2024 Japanese Poetry
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8 total reviews
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, great analogy, being left and being stranded on the ocean in a tiny boat at the mercy of the elements; that's the way it seems at times, unmoored
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, great analogy, being left and being stranded on the ocean in a tiny boat at the mercy of the elements; that's the way it seems at times, unmoored
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, Marival, that is a cold shoulder I go I'd ever come across one. I loved it he poem and I really like the form. I have to try it one of these days. Un abrazo, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Oh dear, Marival, that is a cold shoulder I go I'd ever come across one. I loved it he poem and I really like the form. I have to try it one of these days. Un abrazo, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words, Ulla.
Besitos y abrazos
Marival
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh this was cool.
deep and thought-provoking
great imagistic word choices
smooth flow throughout...
nice one!! and cool pics, too!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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ooh this was cool.
deep and thought-provoking
great imagistic word choices
smooth flow throughout...
nice one!! and cool pics, too!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Again, great metaphors. The words 'that I haven't been drenched in cold waves' are perfect for causing your readers to feel the abandonment and the passion of the situation. Once again, a wonderful presentation.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Again, great metaphors. The words 'that I haven't been drenched in cold waves' are perfect for causing your readers to feel the abandonment and the passion of the situation. Once again, a wonderful presentation.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from RJ Heritage
This is a well written Gogyohka poem. Your words are deep and passionate. These Haiku and Japanese style seem to be your style of choice. I was just wondering if you have work in other forms.
Beautiful and expressive.
RJ
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This is a well written Gogyohka poem. Your words are deep and passionate. These Haiku and Japanese style seem to be your style of choice. I was just wondering if you have work in other forms.
Beautiful and expressive.
RJ
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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I work in all kinds of Japanese poetry... there are many, free verse, and prose.
Thank you
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You?re welcome, and thank you.
RJ
Comment from tfawcus
I like the cohesive nature of the Gogyohka, which allows the development of a rich metaphor such as the one you have created here. Thank you for introducing me to yet another Japanese short form.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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I like the cohesive nature of the Gogyohka, which allows the development of a rich metaphor such as the one you have created here. Thank you for introducing me to yet another Japanese short form.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Those "cold waves" of abandonment is a result of the one who left and given the "cold shoulder." That is so heartless. You used the boat and water imagery well throughout.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Those "cold waves" of abandonment is a result of the one who left and given the "cold shoulder." That is so heartless. You used the boat and water imagery well throughout.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, big sister. You always understand my poetic intentions.
Love
Marival
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very powerful message in this Japanese format. I enjoyed listening to it very much and I wish you a very good weekend and may you have the blessings of God on your life. Patricia .
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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This is a very powerful message in this Japanese format. I enjoyed listening to it very much and I wish you a very good weekend and may you have the blessings of God on your life. Patricia .
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs