Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Spring/December Friendship"A complete story in written as a poem.
16 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In Notes "became" should be because.
If she visited so often perhaps she was a lonely old lady who needed a friend as much as the little girl did. At least they seemed to hit it off well even if the child's parents did not much care for the spinster.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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In Notes "became" should be because.
If she visited so often perhaps she was a lonely old lady who needed a friend as much as the little girl did. At least they seemed to hit it off well even if the child's parents did not much care for the spinster.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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Thsnk you. Yes I thing she was a lonely lady. I sure she needed a friend as much as I did. That for seeing the error in the notes.
Beth
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This was a fun poem all the way through, even to the ending which made me smile. This was a unique and delightful way to present a childhood friendship.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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This was a fun poem all the way through, even to the ending which made me smile. This was a unique and delightful way to present a childhood friendship.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for a great review. I'm so glad you liked this. Maddie is someone I'll nevef forget.
Comment from harmony13
Beautiful Poem! I enjoyed the read of this poem. Older people do need
friends as the author states. I pondered on the author's memories of this
wonderful woman who gave a child her time and had fun too! I see it
today with my grandchildren who I enjoy very much. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome! Hope you had a great day!...Maria
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Beautiful Poem! I enjoyed the read of this poem. Older people do need
friends as the author states. I pondered on the author's memories of this
wonderful woman who gave a child her time and had fun too! I see it
today with my grandchildren who I enjoy very much. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome! Hope you had a great day!...Maria
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you Marie for a wonderful review. I really enjoyed reading your comments.
Comment from MissMerri
I truly loved this poem. Although yours is an entirely different story, it reminded me of my mother after my father passed away. She loved to sew and would buy naked (or raggedy) dolls from the Salvation Army story and make clothes for them. Soon she had little girls visiting from down the street who came to play with her dolls. They loved changing the many outfits my mother had made. Sometime they would all have tea. But back to the beautifully written poem you have submitted for this contest... I think it is a winner and I thoroughly enjoyed every metric line and every perfect rhyme, but mostly I enjoyed the story you told. Thanks for sharing this. ~ MM
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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I truly loved this poem. Although yours is an entirely different story, it reminded me of my mother after my father passed away. She loved to sew and would buy naked (or raggedy) dolls from the Salvation Army story and make clothes for them. Soon she had little girls visiting from down the street who came to play with her dolls. They loved changing the many outfits my mother had made. Sometime they would all have tea. But back to the beautifully written poem you have submitted for this contest... I think it is a winner and I thoroughly enjoyed every metric line and every perfect rhyme, but mostly I enjoyed the story you told. Thanks for sharing this. ~ MM
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for the excellent review, lovely comments and the 6 stars. Thanks for sharing you mother story which is like mine because she did truly become a friend to these girls and I imagine she enjoyed their company as well.
Comment from jessizero
This was such a sweet poem, and I loved your rhymes. I like to think Mattie came to visit because of you. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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This was such a sweet poem, and I loved your rhymes. I like to think Mattie came to visit because of you. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Thank you. I really appreciate the review. I'm glad you liked. Mattie was a great friend for this lonely little girl.
Comment from lyenochka
This is such a delightful story! There is so much to be gained when friendships are made across generations and you proved it to be true. Also you both helped fill each other's loneliness. Best wishes in the contest!
she did were sofunny, (so funny)
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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This is such a delightful story! There is so much to be gained when friendships are made across generations and you proved it to be true. Also you both helped fill each other's loneliness. Best wishes in the contest!
she did were sofunny, (so funny)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Thank you Helen. I'm so glad you liked this. I appreciate the comments
Comment from Lisasview
Loved this poem of yours very very much.
And, I loved the photo.
There is a tiny error that I believe you should fix...
Between the so and funny you need a space..
The things she did were sofunny,
Lisasview
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Loved this poem of yours very very much.
And, I loved the photo.
There is a tiny error that I believe you should fix...
Between the so and funny you need a space..
The things she did were sofunny,
Lisasview
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Thank you Lisa. I really appreciate the review and also you point the space I need. I'm so glad you liked the poem.
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I find it so strange that when someone reads another writers work and they see an error that they never mention it.
I always do because I want the poem, especially for a contest, to be the very best it can be. I review everything I read.
Lisa
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Glad I was of help!
Lisa
Comment from Eleri
This is a beautiful poem about an unusual friendship but the contest states that your poem must be at least five stanzas or twenty lines long. Hence, this poem is too short for the contest. You need to add at least another four lines.
Eleri
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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This is a beautiful poem about an unusual friendship but the contest states that your poem must be at least five stanzas or twenty lines long. Hence, this poem is too short for the contest. You need to add at least another four lines.
Eleri
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank Eleri. I didn't see that and you are the first to poem it out. I can so that. Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Spring/December Friendship, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, tells a neat tale of you and Miss Mattie's times together. Good to be know that people are remembered.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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This poem, Spring/December Friendship, presented with four AABB-rhymed quatrains, tells a neat tale of you and Miss Mattie's times together. Good to be know that people are remembered.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank you Bill. She was special lady I won't forget. Thanks for reviewing my poem.
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely tribute to Miss Mattie, and you are so right - older people need friends too. You would have brought her as much joy as she brought to you. A beautiful poem, with smooth rhyme and perfect metre. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023
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A lovely tribute to Miss Mattie, and you are so right - older people need friends too. You would have brought her as much joy as she brought to you. A beautiful poem, with smooth rhyme and perfect metre. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023
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Thank you Wendy, I'm glad you liked my poem. She was a lady I'll never forget.