One Day In Camden
A chance encounter with the past...16 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
Your vivid description and emotions entwined in the poem leads the reader through a chance moment, a time to rethink what ifs of the past, but its water under the bridge and lives have moved forward not back. Very well written.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Your vivid description and emotions entwined in the poem leads the reader through a chance moment, a time to rethink what ifs of the past, but its water under the bridge and lives have moved forward not back. Very well written.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you, Carol.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Okay, I love the realistic sounding dialogue. It is spot-on.
Also this piece is excellently descriptive. Your writing made this reader feel like he was there. That is a talent, Shirley. Nicely done!
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reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Okay, I love the realistic sounding dialogue. It is spot-on.
Also this piece is excellently descriptive. Your writing made this reader feel like he was there. That is a talent, Shirley. Nicely done!
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Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 02-May-2024
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Thank you, Douglas.
Comment from juliaSjames
Excellent entry for this no rules contest. The poem is visual and emotional and tells a powerful story. There are no rules for a chance encounter with an old flame. Sometimes there's a spark left that can ignite passion again. Sometimes the meeting is like sifting through cold ashes, a pointless dirty job.
I was drawn in by the title since I lived in London for many years
Skillfully scribed, poet! Good luck with the Contest Committee !
Blessings, Julia
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Excellent entry for this no rules contest. The poem is visual and emotional and tells a powerful story. There are no rules for a chance encounter with an old flame. Sometimes there's a spark left that can ignite passion again. Sometimes the meeting is like sifting through cold ashes, a pointless dirty job.
I was drawn in by the title since I lived in London for many years
Skillfully scribed, poet! Good luck with the Contest Committee !
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Hi Julia. Thank you so much for the great comments. This contest has already been voted. I came 2nd which I'm very happy with :)
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Congratulations, Shirley!!!!
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Thank you, Julia x
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, One Day in Camden, is a powerful encounter with the speaker trying to figure out how best to deal with an old flame. The sad ending leads the reader to realize that the past lover was now simply a broken and humbled parent who has lost a child.
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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This poem, One Day in Camden, is a powerful encounter with the speaker trying to figure out how best to deal with an old flame. The sad ending leads the reader to realize that the past lover was now simply a broken and humbled parent who has lost a child.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Hi Bill,
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from EeanBlack
You always pull my heart into the read. That is not a good thing for me. Is is a good thing for the read. This was a little dark. Pain done well Shirley. Pain does what it wants anyway.
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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You always pull my heart into the read. That is not a good thing for me. Is is a good thing for the read. This was a little dark. Pain done well Shirley. Pain does what it wants anyway.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thanks, Eean. I appreciate you reading.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
When viewing the past in an instant and many years later, so much water has gone under the bridge, lives change and we can never fill in the missed years. There is a lot of emotion within this post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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When viewing the past in an instant and many years later, so much water has gone under the bridge, lives change and we can never fill in the missed years. There is a lot of emotion within this post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Dolly x
Comment from GoWiSt
Good complementary picture art choice.
Good imagery, as I was put right into the scene, observing the couple and their surroundings.
I like how you juxtaposed inner thoughts with dialogue, showiig the contrast between inner turmoil and outward appearance.
A well crated piece here. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Good complementary picture art choice.
Good imagery, as I was put right into the scene, observing the couple and their surroundings.
I like how you juxtaposed inner thoughts with dialogue, showiig the contrast between inner turmoil and outward appearance.
A well crated piece here. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much. I value your words.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Stay away from that person they are poison.Did you notice "she was having a baby" not we. He didn't make it, to garner sympathy. Run like the wind and don't look back. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Stay away from that person they are poison.Did you notice "she was having a baby" not we. He didn't make it, to garner sympathy. Run like the wind and don't look back. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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It's ok, Karen. It's fictional and at 71 I doubt I could run like a guinea pig let alone the wind! Thank you for caring and the generous review x
Comment from hullabaloo22
This is absolutely amazing. A chance encounter on a rainy grey day and all those memories come flooding back. I liked the way you used a different font for the internal dialogue, the words bursting to be spoken but held in check.
So deserving of the six stars.
Oh, and the picture was perfect too.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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This is absolutely amazing. A chance encounter on a rainy grey day and all those memories come flooding back. I liked the way you used a different font for the internal dialogue, the words bursting to be spoken but held in check.
So deserving of the six stars.
Oh, and the picture was perfect too.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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A sixer!!! Thank you so much, hullabloo. I so appreciate it :)
Comment from gansach
This is an excellent piece of writing in any genre. Two lifetimes unwinding in a present encounter. I am there in the chilly rain, breathing in the atmosphere, watching it unfold. The structure is intriguing, the rhyme subtle, the emotions palpable. Excellent effort.Best wishes!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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This is an excellent piece of writing in any genre. Two lifetimes unwinding in a present encounter. I am there in the chilly rain, breathing in the atmosphere, watching it unfold. The structure is intriguing, the rhyme subtle, the emotions palpable. Excellent effort.Best wishes!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Wow, thank you for this brilliant review and rating and especially for spotting the typo x
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I revised my review to delete the error line. Good luck!
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Thank you so much x