Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Shoe"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
13 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
You did a really excellent job with this one. Your punctuation and grammar were very good, and the story, of course --that part's a given-- was riveting. At least you have some good nourishment in you; that makes difficult circumstances easier to conquer. xo
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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You did a really excellent job with this one. Your punctuation and grammar were very good, and the story, of course --that part's a given-- was riveting. At least you have some good nourishment in you; that makes difficult circumstances easier to conquer. xo
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Thank you again my fine friend!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Here we go again. You get a chance to have a nice meal and relax, but it sounds like it won't be for long. Somehow I missed when and how you met the Indian woman. But she sounds kind. I have no idea what could possibly happen next. I'll see you in the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Here we go again. You get a chance to have a nice meal and relax, but it sounds like it won't be for long. Somehow I missed when and how you met the Indian woman. But she sounds kind. I have no idea what could possibly happen next. I'll see you in the next chapter.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Life is never smooth how long is it it's true. I went through many ups and Downs. Mostly because I didn't know what the heck I was doing in a lot of instances and some because there was no choice. I appreciate your review and happy to see you here! You have great insight and wonderful comments on. Thank you for reading and hanging in there with me!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
So a more open-minded Indian couple took you into their home and fed you dinner, but there was an argument at the end, presumably over how long you were going to be allowed to stay there. I, too, would probably look for a welcome escape in Classic Hollywood movies.
One suggestion:
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat.
I stood up with them. Mrs. D waved me back to my seat.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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So a more open-minded Indian couple took you into their home and fed you dinner, but there was an argument at the end, presumably over how long you were going to be allowed to stay there. I, too, would probably look for a welcome escape in Classic Hollywood movies.
One suggestion:
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat.
I stood up with them. Mrs. D waved me back to my seat.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you again awesome. I'm always happy to have your comments and your suggestions. I sound like a broken record. I know but I can only keep saying thank you have a great day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
It sounds as if Mr. D doesn't want you around. I'm hoping you're wanting these published. If so, you're going to need to a lot of editing. The story is great and needs to be told.
"Joo hungry? She asked,"Sit." (TRY - "Joo hungry?" she asked, "Sit.")
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat. (them.)
"Joo can stay down here." She said. (here," she)
I kept the volume low and sat down on the old couch. (you can omit 'down', it's understood)
Despite this I began to nodd off. (nod)
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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It sounds as if Mr. D doesn't want you around. I'm hoping you're wanting these published. If so, you're going to need to a lot of editing. The story is great and needs to be told.
"Joo hungry? She asked,"Sit." (TRY - "Joo hungry?" she asked, "Sit.")
I stood up with them Mrs. D who waived me back to my seat. (them.)
"Joo can stay down here." She said. (here," she)
I kept the volume low and sat down on the old couch. (you can omit 'down', it's understood)
Despite this I began to nodd off. (nod)
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hi Barbara thank you! It's going for editing Soon unsold my future writings I will learn as I go i'm sure thank you so much! I am very happy you review my work I appreciate it! Hope you have a lovely afternoon!
Comment from EILEEN LAW
A hard read but so well written. The poem in the beginning with the red shoe. I like the imagery for that one too. Thank you for sharing this necessary story.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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A hard read but so well written. The poem in the beginning with the red shoe. I like the imagery for that one too. Thank you for sharing this necessary story.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Jacob1395
They do seem like a good family, but I am wondering what is going to happen next, especially with the argument you had at the end of the chapter. Another well told chapter, Lea.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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They do seem like a good family, but I am wondering what is going to happen next, especially with the argument you had at the end of the chapter. Another well told chapter, Lea.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Is good question jacob! Thank you for reading along for your final review and reading. Definitely happy to see you here thank you so much again have a great day!
Comment from Jim Wile
Nothing ever comes easy for you, does it, Lea? You are approached by a wonderful, caring soul who feels your pain and wants to help you from the goodness of her heart, and her husband seems immediately against the idea. Conflict between them ensues with you at the heart of it.
I don't know how this will end up--if the shoe will drop or if it will stay with its mate--but however it goes, at least you learned there are some caring people in this world.
I'm guessing your good fortune will be short-lived because the man usually prevails in Indian culture, and that you will soon be on the road again.
Have you given much thought about whether you really need to see what's in those 12 boxes? You know it's going to be a lot of lies and unbelievable justifications for bad, selfish behavior. - Jim
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Nothing ever comes easy for you, does it, Lea? You are approached by a wonderful, caring soul who feels your pain and wants to help you from the goodness of her heart, and her husband seems immediately against the idea. Conflict between them ensues with you at the heart of it.
I don't know how this will end up--if the shoe will drop or if it will stay with its mate--but however it goes, at least you learned there are some caring people in this world.
I'm guessing your good fortune will be short-lived because the man usually prevails in Indian culture, and that you will soon be on the road again.
Have you given much thought about whether you really need to see what's in those 12 boxes? You know it's going to be a lot of lies and unbelievable justifications for bad, selfish behavior. - Jim
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Well, I should have to because it's evidence for a court. Are things that need to be found out it's going to be hard. I know most of them. I'm sure I know. But there's going to be charges and a civil suit against social services. I just have to find proper legal representation. Sure, but yeah, I do have to look at something unfortunately. So my sister ordered her own set we will do it together. Thank you for your concern Jim. I plan on keeping a big box of tissues by while I read it. I appreciate you your fine review and your great rating. I really hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from JSD
Still hoping and wishing for release and relief for you, dear Lea. Why is it that men ruin everything????? Just watched the film about the reporters who exposed Harvey Weinstein. Great film. Called, 'She Said'.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Still hoping and wishing for release and relief for you, dear Lea. Why is it that men ruin everything????? Just watched the film about the reporters who exposed Harvey Weinstein. Great film. Called, 'She Said'.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I don't have to watch today. I have no way associate one man's actions with another. I have met and spoken with many nice and kind hearted meant like yourself. Yeah, no I don't have any specific grudge towards men. In particular, I don't prepunish as they say.
Everyone gets a clean slate. Thank you very much again. I'm happy to see you here. I hope you are well!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hope this is not more trouble brewing for you Lea, few people do things for no reward just to help a stranger and it sounds like something awful is about to happen, I just hope I am wrong. It is a pity that your Mother did not want to take responsibility for her own children, I would do anything for mine. Another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I hope this is not more trouble brewing for you Lea, few people do things for no reward just to help a stranger and it sounds like something awful is about to happen, I just hope I am wrong. It is a pity that your Mother did not want to take responsibility for her own children, I would do anything for mine. Another fine chapter Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you again Dolly! I know like it's up-and-down so it's not. I went through a few before. I finally connected some dots.
Thank you again so much for your refuse. Thank you for hanging in there with me. And thank you for all the wonderful things you say have a great day!
Comment from Teri7
Lea, it is very sad to me that anyone could leave two precious little daughters and the children not even know what was really going on. I am so sorry you had to go through this. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Lea, it is very sad to me that anyone could leave two precious little daughters and the children not even know what was really going on. I am so sorry you had to go through this. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I thank you for your kind thoughts. Terry, you're always compassionate and have constructive things to say that I appreciate very much. I hope you have a great day!