Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Other World Pt1"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
15 total reviews
Comment from Barry Penfold
Well, you are the author so dish it out as you wish. Your writing is good and whilst I am assuming there is a lot of dark coming along, I will cheer for you. Let the light shine in, sometime at least.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
  |
Well, you are the author so dish it out as you wish. Your writing is good and whilst I am assuming there is a lot of dark coming along, I will cheer for you. Let the light shine in, sometime at least.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
-
Thank you, Barry. That's kind of you say. I appreciate you stopping in for a read and offering you great comments. I also thank you for your time and for the wonderful rating.I hope that you have an awesome evening.And thank you again!
Comment from Gayla putnam
My heart was in my throat, to quote a cliche. It was terrifying and well-written. The only place I stumbled was the word "apposed." Did you mean opposed, or am I not getting it? I am on the edge of my seat, waiting to see what happens next. gayla
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
|
My heart was in my throat, to quote a cliche. It was terrifying and well-written. The only place I stumbled was the word "apposed." Did you mean opposed, or am I not getting it? I am on the edge of my seat, waiting to see what happens next. gayla
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
-
Hi, Gayla. Thank you so much for your comments and yours. Kind words! I went ahead, corrected spelling on that word. Thank you for picking that out. These are the kinds of things every writer needs to hear.It's only for the better! I will be pumping out, hopefully. A chapter a day or every other day.I'm happy to have you following along. This is book 2 of the spirits series. The first one is called ghost. It's in my portfolio. Feel free to have a read if you wish it's all there. There are many heart pounding moments in that first book my blood sweat and tears went into it. Writing an autobiography, we're pending on your subject matter can be tough. I had to exercise my brain like up a marathon.Rider would stretch his muscles does stretch my mind. I'm pleased that you like it.I thank you for your read and your great rating and for your time. Have awesome night!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A powerfully worded poem to start this chapter Lea. From young frightened girl to dressed up young woman is not easy at anytime. I could imagine this scene, unfortunately.
Cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
|
A powerfully worded poem to start this chapter Lea. From young frightened girl to dressed up young woman is not easy at anytime. I could imagine this scene, unfortunately.
Cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
-
Thank you again Valda! Some things are tough to avoid giving the circumstances. Thank you i'm glad you are appreciating the Writing and I appreciate you reading along and being here with me thank you! I hope you have the best holiday!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
this chapter reminds me of a quote in the book of Job- that which I feared has come upon me. It appears that your "friend" is introducing you to a very dangerous life style that can only lead to sorrow and possibly serious harm. I had assumed that you would encounter sexual abuse at the hands of your step father, but it didn't turn out that way. Nonetheless, from what I 've read so far, trouble is on the horizon. I'm sorry that you've experienced such an array of issues in your young life.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
|
Hello Lea,
this chapter reminds me of a quote in the book of Job- that which I feared has come upon me. It appears that your "friend" is introducing you to a very dangerous life style that can only lead to sorrow and possibly serious harm. I had assumed that you would encounter sexual abuse at the hands of your step father, but it didn't turn out that way. Nonetheless, from what I 've read so far, trouble is on the horizon. I'm sorry that you've experienced such an array of issues in your young life.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
-
That's why in my very first chapter, a line that said something like, "when I look back I can hardly believe it myself. That so many things could happen to one person. Wonderful review thank you so much. I am the first chapters of my book when I was about 10 years old, I had an incident with my stepfather where he did some things. Also when I was 5 I was abused by 2 people an older man and a boy on a bike. I didn't understand why I was doing. What's wrong? I won't go into detail. but yes, I did suffer some of that. Thank god not penetration but he was enough to humiliate me. Thank you again, you are amazing reviewer. You should know that you really awesome work, especially in many of the things you say to me. Ever appreciative hope your night is great!
Comment from LJbutterfly
You have given this chapter the correct title. You are now in another world. It's not a better world, just different. It is as dangerous. You are among devils that you don't know. Before, you had devils you DID know, in your mother, stepfather and grandmother. At this point in your young life, you are going to meet new demons you didn't know existed. My prayers are with you. Even though that phase is over, it still has effects. Those days still require you to be strong even today.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
|
You have given this chapter the correct title. You are now in another world. It's not a better world, just different. It is as dangerous. You are among devils that you don't know. Before, you had devils you DID know, in your mother, stepfather and grandmother. At this point in your young life, you are going to meet new demons you didn't know existed. My prayers are with you. Even though that phase is over, it still has effects. Those days still require you to be strong even today.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
-
Thinking to see exactly what's going on.
I appreciate it so much have a good day!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This post definitely points out huge contrasts. My favorite line that I had to read three times was:
The winter chickadee's flitting about between trees borrowing shelves of air
That was an amazing image. I know you mean chickadees and not chickadee's.
The situation building up after that makeover makes me feel as if you are coming to a very steep cliff that will be almost impossible to avoid.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
|
This post definitely points out huge contrasts. My favorite line that I had to read three times was:
The winter chickadee's flitting about between trees borrowing shelves of air
That was an amazing image. I know you mean chickadees and not chickadee's.
The situation building up after that makeover makes me feel as if you are coming to a very steep cliff that will be almost impossible to avoid.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
-
Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it. I did take the apostrophe out of chickadees! Thanks for that! Thank you for your kind review for your great wri. Tand thank you for reading along and hanging in there with me. I appreciate this so much have a great day!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhh dear. I had no idea. I'm so sorry you've had to go through something like this. There is no way this is right for anyone, let alone someone as special as you. I'm sending you nothing but love. I'm applauding your bravery. xoxo
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
|
Ohhhh dear. I had no idea. I'm so sorry you've had to go through something like this. There is no way this is right for anyone, let alone someone as special as you. I'm sending you nothing but love. I'm applauding your bravery. xoxo
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
-
Thank you my friend! I so appreciate you I wish I could express how much. I never felt brave I never felt courageous. I always felt scared and it was my fear. I asked you to not do anything else. And I hope that everything I write means something and help someone. I think that it does as it's really gand and it's because of my friend Rachelle. You are pure gold. Thank you, my friend for this fine review. I appreciate it so much. I hope you haven't awesome day!
-
The fear comes through loud and clear, and it just guts me that such a sweet person was dragged through such Hell. Ugh. xoxo
-
Thank you for your understanding for your empathy it means a lot to me. And you become increasingly valuable by the day. Someone I watched to be in my life for as long as I grace the earth Thank you again!
-
Deal...'cause that's what I want, as well. xo
-
😁
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story with us. I hope writing it helps you heal. I am also sure it will help many other young women is similar situations.
I watched my dog Spirit timidly walking across the frozen yard. (comma needed after 'Spirit', great name)
Mom's gone to work." My friend E said. (comma after 'work," ' & over case 'm' on 'my')
"Sit down." she said (comma after 'down' you can also omit 'down' it's understood)
"Milk?" She asked. (lower case 's' on 'she')
"Yes please." I replied. (comma after 'please,')
She turned, "Oh shit. Hey come in. (period after 'turned.' & I'm not correcting the rest of the dialogue. I think you get the picture. If not, PM me and I'll explain it.)
"Make up silly." She replied. ("Makeup, silly," she replied.)
ar from the ugly girl my step father (stepfather)
As apposed to what? (opposed)
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
|
Thank you for sharing this story with us. I hope writing it helps you heal. I am also sure it will help many other young women is similar situations.
I watched my dog Spirit timidly walking across the frozen yard. (comma needed after 'Spirit', great name)
Mom's gone to work." My friend E said. (comma after 'work," ' & over case 'm' on 'my')
"Sit down." she said (comma after 'down' you can also omit 'down' it's understood)
"Milk?" She asked. (lower case 's' on 'she')
"Yes please." I replied. (comma after 'please,')
She turned, "Oh shit. Hey come in. (period after 'turned.' & I'm not correcting the rest of the dialogue. I think you get the picture. If not, PM me and I'll explain it.)
"Make up silly." She replied. ("Makeup, silly," she replied.)
ar from the ugly girl my step father (stepfather)
As apposed to what? (opposed)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
-
Hi Barbara, thank you so much again. I very much appreciate you looking over my work for me. Thank you it is a privilege and an honor to receive it! Thank you
Comment from Wendyanne
Oh dear he doesn't sound like a very pleasant man and one that you should steer clear of!! I'm sure the next chapter will reveal what she will have to do to earn some money!!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
|
Oh dear he doesn't sound like a very pleasant man and one that you should steer clear of!! I'm sure the next chapter will reveal what she will have to do to earn some money!!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
-
It's not pretty. I hope that the next chapter I have to write. Will flow out of me as the others do without too much remembrance of pain. Thank you again for reading. I so appreciate your reviews. And you are here on this journey with me. I thank you again very much!
Comment from BethShelby
Under the circumstances, you are pretty much doing whatever you have to in order the survive. If your only source of a place to stay says we're going to a club, I sure most people wouldn't argue. I don't think you are to blame at your age for very much. Decisions were made for you. Some chapter will be harder to write than other but we not judging you.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
|
Under the circumstances, you are pretty much doing whatever you have to in order the survive. If your only source of a place to stay says we're going to a club, I sure most people wouldn't argue. I don't think you are to blame at your age for very much. Decisions were made for you. Some chapter will be harder to write than other but we not judging you.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
-
Thank you so much that means a lot to me I really appreciate it! I was so used to persecution in my life But that's not the case here people are wonderful they offer support and kind I like you and pathetic and compassionate thank you very much!