Spring Thaw
a Visser sonnet16 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Thank you for introducing us to the Visser Sonnet. I liked the fact that it did not necessarily rhyme at the end of a sentence, and I enjoyed reading it, as it read as someone throwing out thoughts in the hopes that Spring had returned and would bring the beauty that comes from the Winter's freezes.
Take care,
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you for introducing us to the Visser Sonnet. I liked the fact that it did not necessarily rhyme at the end of a sentence, and I enjoyed reading it, as it read as someone throwing out thoughts in the hopes that Spring had returned and would bring the beauty that comes from the Winter's freezes.
Take care,
xo
Pam
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you, Pam. I enjoyed sharing this sonnet form and am very pleased to know you like it. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This Visser sonnet, Spring Thaw, has the proper formatting and sounds as good as signs of spring would feel as they appear and touch the readers or observers' hearts and souls. Nice.
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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This Visser sonnet, Spring Thaw, has the proper formatting and sounds as good as signs of spring would feel as they appear and touch the readers or observers' hearts and souls. Nice.
Comment Written 01-May-2024
reply by the author on 01-May-2024
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Thank you very much, Bill, for sharing my Visser. I hope Spring has arrived where you live. Rod
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. Spring is my favorite time of.the year. Your poetry is descriptive and written well. Good luck in the contest. The picture is a nice choice for the poem.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Spring is my favorite time of.the year. Your poetry is descriptive and written well. Good luck in the contest. The picture is a nice choice for the poem.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Brenda, I am delighted you enjoyed my sonnet and accompanying picture. I think Spring has finally arrived where I live and plans to stay a spell.
Comment from Mark Jackson
This is a beautifully crafted poem that celebrates the arrival of spring and the hope it brings for renewal and growth. Its vivid imagery, structured form, and optimistic tone make it a delightful read that captures the essence of the season.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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This is a beautifully crafted poem that celebrates the arrival of spring and the hope it brings for renewal and growth. Its vivid imagery, structured form, and optimistic tone make it a delightful read that captures the essence of the season.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much, Mark, for this terrific review of my sonnet.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Thanks for including an explanation of the Visser sonnet. Sounds complicated but with this form you give us a glimpse of spring determined to burst forth and stay, in spite of the slowly melting snow. Beautiful descriptions.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thanks for including an explanation of the Visser sonnet. Sounds complicated but with this form you give us a glimpse of spring determined to burst forth and stay, in spite of the slowly melting snow. Beautiful descriptions.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Ginda, for sharing and praising my sonnet. The Visser form is not seen often and I am pleased you like it.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the No Restrictions Poetry writing prompt. I had not heard of a Visser sonnet prior to this but it seems to meet the criteria and in a very nice way. I love to learn about new poem formats. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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An excellent entry for the No Restrictions Poetry writing prompt. I had not heard of a Visser sonnet prior to this but it seems to meet the criteria and in a very nice way. I love to learn about new poem formats. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I am delighted I could introduce you to a new poetry form, Marilyn. Many thanks for the kind praise of my Visser.
Comment from Wendy G
Very beautifully composed. How important, and how refreshing it is to be a close observer of nature and its changing seasons. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Very beautifully composed. How important, and how refreshing it is to be a close observer of nature and its changing seasons. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I am so pleased you like my sonnet, Wendy, and much appreciate the kudos.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your attempt at this form, but a Visser sonnet has internal rhyming on the sixth syllable and you have rhymed your sonnet on the last syllable. Your notes are correct, but you have not followed the rules.
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I did, however enjoy your poem, as you present spring in a unique way.
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed your attempt at this form, but a Visser sonnet has internal rhyming on the sixth syllable and you have rhymed your sonnet on the last syllable. Your notes are correct, but you have not followed the rules.
This is the rhyming scheme you should follow for this sonnet:
Rhyming on the Sixth syllable:
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I did, however enjoy your poem, as you present spring in a unique way.
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Hi, Dolly. I am glad you like my poem though it may not be a TRUE Visser according to the rules you cite. My source never mentioned a specific rhyme scheme for internal rhymes. Thank you for the info.
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You are welcome x
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing this Visser sonnet form! I like it! I know some people balk at end rhymes because they consider all rhyming poetry doggerel. So you could win some people over this way with a more naturally flowing rhyme scattered in between. And you still make great use of alliteration and personification (love those impatient daffodils). My favorite line was "Or sprout from crevices in fissured wood?"
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing this Visser sonnet form! I like it! I know some people balk at end rhymes because they consider all rhyming poetry doggerel. So you could win some people over this way with a more naturally flowing rhyme scattered in between. And you still make great use of alliteration and personification (love those impatient daffodils). My favorite line was "Or sprout from crevices in fissured wood?"
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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I am very pleased you enjoyed this rarely-employed sonnet form, lyenochka. As you well know, I write that "doggerel" mostly, so I hope to win new fans with this one. Thank you also for specifying your favorite line.
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
This is a lovely poem of spring hope in that nature will always find ways of surviving.
'Although still hampered by slow-melting snow,
Impatient daffodils rise everywhere.
Green shoots peep up and wriggle toward the sun'
I loved these lines. Well written Thank you.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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This is a lovely poem of spring hope in that nature will always find ways of surviving.
'Although still hampered by slow-melting snow,
Impatient daffodils rise everywhere.
Green shoots peep up and wriggle toward the sun'
I loved these lines. Well written Thank you.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your praise of my sonnet, Shirley, and for specifying which lines you like.