Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Mr. D Part 3"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
10 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Oops, I read this out of order. But I like all your descriptions here. It flows logically and cohesively.
Small suggestion: You have purple fingerprint marks
I would maybe say: You have purple stranglehold marks
or
You have purple finger marks
Also here:
So I concentrated on the task at hand thinking maybe they went out in which case they would not hear me at all. By then I had only one idea
I would put a comma after hand and a long dash after out.
And the last part needs some kind of punctuation, probably a colon, so:
But then I had only one idea: get out of this room. And get out fast.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Oops, I read this out of order. But I like all your descriptions here. It flows logically and cohesively.
Small suggestion: You have purple fingerprint marks
I would maybe say: You have purple stranglehold marks
or
You have purple finger marks
Also here:
So I concentrated on the task at hand thinking maybe they went out in which case they would not hear me at all. By then I had only one idea
I would put a comma after hand and a long dash after out.
And the last part needs some kind of punctuation, probably a colon, so:
But then I had only one idea: get out of this room. And get out fast.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Thank you again my friend appreciate this so much and your suggestions. For edit let you know are very valuable to me thanks again!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. The holiday season upon us, the most depressing time of the year for many. And the continuous celebration, cheer, and merriment only gives unhappy glimpses of everything us lonely souls are missing out on. But like you, I'm happy for everyone with family and friends to spend it with. Restaurants closed and nowhere to go, but a movie theater crowded with rude people. Bah humbug. No, I don't mean that at all. If we have our health, we have it all, everything else can be replaced with better. Where hope remains, happiness awaits you.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. The holiday season upon us, the most depressing time of the year for many. And the continuous celebration, cheer, and merriment only gives unhappy glimpses of everything us lonely souls are missing out on. But like you, I'm happy for everyone with family and friends to spend it with. Restaurants closed and nowhere to go, but a movie theater crowded with rude people. Bah humbug. No, I don't mean that at all. If we have our health, we have it all, everything else can be replaced with better. Where hope remains, happiness awaits you.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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That's very wonderful thing to say thank you very much! I would say I slowly. People will have to keep in touch over the holidays as one reviewer said. Send each other virtual hugs! Thank you again Ric! Thank you for your thoughts you're awareness and you're clear thinking and your fine review!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
first I would like to address your feelings of loneliness during the holidays. It seems that the holidays have been so blown out of proportion as far as expectations go. While it's a great time to spend with families, if your family is dysfunctional, there's no desire to spend time with them. There are, however a large number of people who for one reason or another don't have anyone to spend the holidays with. Perhaps a trip to a hospital to visit someone without a family or a trip to an old folks home would help to brighten your day as well as those you visited. There is so much need for compassion in the world, it would be a good chance to offer someone else some much needed love.
This chapter is interesting. I'm glad you've come to your senses and realized that basically you're being held prisoner by a violent lunatic. Mrs. D is apparently a victim of her culture, but you shouldn't have to worry about her at this point. I hope that after you got out you were more selective about who you held company with. Thanks for sharing gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Hello Lea,
first I would like to address your feelings of loneliness during the holidays. It seems that the holidays have been so blown out of proportion as far as expectations go. While it's a great time to spend with families, if your family is dysfunctional, there's no desire to spend time with them. There are, however a large number of people who for one reason or another don't have anyone to spend the holidays with. Perhaps a trip to a hospital to visit someone without a family or a trip to an old folks home would help to brighten your day as well as those you visited. There is so much need for compassion in the world, it would be a good chance to offer someone else some much needed love.
This chapter is interesting. I'm glad you've come to your senses and realized that basically you're being held prisoner by a violent lunatic. Mrs. D is apparently a victim of her culture, but you shouldn't have to worry about her at this point. I hope that after you got out you were more selective about who you held company with. Thanks for sharing gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Unfortunately Tom and those days. All I knew was what I was familiar with. And I gravitate to that familiarity. It took me a while to realize that there's other things in the world. Besides that, and then I could look Outside the box. And know that there Are different ways of living. But I knew so little about the time I knew nothing. Only what was familiar to me. Course I don't know that it's time. I just know that stuff keeps going on and on throughout my life. And that's why I want to tell this story. Because abuse doesn't end when you walk away from the abuser. The behavior's the pain all that protected me and the sense survival all of that followed me. I lived my life like that and didn't realize that there was another way to live. But I learned at this time. I just didn't know. However, my lessons all came to hardware. I can only say I was certainly not prepared for the world at all. Or how to deal with the people in it. Or the people. I can see a pattern along the way. And that is many of them with the same kind of people. Hindsight is always 20. However, Tom your heart felt comments. Your wonderful review all the wonderful and fabulous thing. S you have to say reach my heart in every way and I appreciate you so very much. Thank you again!
Comment from JSD
Don't worry. I'll be alone at Christmas too. We can share virtual hugs.
Escape. Peace. All great concepts. I remain in eternal hope that you will find both.
John x
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Don't worry. I'll be alone at Christmas too. We can share virtual hugs.
Escape. Peace. All great concepts. I remain in eternal hope that you will find both.
John x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you John that sounds great! Thank you again for reading and offering your fine rating too!
Comment from BethShelby
I can understand the woman not wanting to lose her children. Likely the culture believe the man owned the wife and children and whatever he did to them would be his right to do. You must have been making her very nervous with you desire to get out. I'm anxious to see what you do to escape.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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I can understand the woman not wanting to lose her children. Likely the culture believe the man owned the wife and children and whatever he did to them would be his right to do. You must have been making her very nervous with you desire to get out. I'm anxious to see what you do to escape.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you. Beth, glad you're here is always hope you're having a good day and that your holiday will be amazing too! Thank you again for your review and your kind word I always appreciate you! Have a great day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I too find Christmas a difficult time, Lea. Not for the reasons you have but because there is so much expectation from a single day and that, in turn, can cause so much stress for those feeling disconnected. That disconnect can exist even when you've got family around you. So don't concern yourself that it might be wrong to want the season over and done with. You're not alone. You're just someone who feels freer in the mountains and forests because they put less demand on you or remind you of the cruelty that family can inflict. You're a strong lady who's overcome a lot of challenges and are still standing. Your excellent chapter, once more, is proof of that spirit of defiance and independence. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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I too find Christmas a difficult time, Lea. Not for the reasons you have but because there is so much expectation from a single day and that, in turn, can cause so much stress for those feeling disconnected. That disconnect can exist even when you've got family around you. So don't concern yourself that it might be wrong to want the season over and done with. You're not alone. You're just someone who feels freer in the mountains and forests because they put less demand on you or remind you of the cruelty that family can inflict. You're a strong lady who's overcome a lot of challenges and are still standing. Your excellent chapter, once more, is proof of that spirit of defiance and independence. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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That's a very wonderful thing to say and great review too. I'd appreciate this event. I appreciate this so very much! Thank you my friend have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You had the right idea here Lea, self preservation is paramount in our minds at this point and I am with you all the way, you just have to leave, with or without Mrs D.
It is sometimes scary to be alone, but sometimes you can only rely on yourself because other people are not always on your side. I have felt this on more than one occasion Lea
Another fine chapter, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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You had the right idea here Lea, self preservation is paramount in our minds at this point and I am with you all the way, you just have to leave, with or without Mrs D.
It is sometimes scary to be alone, but sometimes you can only rely on yourself because other people are not always on your side. I have felt this on more than one occasion Lea
Another fine chapter, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thank you Dolly! You are very I insightful and understand much. A very sensible and experienced mind you have thanking again for this!
Comment from Jim Wile
Between the frustration you feel with Mrs. D. and her situation, your being locked in the basement by her crazy husband, and your need to pee real bad, I can really feel your discomfort and rage building for this untenable situation. Mr. D. has no idea who he's dealing with with you. He is used to someone who is subservient and seems to accept whatever he doles out, but that's not you. Whether or not you can help Mrs. D., someone who sees herself as stuck, I know you'll get out of this and perhaps make him rue the day he crossed you. I love the confidence you are beginning to build up and the refusal to just sit by and be abused any longer.
My heart goes out to you during this season, Lea. I wish there was someone close to you who you could share the joy of the season with. Perhaps my gift to you, which should arrive very soon, will bring a few laughs your way. I will certainly be thinking of you. - Jim
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Between the frustration you feel with Mrs. D. and her situation, your being locked in the basement by her crazy husband, and your need to pee real bad, I can really feel your discomfort and rage building for this untenable situation. Mr. D. has no idea who he's dealing with with you. He is used to someone who is subservient and seems to accept whatever he doles out, but that's not you. Whether or not you can help Mrs. D., someone who sees herself as stuck, I know you'll get out of this and perhaps make him rue the day he crossed you. I love the confidence you are beginning to build up and the refusal to just sit by and be abused any longer.
My heart goes out to you during this season, Lea. I wish there was someone close to you who you could share the joy of the season with. Perhaps my gift to you, which should arrive very soon, will bring a few laughs your way. I will certainly be thinking of you. - Jim
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Jim, you're very thoughtful. I appreciate this very much. I you have a great fantastic day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. It's another good write. I hope there's an escape where nobody gets hurt.
Then I thought to myself," What the fuck are you doing? (thought should be in italics and a space after the comma)
I cannot go." She replied. (go," she)
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. It's another good write. I hope there's an escape where nobody gets hurt.
Then I thought to myself," What the fuck are you doing? (thought should be in italics and a space after the comma)
I cannot go." She replied. (go," she)
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2023
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Hi Barbara! I went ahead and made those changes too. Thank you! I appreciate your reviews. Your fine rating and your awesome suggestions a great gift to me and I thank you very much for it!
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Great writing again. I notice your chapters are getting smaller and smaller.
Is that by choice?
Some family wants you for Christmas. Sometimes family isnt blood its those close to us.
Great writing
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Great writing again. I notice your chapters are getting smaller and smaller.
Is that by choice?
Some family wants you for Christmas. Sometimes family isnt blood its those close to us.
Great writing
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Further to My message thank you again for this fine reviewing rating!