of the male student's grab my compact which shined in the side mirror, affecting me. Four years and a bit, I was at the beach and suddenly I could see. You are so welcome, John.