Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Blur"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
18 total reviews
Comment from EILEEN LAW
mimicks humor behavior and emotion
mimics human behaviour and emotion
Just FYI for your editing
engrossing and detailed....disappear into the fog. Metaphorical for the fog we can contain in our minds, for when we need to psychologically disappear.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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mimicks humor behavior and emotion
mimics human behaviour and emotion
Just FYI for your editing
engrossing and detailed....disappear into the fog. Metaphorical for the fog we can contain in our minds, for when we need to psychologically disappear.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thank you again for another rock and review. I appreciate you. Checking that typo for me too I shall go ahead. Thanks so much for reading along. You've been more than loyal. I mean, there every time, so thank you very much. Appreciate your kind words. In your interest, I hope that you're having an awesome evening.Thanks again!
Comment from GWHARGIS
My greatest fear is being controlled by someone else. A stranger would be bad enough but to be betrayed by a friend or family member would be devastating. I love how you rote this. The different fonts tracking one stream of consciousness, memory, then emotional. This was great. Gretchen
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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My greatest fear is being controlled by someone else. A stranger would be bad enough but to be betrayed by a friend or family member would be devastating. I love how you rote this. The different fonts tracking one stream of consciousness, memory, then emotional. This was great. Gretchen
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Thank you very much Gretchen! I appreciate your kind words. Thank you very much for I'm reading and offering your thoughts. I'm glad you liked it.Thank your for the awesome rating too. I hope your evening is the best!
Comment from Gayla putnam
I'm catching on to your style of writing. Your character descriptions take me right into your character's emotions. I can almost smell her desperation to leave the house. The poem at the start is beautiful. gayla
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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I'm catching on to your style of writing. Your character descriptions take me right into your character's emotions. I can almost smell her desperation to leave the house. The poem at the start is beautiful. gayla
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Thank you Gayla! Thank you for reading and for offering.You kind comment. I also appreciate your time and the great rating that you have provided. I hope you have the best evening.Thank you again!
Comment from royowen
What a horror engagement to be involved, I know sometimes when we were young these events might actually, but really in actuality they never really happened, it was stirringly erotic to think it did, but I don't think I would ever engaged in them, beautifully written Lea, blessings Roy
Typo (There) were going to have. They? 2: Wild(l)y afraid.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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What a horror engagement to be involved, I know sometimes when we were young these events might actually, but really in actuality they never really happened, it was stirringly erotic to think it did, but I don't think I would ever engaged in them, beautifully written Lea, blessings Roy
Typo (There) were going to have. They? 2: Wild(l)y afraid.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Hi, Roy. Thank you so much again. I'm always happy to see you. This is a autobio a true accounting of what happened. My first book is about growing up. My second book is about finishing that. Growing up early onto a world, I didn't understand.
I live my life being a slave. I'm bugging back. I didn't know any different. I didn't know it was good that weapon. But it was safe, and what wasn't. I ran with my instincts, but my inability q socialize properly. Show many hard lessons, and I went from the pan to the fire. Thank you, right. I really appreciate you.Reading you passing me, your insightful comments. Have the best season thanks again!
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Yes i thought my childhood wasn't good, but mine was heaven compared to yours lea. Sorry
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He's nothing to apologize for Roy. But thank you anyway!
Comment from Rick Gardner
I think you know who this is, your words dig deep, would dig deep in anyone's soul. I strongly believe you are moving forward, gaining control.
Sadly family lasts forever. Try to quietly enter a preplanned state of mind, acting if you are there, but your not. Focus
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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I think you know who this is, your words dig deep, would dig deep in anyone's soul. I strongly believe you are moving forward, gaining control.
Sadly family lasts forever. Try to quietly enter a preplanned state of mind, acting if you are there, but your not. Focus
Comment Written 28-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2024
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Hi Rick! For the exposure of my family high up in the ministry and able to cover up the crime handy abuse. This was my only Avenue. I got tired of being called the wire. I had some close memory syndrome, as my mother calls it hard to deny when you've got 2 boxes of evidence sitting in front of a lawyer. It's with my mother's signature all over it. Who are my grandmother's and my uncle. They all participated in the systematic, bring down of three children to code their own terrible and reprehensible act. I shall continue writing until it's all out. One more book. After is this one I should have it all out there. Every word. Thank you, Rick for supporting me for reading. I also thank you for offering your very cool comments after your time great rating thank you!
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My thoughts are with you,
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Thank you!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This chapter helps add to the layers of your story that chaos and abusive situations continue until someone makes a decision. I love the fact that you just took off out through the door.
Here is one awkward sentence:
"Drink ladies?" The blonde man said.
I think it would sound better as:
"Drinks, ladies?" asked the blonde man.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This chapter helps add to the layers of your story that chaos and abusive situations continue until someone makes a decision. I love the fact that you just took off out through the door.
Here is one awkward sentence:
"Drink ladies?" The blonde man said.
I think it would sound better as:
"Drinks, ladies?" asked the blonde man.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you, I'll change that. Thank you so much for your kind review as well. I appreciate you every time you visit. It's always a constructive one and you have great insight too. Thanks again hope your day is grand!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I saw you were practicing safety by requesting only water. The problem is they can does even water. Nothing is safe. There is a new preventative movement lately. The rohypnol will turn the liquid blue. Your intermittent use of personification enhances your visceral experience. Thank you.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I saw you were practicing safety by requesting only water. The problem is they can does even water. Nothing is safe. There is a new preventative movement lately. The rohypnol will turn the liquid blue. Your intermittent use of personification enhances your visceral experience. Thank you.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Hi liz how are you doing? Thank you so much for your wonderful review and your excellent rating. I'm happy to see you here! Thank you again for your wonderful compliments. I hope you're doing well i'm wishing you and awesome day!
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I am honored. It seems the universe is beginning to shine on me
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Beaming brightly!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your detailed descriptions are so vivid they make me feel nervous as though I'm in danger. I feel your fear, your pain, and your despair and disappointment. That means you are an excellent writer and storyteller. Your well-chosen words are capable of putting the reader into the scene so they can see what you saw, and feel what you felt. Well done, Lea.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Your detailed descriptions are so vivid they make me feel nervous as though I'm in danger. I feel your fear, your pain, and your despair and disappointment. That means you are an excellent writer and storyteller. Your well-chosen words are capable of putting the reader into the scene so they can see what you saw, and feel what you felt. Well done, Lea.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much that's a kind and wonderful compliment! I thank you There to do so many many times because Oh I am truly grateful for it all i'm hoping you're having a great day!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I'm glad you came to your senses. Apparently your "friend was a prostitute and had introduced you into that life style as well. Was she older than you? How could she have become familiar with that kind of life so young? She mentions that you were being paid to perform- was she pocketing all the money? What were you supposed to be getting out of this, aside from pain and humiliation? I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I don't know what to tell you about your mom. She appears to be unstable. I'm surprised that your son would fall for her lies, having lived with you, I assume for all his life. I hope that you can get some relief soon. Hang in there gal.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
I'm glad you came to your senses. Apparently your "friend was a prostitute and had introduced you into that life style as well. Was she older than you? How could she have become familiar with that kind of life so young? She mentions that you were being paid to perform- was she pocketing all the money? What were you supposed to be getting out of this, aside from pain and humiliation? I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I don't know what to tell you about your mom. She appears to be unstable. I'm surprised that your son would fall for her lies, having lived with you, I assume for all his life. I hope that you can get some relief soon. Hang in there gal.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Oh yes, my voice grew up to be successful. I think he's more of a standing off kind of thing going on. We're just gonnot being involved in just sit back and watch what happens. What he was a distance from me about twelve hour drive. Hanging in there Tom thank you so much! Unfortunately prostitution and recruitment begins early sometimes before they even reach puberty. It's terrible I know. I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm sure you can feel relief as you keep writing. Thank you for sharing this story with us.
"Let's roll. Lines movin' up." Ginger haired man said. (comma after 'up,')
You'll see." E replied. (comma after 'see,')
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I'm sure you can feel relief as you keep writing. Thank you for sharing this story with us.
"Let's roll. Lines movin' up." Ginger haired man said. (comma after 'up,')
You'll see." E replied. (comma after 'see,')
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Not so bad and punctuation this time. I just need to be more vigilant I think. Thank you again I really appreciate you!