Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Navada,
This is a well written retelling of the shepherd's story. I like how he is trying to convince his rabbi that what he says is true. It seems that throughout he is responding to comments and questions from his rabbi.
I like how strong he is in his faith and wanting his rabbi to believe and convert.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! :)

reply by dragonpoet on 31-Dec-2023

You are most kindly welcome, Navada.
Joan

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very nice and lovely poem you have penned for Christmas. You used very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery from the artwork you used. Best wishes in the contest! Teri

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023

Thank you! :)

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Not a writer or student of poetry, I rarely take time out to read. But every great once in a while, I try to enjoy a few poems and hope the rhythm and rhymes will stick. :-) Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023

Thank you! :)

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This is a wonderful, well written piece of free verse poetry in which you have vividly described the experience of one of the shepherds in the field very well. I enjoyed your narration. Good luck.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thank you for your kind words, Wendyanne! xx

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Hi Navada,
Beautiful image, background colour and font...and of course your words.
I wish you the very very best in the upscoming contest,
Lisa, in rather chilly Spain

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thanks so much, Lisa! :)

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This brings the nativity story to life so evocatively as told through the voice of the shepherd speaking to the rabbi. It builds in wonderment towards the scene of the miraculous child in the manger and ends in transformative belief. Well done, Nevada, and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thank you so much, Debbie! :)

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Long, but this fits the form of a narrative. I love the tone of voice you have created here, with the innocence of the young shepherd telling his tale. It works really well.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thank you! :)

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

Quite some effort has gone into this poem. I enjoyed your approach and the story was interestingly told. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas and that you keep writing. Take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thank you, Barry! :)

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Nice story. In my opinion , I think this poem would have made a much better short story. All the scrolling detracts from the story. The story is interesting you have a gift for storytelling you should explore more fully, have a good week. Karen

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thanks, Karen.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 11-Dec-2023

:=)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A great meditation on that part of Luke 2 from a shepherd's point of view after that astounding encounter with the angels who gave them the good news. I half expected that the little lamb would be offered but since it's injured, I guess it could not be the right gift. I like how you created the caring heart of the shepherd.

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 Comment Written 11-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! Yes, that was the intention. :)