Willing Hearts
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like how you opened up this chapter with the reader wanting her to open that note. We understand why she wouldn't. Probably some of us could identify but we want her to open that note.
Great irony: "Outside a farmer's market. He was getting a watermelon. From what I can gather it was a targeted drive-by." Well done
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I like how you opened up this chapter with the reader wanting her to open that note. We understand why she wouldn't. Probably some of us could identify but we want her to open that note.
Great irony: "Outside a farmer's market. He was getting a watermelon. From what I can gather it was a targeted drive-by." Well done
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Thank you for going back and reading an earlier chapter. I'm sorry you had to read it with no money attached.
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The ones I get I money ready for the next post I can go to these other back ones whether they pay money or not.
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That's sweet. Thank you. I appreciate you.
Comment from lancellot
This one is very heavy on the character conversations, but it shows their good will and the connection between them. Even a bullet can't keep Noah down, good thing it missed all the important organs.
Nicely written chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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This one is very heavy on the character conversations, but it shows their good will and the connection between them. Even a bullet can't keep Noah down, good thing it missed all the important organs.
Nicely written chapter.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. It's a good thing he had his bullet proof vest on.
Comment from gramalot8
Hi Barbara. I've been gone off and on the last couple of years but back for now. I always enjoyed reading your stories. I haven't read the previous chapters before this one but it sounds like a very intriguing storyline. I'll have to go back and read them.
You always have great dialogue that makes your characters very believable.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Hi Barbara. I've been gone off and on the last couple of years but back for now. I always enjoyed reading your stories. I haven't read the previous chapters before this one but it sounds like a very intriguing storyline. I'll have to go back and read them.
You always have great dialogue that makes your characters very believable.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Thank you for returning and leaving this kind review. I've missed you.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Things are beefing up for Noah and Sami, and I hope the friendship continues to grow. Perhaps one day, there will be love in the air for Noah, if not already.
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Things are beefing up for Noah and Sami, and I hope the friendship continues to grow. Perhaps one day, there will be love in the air for Noah, if not already.
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Since, this is a romance, I feel romance will eventually be in the air. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Barbara,
I enjoyed this chapter a lot. I love the way you wove the backstory about Noah with the conversation between Sami and Sarah. It is always helpful to have the information WITHOUT there being narrative - but you know that. Thank you for sharing, and I will wait patiently (?) for the next chapter,
~patty~
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Hi Barbara,
I enjoyed this chapter a lot. I love the way you wove the backstory about Noah with the conversation between Sami and Sarah. It is always helpful to have the information WITHOUT there being narrative - but you know that. Thank you for sharing, and I will wait patiently (?) for the next chapter,
~patty~
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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I'm sure you know I prefer to us dialogue as much as I can to move the story along. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
this was a good chapter. Having Noah get shot was an interesting turn of events. Thank God for Kevlar vests. That bruise looks nasty. I still don't understand why Sami can't understand that Noah saved her from a really unpleasant situation. Perhaps his willingness to take a bullet for her will change her way of thinking. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Hello Barbara,
this was a good chapter. Having Noah get shot was an interesting turn of events. Thank God for Kevlar vests. That bruise looks nasty. I still don't understand why Sami can't understand that Noah saved her from a really unpleasant situation. Perhaps his willingness to take a bullet for her will change her way of thinking. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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I can promise Sami will soften. She is already starting to. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I am continuing to enjoy this. I like that we know a little more about Noah's character and now we see more of Sarah. I think the ice between Noah and Sami has finally been broken. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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I am continuing to enjoy this. I like that we know a little more about Noah's character and now we see more of Sarah. I think the ice between Noah and Sami has finally been broken. I really enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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The is melting. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Suspense in this story. I keep wondering if Sami will find the kidnapped girl and they'll be set free to live a life of freedom. I guess we'll have to wait and see. Is this book lengthy?
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Suspense in this story. I keep wondering if Sami will find the kidnapped girl and they'll be set free to live a life of freedom. I guess we'll have to wait and see. Is this book lengthy?
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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This story is around 90000 words. Not my longest, but about average for me. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Afraid of sounding like a stuck record, I just can't help dwelling on the fact that it's hard for me picturing you writing this story. But you're doing a great job and I'm enjoying every minute. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Afraid of sounding like a stuck record, I just can't help dwelling on the fact that it's hard for me picturing you writing this story. But you're doing a great job and I'm enjoying every minute. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you for being you. I appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Noah's a liar. I should've thrown it away. Why haven't I?" This is a good question. If Sami feels that strongly about Noah it would appear she would not want, nor keep, anything associated with him.
What does Noah have to hide even his ex-long term partner could never drag out of him? Having a deep, dark, secret adds another level of mystery to Noah's character.
Noah afraid to "show any emotions" is a good method to help ensure people do not get too close to him.
Gruff, frustrating, and demanding are all means to show Noah's leadership style.
"Just say what want" should be Just say what you want.
Sami appears to sing a different, more concerned, tune upon hearing Noah has been shot. This is also a dramatic scene shift from Sami's previous feelings about Noah. However, she does still harbor ill feelings towards Noah's act of "buying her," which Chen did not like.
In your Notes the A??A?A after "Vest" needs to be deleted.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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"Noah's a liar. I should've thrown it away. Why haven't I?" This is a good question. If Sami feels that strongly about Noah it would appear she would not want, nor keep, anything associated with him.
What does Noah have to hide even his ex-long term partner could never drag out of him? Having a deep, dark, secret adds another level of mystery to Noah's character.
Noah afraid to "show any emotions" is a good method to help ensure people do not get too close to him.
Gruff, frustrating, and demanding are all means to show Noah's leadership style.
"Just say what want" should be Just say what you want.
Sami appears to sing a different, more concerned, tune upon hearing Noah has been shot. This is also a dramatic scene shift from Sami's previous feelings about Noah. However, she does still harbor ill feelings towards Noah's act of "buying her," which Chen did not like.
In your Notes the A??A?A after "Vest" needs to be deleted.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Not sure how those interesting characters got in my notes. I have also added the 'you. Thank you for the detailed review. I appreciate it.