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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from Ulla
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No Marival, you don't want to die before you've done all of the above.
I loved this poem and the imagery was what drew me in. I loved it. It is so very well written. I have to try this poetic form Un besito y abrazos, Ulla xcx





 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
    Thank you very much for the lovely review. May you have a wonderful weekend

    gypsy hugs


Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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I don't want to die expresses the need to live. Some people are afraid of dying; they are never ready to leave their families. To say goodbye is not an easy thing.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
    thank you very much for the wonderful review, may you have a fabulous weekend.

    gypsy
Comment from Douglas Goff
Exceptional
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Me neither! You really have a knack for making your reader feel like they are right there with you.

Wonderful piece. Very haunting night-like colors. Love it!

A six star for me.
Douglas.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    Thank you very much, Douglas, I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words! You are always so nice to me. Big hugs and kisses

    Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I liked the use of repetition on with this poem. The passion and sentiment were obvious. This is another wonderful poem and presentation. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
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the second one has rhyme (cry/die)

a great gogyohka suite with vivid and colorful imagery and a smooth flow of words
nice deep feelings of unrequited love within the lines

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from teafor2
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Gypsy: I like the saturation of poetics, especially the similes (like a motherless child; like a tight tango dance) and enjambment: The lack of
punhciation allows reader(s) to negotiate the cinquains via a smooth flowing read). Hyperbole is also front and center in this intense distance romance. The picture compliments this multi-colored offering (which caused a 'slight' distraction for this eyeglass wearing reader). I enjoyed this
well written piece of poetry. teafor2

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    I'm sorry about the font color. I usually add a black ink copy in my author notes.

    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by teafor2 on 14-Feb-2024
    Thanks for your gracious looking out for us glass wearing folks...Shucks, I was gonna read that great poem regardless of my old bad eyes:) teafor2
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is well written and full of emotion and full descriptions. I like the repetition and the image presentation is fantastic!

Blessings,

Alexan

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    Thank you very much, Alexan 😊
Comment from Ricky1024
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Thanks for this Gypsy.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Note:To die is bad enough but alone.
Yes, is one of the reasons that after age 69.
I remarried almost Nine
months ago.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
"No Man is an Island"
John Donne

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    Congratulations on your wedding. :)

    Thank you very much, Dr Ricky
Comment from Gloria ....
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Good use of repetition here with the I don't want to die line and the desire for union with true love can indeed be compared the heavenly glory.

Beautiful presentation and poem. Much enjoyed. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
    Oh, that's interesting. It's not about religion but it can be.

    Thank you very much, Gloria 😊 have a wonderful day

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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I like how you list the experiences that the narrator longs for and these are the reasons why she doesn't want to leave this world too soon. But I think life in Heaven will be so much better than we can imagine!

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 Comment Written 13-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
    yes, this is just a poem 😊

    Thank you, big sister, you always get my poems. I hope you are having a wonderful day.

    Love,
    MariVal