Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Illusion"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
14 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is an interesting chapter because it shows how innocent children are, and that your presence helped serve as a calming influence and perhaps a mirror at the same time. Here is a particularly effective description:
She had a silk scarf around her neck so the children didn't see the marks. It seems Mrs. D. was also limited to an extent by limited English as well.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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This is an interesting chapter because it shows how innocent children are, and that your presence helped serve as a calming influence and perhaps a mirror at the same time. Here is a particularly effective description:
She had a silk scarf around her neck so the children didn't see the marks. It seems Mrs. D. was also limited to an extent by limited English as well.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Absolutely true and you hit the nail right on the head! Mrs. D had broken English for the most part. Thank you for your insightful review as always. I appreciate all your words and your fine rating too. Thank you very much. Hope you have a grand evening!
Comment from LJbutterfly
The natural fighter in you had you come to the rescue of Mrs. D and fight on her behalf. Your insight and kindness led you to bring the children to a safer place so they would not have to see the violence their father was inflicting on their mother. It is a good thing you were in that house that night. You probably saved Mrs. D's life.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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The natural fighter in you had you come to the rescue of Mrs. D and fight on her behalf. Your insight and kindness led you to bring the children to a safer place so they would not have to see the violence their father was inflicting on their mother. It is a good thing you were in that house that night. You probably saved Mrs. D's life.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you I appreciate you saying uh thank you so much! I'm honored to receive your review as always appreciate you Reading along with me and your kind words are always insightful Thank you again having awesome day!
Comment from Ric Myworld
For those of us who grew up in a violent world we either learned to get tough and fight back or we'd have been destined to a life of a victim. It appears you learned to fight back or at least to some degree. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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For those of us who grew up in a violent world we either learned to get tough and fight back or we'd have been destined to a life of a victim. It appears you learned to fight back or at least to some degree. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you Ric! Again, I'm so sorry you went through. What wouldn't wish it on anyone?
I'm happy to see you made it through intact. Perhaps not unscathed but here you are thank you again my friend having awesome day!
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I don't normally share my own personal experiences in life, but I just want to help you realize you aren't alone. Have a wonderful weekend!
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Thank you so much for sharing that with me I appreciate the sentiment too!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Yes, your stuff is hard to read because I too lived with violence for a considerable time. You write very expressively and well. You are a brave writer. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Yes, your stuff is hard to read because I too lived with violence for a considerable time. You write very expressively and well. You are a brave writer. Karen
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, Karen. I'm really sorry you had to go through that too. You and I both know. And sometimes wonder how we made it through, but we never come through unscathed. Abuse doesn't stop when you leave the abuser. That hangs with you so I understand. Thank you so much for commenting for reading. I know it's tough so I especially thank you for it. I hope you have the grand evening!
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My current ex told me that I kinda had Ptsd. Things would set me off from time to time. We find ways to cope but it is still there. Love you brave lady.
Karen
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Thank you Karen you too!
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this post with us. I'm afraid, it's because you're living there, but this man has probably done it before and often.
I sat them down on the coach. (couch??)
"Stay here ok? (comma after 'here')
Your Dad went for a drive and your mom's upstairs okay? (lower case 'd' on 'dad' because of 'my' and comma after 'upstairs')
maybe it will be different for you." I said. (comma after 'you')
"No." She said again. (comma after 'No,' and lower case 's' on 'she')
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you for sharing this post with us. I'm afraid, it's because you're living there, but this man has probably done it before and often.
I sat them down on the coach. (couch??)
"Stay here ok? (comma after 'here')
Your Dad went for a drive and your mom's upstairs okay? (lower case 'd' on 'dad' because of 'my' and comma after 'upstairs')
maybe it will be different for you." I said. (comma after 'you')
"No." She said again. (comma after 'No,' and lower case 's' on 'she')
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hi, thank you again Barbara. I went ahead and made those corrections. These are like gold to me and I so appreciate them without them. I cannot improve so I thank you for that! I also appreciate your reviews i'm honored and humbled to receive them I hope your day is amazing and I thank you so much for reading along!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow. Riveting chapter. This must be what she instinctively saw in you when she invited you to stay in her home: someone who understand and would help. And, oh, how you did. That's a wise comment, too, that realization takes a while to catch up.
Really, really well-done chapter, Lea, that deserves a six that I don't have. I'll promote this, though, and get it up high and entice people to read it.
One little minor spag:
Are you sure you don't want help? You**'re** the mother, maybe it will be differe
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Wow. Riveting chapter. This must be what she instinctively saw in you when she invited you to stay in her home: someone who understand and would help. And, oh, how you did. That's a wise comment, too, that realization takes a while to catch up.
Really, really well-done chapter, Lea, that deserves a six that I don't have. I'll promote this, though, and get it up high and entice people to read it.
One little minor spag:
Are you sure you don't want help? You**'re** the mother, maybe it will be differe
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hi, thank you. Yes, I did go ahead and make those corrections. Appreciate them as you know, I need them to actually be a better writer! I so appreciate it. Thank you again and always my friend!
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You're a quick study. xoxo
Comment from Jacob1395
This was a very powerful scene, Lea. I could feel the emotion, particularly with the children crying for their mother. I was kept engaged right the way through.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This was a very powerful scene, Lea. I could feel the emotion, particularly with the children crying for their mother. I was kept engaged right the way through.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, Jacob. I'm glad you liked it. Appreciate you hanging in there with a little bit alarming at times so I appreciate you hanging in there and offering your thoughts and offering your review. Thank you very much I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Jim Wile
Every aspect of this was very moving, Lea. Your praise of the serenity of nature and the beauty of the mountains set the rest off beautifully, as the world of man can be anything but.
I think your analysis of your mother is spot on. She is afraid of you and what will be revealed about her. If they haven't already, I think people may finally see through her desperation to discredit you. Keep at it!
Now, for your situation at the Indian home: You were incredibly brave to join the fray the way you did without fearing for your own safety, but determined to stop that monster. You may very well have saved that mother's life! I love that this moment strengthened your resolve to never be a victim.
That man sounds like a psychopath, and I now question your friend's willingness to bring you into a situation like that. She must have known how her husband could be. I'm sure she is a very kind person, but I think her judgment in offering her home to you and failing to seek help of any kind leaves plenty to be desired. I'm guessing you'll probably get out of there soon.
How very unlucky you have been to keep finding such abusive people in your life. Makes you wonder how widespread this kind of behavior is and really leaves you with a poor view of mankind. That's so sad. I sincerely hope the good people (or at least the neutral people) outweigh the bad by a lot or there's no hope for mankind. - Jim
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Every aspect of this was very moving, Lea. Your praise of the serenity of nature and the beauty of the mountains set the rest off beautifully, as the world of man can be anything but.
I think your analysis of your mother is spot on. She is afraid of you and what will be revealed about her. If they haven't already, I think people may finally see through her desperation to discredit you. Keep at it!
Now, for your situation at the Indian home: You were incredibly brave to join the fray the way you did without fearing for your own safety, but determined to stop that monster. You may very well have saved that mother's life! I love that this moment strengthened your resolve to never be a victim.
That man sounds like a psychopath, and I now question your friend's willingness to bring you into a situation like that. She must have known how her husband could be. I'm sure she is a very kind person, but I think her judgment in offering her home to you and failing to seek help of any kind leaves plenty to be desired. I'm guessing you'll probably get out of there soon.
How very unlucky you have been to keep finding such abusive people in your life. Makes you wonder how widespread this kind of behavior is and really leaves you with a poor view of mankind. That's so sad. I sincerely hope the good people (or at least the neutral people) outweigh the bad by a lot or there's no hope for mankind. - Jim
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This is a fine review Jim thank you for your thoughts, for your reading along Underfine rating I appreciate this very much have a great day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This nightmare of abuse continues for you and, sadly becomes the norm. But this time you see it as a third person and that has been an epiphany for you because you understand your own strength within and your ability to combat violence. A double-edged sword for just as your stability starts to be realised in your new setting, it still seems quite tenuous. Once again, an excellent write with your accompanying notes an absolute delight to read. Small edits: Pe(e)king my head round the corner; You('re) the mother maybe it will be different... Take care Lea. Debbie xo
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This nightmare of abuse continues for you and, sadly becomes the norm. But this time you see it as a third person and that has been an epiphany for you because you understand your own strength within and your ability to combat violence. A double-edged sword for just as your stability starts to be realised in your new setting, it still seems quite tenuous. Once again, an excellent write with your accompanying notes an absolute delight to read. Small edits: Pe(e)king my head round the corner; You('re) the mother maybe it will be different... Take care Lea. Debbie xo
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hi Debbie thank you so much for the edit suggestions. I went ahead and fixed them right away, I appreciate those as you know, they're very important. Don't learn if I don't know kind of thing and I'm starting to thank you very much. I appreciate you always and forever. Have yourself a great afternoon!
Comment from BethShelby
This is another excellent chapter. It is good that you could help her or he might have killed her. I wonder if having you there is contributing to his anger. She is someone who tries to calm him with a soothing voice. You didn't say if he was drunk or just angry. I am like you about mountains. I love them. I live very near the Smoky Mts. There are mountains around where I live. I love your poem. You should enter some of your poetry in contests.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. It is good that you could help her or he might have killed her. I wonder if having you there is contributing to his anger. She is someone who tries to calm him with a soothing voice. You didn't say if he was drunk or just angry. I am like you about mountains. I love them. I live very near the Smoky Mts. There are mountains around where I live. I love your poem. You should enter some of your poetry in contests.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Beth, that's a nice compliment. I'm glad you liked too for reading again. As I'm happy to have you here as always and having your thoughts is also a great gift. There's nothing like living With mountains around you reminds us of the power of the earth hand moves it. Thank you so much!